Emails— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời tự nhiên, ngắn gọn và đúng trọng tâm nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách thêm một câu dẫn/khẳng định rõ ràng đầu tiên (topic sentence mạnh hơn) và một ví dụ cụ thể để minh họa. Ngoài ra lưu ý tránh lặp từ (ví dụ: “instant messaging apps” và “for quick conversations” có thể nối mạch mượt hơn bằng liên từ).

예시: Yes, I send emails every day for professional purposes. For instance, I email colleagues to share project updates and official documents, whereas I use instant messaging apps like WeChat for quick, informal chats.

제안: Nội dung cụ thể nhưng câu hơi liệt kê thiếu liên kết; nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng liên từ để nối các mục và đưa vào một ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ: một loại email bạn gửi thường xuyên). Chú ý ngữ pháp nhỏ (use “work-related” có dấu gạch nối).

예시: I typically send emails for work-related matters, formal inquiries and academic purposes. For example, I often email my professor to ask about assignment deadlines, and I receive order confirmations by email when I shop online.

제안: Ý chính rõ ràng nhưng câu thứ hai có lặp từ và cấu trúc hơi lộn; cần sửa để trôi chảy hơn, tránh lặp “often” và dùng cấu trúc so sánh ngắn gọn. Có thể bổ sung một ví dụ cụ thể về ứng dụng phổ biến để tăng tính cụ thể.

예시: Yes, email is widely used in workplaces, schools and official institutions in China. However, for personal communication most people prefer messaging apps such as WeChat or social media platforms for faster, more casual conversations.

제안: Ý tưởng tốt và cân bằng, nhưng có một lỗi từ vựng nhỏ (“are sifting” sai; nên dùng “shift” hoặc “move”). Có thể làm câu mạch lạc hơn bằng cách dùng linking words và một dự đoán cụ thể về vai trò của email trong công việc hoặc pháp lý để tăng tính thuyết phục.

예시: I believe email will remain important for formal and official communication but become less common for casual chats. As people shift to instant messaging and collaborative tools, email will still be essential for sending contracts, detailed reports and official notifications.

× Yes, I use e-mail daily, mainly for work and professional communication. However, for quick conversations I rely more on instant messaging apps.

✓ Yes, I use email daily, mainly for work and professional communication. However, for quick conversations I rely more on instant messaging apps.

Original sentence is mostly correct but contains a minor style issue: 'e-mail' vs 'email' is a spelling/style choice. No grammatical error matching the provided list except word choice; keep consistent form. Suggest using 'email' (no hyphen) for consistency and formality. Improve clarity by keeping punctuation consistent. ID:22

× I usually send emails for work related communication, formal inquiries and academic purposes.

✓ I usually send emails for work-related communication, formal inquiries, and academic purposes.

Missing hyphen in compound adjective 'work-related' and missing comma before conjunction in a list. These are article/word-formation and punctuation issues; correction improves clarity. Use a hyphen to link 'work' and 'related' and add a serial comma for clarity. ID:22

× Sometimes I also use e-mail for online purchase, subscriptions and confirmation.

✓ Sometimes I also use email for online purchases, subscriptions, and confirmations.

Countable nouns 'purchase' and 'confirmation' should be plural to match general activities. Use plural forms when speaking about activities in general. Also use 'email' consistently and add serial comma. ID:1

× Yes, e-mail is widely used in China, especially in workplaces, schools and official settings.

✓ Yes, email is widely used in China, especially in workplaces, schools, and official settings.

Minor style: 'e-mail' to 'email' for consistency; add serial comma. No major grammatical error beyond style and punctuation. Keep plural nouns as given. ID:12

× However, for personal conversation, people often, like Chinese, often prefer messaging apps or social media communicate.

✓ However, for personal conversations, people in China often prefer messaging apps or social media for communication.

Problems: repetition of 'often' (redundancy), incorrect phrase order 'social media communicate' and awkward insertion 'like Chinese'. Correct by specifying 'people in China' and changing nouns/phrases: 'personal conversations' (plural), 'social media for communication'. This fixes sentence structure and clarity. ID:16

× E-mail will likely remain relevant but may become less popular for casual communication.

✓ Email will likely remain relevant but may become less popular for casual communication.

No major grammatical error; change 'E-mail' to 'Email' for consistency. Sentence correctly uses future modal 'will' and 'may'. No change in tense needed. ID:4

× With the rise of instant messaging and collaboration platforms, people are sifting to faster, more interactive ways of communication.

✓ With the rise of instant messaging and collaboration platforms, people are shifting to faster, more interactive ways of communicating.

Incorrect verb 'sifting' should be 'shifting' (word choice). Also 'ways of communication' is awkward; 'ways of communicating' (gerund) or 'ways to communicate' is better. This corrects verb choice and gerund use. ID:8

× However, e-mail will still be essential.

✓ However, email will still be essential.

Minor style: use 'email' consistently without hyphen. Sentence is grammatically correct otherwise. ID:22