Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장이 반복되고 시제가 일관되지 않으며 불필요한 말버릇(uh, that time)이 많이 있습니다. 더 자연스럽게 답하려면 주제문을 먼저 말하고(어떤 광고였는지), 구체적인 이유와 한두 개의 상세한 설명(광고의 특징, 기억에 남는 장면 또는 노래)을 연결어로 이어서 제시하세요. 예: 과거 시제 유지, 반복 제거, 연결어(e.g., because, for example)를 사용하세요.

예시: When I was a child in Korea, the most memorable advertisement for me was a mobile phone commercial featuring a popular female singer. I remember it because the song was catchy and the visuals showed colorful street scenes that matched the melody. As a result, the tune stuck in my head for weeks and I could still hum it years later.

제안: 답변 초반은 괜찮지만 문장이 어색하고 미완성된 문장이 있습니다. 더 정확한 표현과 구체적 예시를 추가하고 연결어를 써서 문장을 매끄럽게 만드세요. 예: 'Yes, I see many advertisements on trains and buses. For example...' 같은 구조로 말하세요.

예시: Yes, I see many advertisements on trains and other public transport these days. For example, posters and digital screens often promote events like APEC or local festivals. Because these ads are placed where many commuters look, they are hard to miss.

제안: 의견 제시는 했지만 문법(현재진행/일반현재), 불필요한 반복, 불완전한 이유 제시 문제가 있습니다. 명확한 주제문 뒤에 이유와 구체적 예(예: 지루함, 유용한 정보 등)를 연결어로 설명하세요. 또한 시제와 동사 형태를 교정하세요.

예시: It depends on the situation. I dislike ads that interrupt YouTube videos because they break the flow, but I don't mind ads on public transport because they can be informative or entertaining. For instance, I sometimes learn about nearby restaurants or upcoming concerts from posters on the train.

제안: 중복 표현('catch music' 반복), 어색한 구조와 불완전한 문장이 있습니다. 간결한 주제문을 말하고 이유 및 구체적 예(특정 광고의 요소: 음악, humor, visuals)를 덧붙이세요. 연결어(e.g., because, for example, therefore)를 사용해 논리적으로 연결하세요.

예시: I prefer advertisements with catchy music because a good tune makes an ad memorable and enjoyable. For example, a jingle that repeats a brand name helped me remember a shampoo I later bought because the melody stayed in my head.

제안: 기본 응답은 전달되지만 어휘 선택과 문장구조가 어색합니다('does many advertisements'). 사이트 예시도 더 정확히 말하고, 연결어로 이유(타깃 광고, 무료 서비스 자금 등)를 덧붙이면 더 좋습니다.

예시: Yes, I often see advertisements when I use my phone or computer, especially on websites and apps like Naver and YouTube. This is because many free services rely on ads for revenue, so targeted banners and video ads appear while I browse or watch videos.

× Back then in Korea, when I was a child, there is the most impressive advertisement is about mobile phone.

✓ Back then in Korea, when I was a child, the most impressive advertisement was about a mobile phone.

The sentence incorrectly mixes 'there is' with a clause that should use past tense. Use 'the most impressive advertisement was' to match the past time reference. Also include the article 'a' before 'mobile phone' because it refers to one advertisement about a mobile phone. Suggestion: simplify the structure to 'the most impressive advertisement was about a mobile phone.'

× That time, at that time, uh, in Korea, the singer, uh, the female.

✓ At that time in Korea, it featured a female singer.

The original is incomplete and fragmented; it lacks a clear verb and object. Rephrase to a complete sentence with subject and verb: 'it featured a female singer.' Remove redundant time phrases ('that time, at that time') and filler words. Suggestion: form a simple declarative sentence with a subject and verb.

× Yes, I can see a number of advertising on train or other transportation these days.

✓ Yes, I can see a number of advertisements on trains or other forms of transportation these days.

'A number of' is fine but 'advertising' should be plural noun 'advertisements' when referring to individual ads. 'Train' should be plural 'trains' to generalize, and 'transportation' should be 'forms of transportation' or 'modes of transport.' Suggestion: use plural nouns when speaking generally and choose appropriate noun phrases.

× There are always some advertisements about APEC, which is.

✓ There are always some advertisements about APEC.

The clause 'which is' is incomplete and unnecessary. Remove it to make a complete sentence. If you wanted to define APEC, complete the clause: 'which is the Asia-Pacific Economic Cooperation.' Suggestion: avoid leaving subordinate clauses unfinished.

× This depends on on the situation.

✓ This depends on the situation.

Duplicate 'on' is an error. The present tense 'depends' is correct because it refers to a general truth. Suggestion: proofread for accidental word repetition.

× When I watching YouTube I dislike the advertisement but in trains or public transportation I would like to watch some advertisement because sometimes it.

✓ When I watch YouTube, I dislike advertisements, but on trains or public transportation I like to look at some advertisements because sometimes they are interesting.

'When I watching' is ungrammatical; after 'when' use base form with appropriate tense: 'watch' for present habitual action. 'The advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' when speaking generally. 'Would like to watch' is odd for passive viewing of ads on transport; use 'I like to look at' or 'I enjoy looking at.' The final clause 'because sometimes it' is incomplete; supply 'they are interesting.' Suggestion: use simple present for habits and ensure pronoun agreement and completeness.

× Uh, I like some advertisement with some catch music because there's some catch music, uh, makes the in advertisement impressive and sometimes it. Makes me enjoy.

✓ I like some advertisements with catchy music because catchy music makes the advertisement impressive and sometimes it makes me enjoy it.

Use adjective 'catchy' not 'catch' to modify 'music.' 'Some advertisement' should be plural 'some advertisements.' The clause 'makes the in advertisement impressive' has word order errors; correct to 'makes the advertisement impressive.' Final sentence fragment 'and sometimes it. Makes me enjoy.' should be combined and completed as 'and sometimes it makes me enjoy it.' Suggestion: use correct adjective forms and complete sentences.

× Yes, I think I always see some advertisement even when I searched some information on the website.

✓ Yes, I think I always see some advertisements even when I search for information on websites.

Tense mismatch: 'even when I searched' mixes past with present habitual 'I always see.' Use present simple 'search' to match. 'Some advertisement' should be plural 'some advertisements.' Also 'search for information' and 'websites' (plural) are more natural. Suggestion: keep tenses consistent and use correct verb patterns like 'search for'.

× It does many advertisements on the website like such as Neighbor and YouTube.

✓ There are many advertisements on websites such as Naver and YouTube.

'It does many advertisements' is incorrect; use 'there are many advertisements.' 'Like such as' is redundant; choose one ('such as'). 'Neighbor' likely refers to 'Naver' (Korean portal). Also 'on the website' should be plural 'on websites' when generalizing. Suggestion: use 'there is/are' for existence and correct names and prepositions.