Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific details (e.g., what made the ad memorable), and finish with a short comment or feeling. Reduce hesitations and filler words, correct small grammar issues (past tense: "was" -> "I was"; avoid repeating words). Use linking words like "for example" or "because" to connect ideas.

예시: Yes. An ice cream commercial impressed me when I was a child. For example, it featured a little girl who looked like me and she was shown enjoying the ice cream with bright colours and happy music. Because the ad felt joyful and relatable, I remember it clearly even now.

제안: Answer directly and clearly, then give one clear example with specific detail. Avoid uncertain phrases like "I don't know" and reduce hesitations. Use past or present consistently (e.g., "I often see" or "I saw"). Include a linking word such as "for example" to structure the response.

예시: Yes, I often see advertisements on trains and buses. For example, I noticed a TransLink poster on the train that asked passengers to scan a QR code for travel updates. Such ads are common on vehicle windows and station platforms.

제안: State your opinion clearly in the first sentence, then explain reasons with supporting details and one linking word (because/so). Avoid repetition and informal fillers. Use correct grammar (e.g., "they consume a lot of your time"; "it's a waste of time").

예시: To be honest, I don't like advertisements because they interrupt movies or videos and waste my time. For example, when I watch a film online, ads often appear every few minutes and break my concentration.

제안: Answer directly (give a type you like or say none), then add a specific contrasting detail. Keep it concise and avoid repeating the same story twice. Use linking words like "however" or "but" to contrast childhood memory with current preference.

예시: I don't really like advertisements now, so I don't have a favourite type. However, as a child I was fascinated by a colourful ice cream commercial that featured a little girl enjoying the treat, which made it memorable.

제안: Begin with a direct answer (Yes/No), then explain with a specific context and a linking word. Avoid repeating words and reduce fillers. Use clearer phrasing such as "I often see ads when using YouTube or websites" and briefly mention how it affects you.

예시: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone and computer. For example, when I watch YouTube videos or browse websites, ads usually appear before or during the content, so I frequently have to wait through them.

× Yes, of course when I, I was a child, everything fascinates me a lot and I was like always so curious about knowing the things, getting deep down in into the things.

✓ Yes, of course when I was a child, everything fascinated me a lot and I was always very curious to learn about things and to get deep into them.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. The context is past ('when I was a child'), so verbs should be in the past tense: 'fascinated' not 'fascinates'. Also 'I was like always' is ungrammatical; use 'I was always'. 'Curious about knowing the things' is awkward; use 'curious to learn about things'. Remove redundant words ('in into') and use 'into them' for clarity. Suggestion: keep tense consistent with the time reference and choose natural verbs and prepositions.

× I remember whenever I watch TV, there was 1 advertisement which is an ice cream advertisement and it was a little girl just like me.

✓ I remember that whenever I watched TV, there was one ice cream advertisement and it featured a little girl just like me.

The clause 'whenever I watch TV' uses present tense while the rest refers to past memory; change to past 'whenever I watched TV' for consistency. 'There was 1 advertisement which is an ice cream advertisement' is wordy and mixes tenses; simplify to 'there was one ice cream advertisement'. Use 'featured' instead of 'was' to describe the subject of the ad.

× She was eating the ice creams and there was a kind of advertisement that uh, that fascinates me a lot.

✓ She was eating ice cream and there was an advertisement that fascinated me a lot.

'The ice creams' is incorrect here; 'ice cream' as a food in this context is uncountable. Use 'an advertisement' instead of 'a kind of advertisement' for clarity. Also change 'fascinates' to past 'fascinated' to match the past context.

× Yes. I saw advertisement on vehicles and on trains a lot.

✓ Yes. I saw advertisements on vehicles and on trains a lot.

'Advertisement' should be plural ('advertisements') when speaking generally. Also use 'on vehicles and trains' (no need for 'on' before both nouns, but it's acceptable). Ensure number agreement with the context.

× I see one uh, one advertisement in train, which is about the BC, umm, the Translink system, something like that.

✓ I saw one advertisement on a train that was about BC's Translink system, something like that.

Use past 'saw' to match previous past narration. Use 'on a train' not 'in train'. 'the BC, the Translink system' is awkward: use 'BC's Translink system' or 'the Translink system' depending on intended meaning. Remove filler words for clarity.

× There was a kind of advertisement that you have to scan AQ or you will get into thing.

✓ There was an advertisement that said you had to scan a QR code or you would get into something.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'an advertisement that said' to report content, change 'you have to' to past 'you had to' for consistency, and correct 'scran AQ' to 'scan a QR code'. 'Get into thing' is unclear; 'get into something' is still vague but grammatically correct—prefer 'get information' if that was intended.

× To be honest, I I hated advertisements because they they consume like so much your time whenever you're watching movie or whenever you looking into your phones and they'll get your advertisement and their visitor, that's a totally wastage of time.

✓ To be honest, I hate advertisements because they consume so much of your time whenever you're watching a movie or looking at your phone; they're a total waste of time.

The speaker expresses a present general dislike, so use present tense 'hate' not past 'hated'. Correct subject-verb agreement: 'they consume' is fine but remove 'like' filler. Use 'watching a movie' and 'looking at your phone'. 'They'll get your advertisement and their visitor' is unclear—replaced with 'they're a total waste of time'. 'Wastage' is awkward here; use 'waste'.

× I I hate watching advertisements.

✓ I hate watching advertisements.

Duplicate 'I' is a speech disfluency and should be removed in writing. No tense change needed here as present 'hate' is appropriate.

× As in the previous question, I mentioned that I hate advertisements, so I don't prefer watching any kind of particular advertisement.

✓ As I mentioned in the previous question, I hate advertisements, so I don't prefer any particular kind of advertisement.

Reorder phrase for natural English: 'As I mentioned in the previous question' and 'any particular kind of advertisement' is the correct expression. 'I don't prefer watching any kind of particular advertisement' is awkward; simplify to 'I don't prefer any particular kind of advertisement'.

× But when I was a child, there was 1 advertisement which fascinates me a lot.

✓ But when I was a child, there was one advertisement that fascinated me a lot.

Use past tense 'fascinated' to match 'when I was a child'. '1' should be written as 'one' in formal writing.

× There was a kind of the ice cream advertisement, a little girl eating ice cream in the advertisement that always make me curious, but I don't particularly like advertisements.

✓ There was an ice cream advertisement with a little girl eating ice cream that always made me curious, but I don't particularly like advertisements.

Use 'an ice cream advertisement' not 'a kind of the ice cream advertisement'. Change 'always make' to past 'always made' to match past context. 'A little girl eating ice cream in the advertisement' is better expressed as 'with a little girl eating ice cream' for concision.

× Because, umm, I don't prefer seeing advertisements particularly, but whenever I am watching, uh, watching a YouTube series on my phone or whenever I'm using my computer, I always get an advertisement.

✓ I don't particularly like seeing advertisements, but whenever I am watching a YouTube series on my phone or using my computer, I always get an advertisement.

Move adverb 'particularly' to natural position: 'don't particularly like'. Remove duplicate 'watching'. 'Watching a YouTube series' is fine; ensure gerund forms are used consistently. The sentence needs smoothing rather than major grammatical changes.

× So I don't have any another option I have to watch that particular advertisement.

✓ So I don't have any other option; I have to watch that particular advertisement.

'Any another option' is incorrect—use 'any other option' or 'no other option'. Add punctuation for clarity. Maintain present tense 'have to' because this is a general statement about current experience.