Friends— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence. Correct grammar (e.g., "We enjoy each other's company"), avoid repetition, and add one specific detail about the friend to make the answer more informative.

예시: Yes — I have a best friend I have known for over ten years. We enjoy each other's company and often go hiking together because we both love nature.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating ideas, and finish your supporting detail. Use linking words (e.g., "for example", "afterwards") and give a specific activity or topic you talk about.

예시: Usually we play football together every Sunday. Afterwards, for example, we go for a coffee and walk while talking about work, family and weekend plans.

제안: Make one clear sentence about the usual meeting place, correct grammar and avoid redundancy. Use a linking word to add the example and be specific about which stadium or nearby place.

예시: We usually meet at the local stadium every Sunday to play football. After the match, we often walk to a nearby park and chat about our daily lives.

제안: This answer is generally clear — tighten it by using a concise topic sentence and one supporting reason with a linking word. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., "every Sunday").

예시: Yes, I usually go out with my friends every Sunday to play football because it strengthens our friendship and keeps us fit.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and finish your ideas. Fix grammar ("they feel like a second family"), and provide a specific example of how a friend supported you. Avoid vague endings.

예시: Friends are very important to me — they feel like a second family. For example, when I was overwhelmed with work last year, a friend called me every day to encourage me and helped me stay motivated.

제안: Begin with a clear preference sentence. Correct grammar ("I'm an extrovert" or "I'm extroverted", "each person has"). Use linking words and give a specific reason or short example showing the benefit of a group.

예시: I prefer spending time with a group of friends because I'm extroverted and enjoy the different personalities. For instance, during weekends we play football together and everyone contributes funny stories that lift the mood.

제안: Answer directly, avoid fillers ("umm"), and be more natural with phrasing ("celebrate my birthday"). Give a specific detail about party activities and link to the reason why you invite them.

예시: Yes, I often invite friends to my home for my birthday parties. We share a meal, play games and clean up together, which helps us bond and have fun.

제안: Provide a clearer, more natural response. If there is no difference, say why with specific details and avoid awkward phrases like "enjoy our personality". Use linking words to explain stability or change.

예시: No, there isn't much difference. We still meet at the same places, such as the stadium and nearby cafes, and continue to catch up about work and family whenever we can.

제안: Make one clear statement about what makes a place suitable, fix grammar ("places that are not too private"), and give specific reasons (quietness, comfort, facilities) with linking words.

예시: Places that are not too private, like parks or cafes, are suitable because they are relaxed and have amenities. For example, a quiet cafe lets us sit comfortably and talk without interruptions.

× Here's my best friend forever.

✓ He's my best friend forever.

The original sentence uses 'Here' which refers to location; the intended meaning is possession/identity so 'He is' (contracted to 'He's') is correct. Use correct pronoun and verb to identify a person.

× I find it peaceful when I hang out with him and we just enjoy each personality and go outside.

✓ I find it peaceful when I hang out with him; we just enjoy each other's company and go outside.

The phrase 'each personality' is incorrect; the correct collocation is 'each other's company'. Add a possessive pronoun and change 'personality' to 'company' to express enjoying time together. Also join clauses with a semicolon or conjunction for clarity.

× I have a group of friends who always play football on every Sunday together and I find it peaceful when I hang out with them.

✓ I have a group of friends who always play football every Sunday, and I find it peaceful when I hang out with them.

Use 'every Sunday' not 'on every Sunday' (both 'on Sunday' or 'every Sunday' are correct; combining 'on' and 'every' is redundant). Add a comma before the conjunction for compound sentence clarity.

× For example, we can go for walks together and just talk about.

✓ For example, we can go for walks together and just talk about our lives.

The verb 'talk about' requires an object; leaving it hanging is incomplete. Specify the topic (e.g., 'our lives') to complete the sentence.

× I often meet them at the stadium when we play football on every Sunday where we where can keep fit and meet them.

✓ I often meet them at the stadium when we play football every Sunday, where we can keep fit and meet up.

Remove redundant 'on' before 'every Sunday'. 'Where we where can' contains a repeated word and incorrect word order; correct to 'where we can'. Use 'meet up' for natural phrasing.

× For example, after the match we can go for walks together and just talk about daily life.

✓ For example, after the match we can go for walks together and just talk about daily life.

Sentence is acceptable but keep as is; it is complete and grammatical. No change needed.

× Yeah, I usually go out with them on every Sunday at the stadium where we play football together.

✓ Yeah, I usually go out with them every Sunday at the stadium where we play football together.

Remove 'on' when using 'every Sunday'. The rest of the sentence is fine.

× I think playing football can bond our friendship and help us keep fit.

✓ I think playing football can strengthen our friendship and help us keep fit.

'Bond our friendship' is not natural collocation in standard English; use 'strengthen our friendship' or 'help bond us'. This change improves naturalness and clarity.

× I think they seem like my second family because of the motivation.

✓ I think they are like my second family because they motivate me.

'Seem like' is possible but 'are like' is stronger given the explanation. 'Because of the motivation' is vague and ungrammatical; rephrase to 'because they motivate me' to clarify subject and action.

× They always encourage me to keep working and play hard because they know many times I want to give up and they call me to boost my.

✓ They always encourage me to keep working and to try hard because they know that many times I want to give up, and they call me to cheer me up.

Add 'to' before the second verb for parallel structure ('to keep... and to try...'). 'Play hard' is awkward in this context; 'try hard' or 'work hard' fits. 'Boost my' is incomplete; replace with 'cheer me up'. Also add 'that' for the noun clause and commas for clarity.

× I'm an extrovert person so when hanging out I want to go with a group of friends because each person have their own personality so they can make me happy all day.

✓ I'm an extrovert, so when I hang out I like to go with a group of friends because each person has their own personality and they can make me happy all day.

'Extrovert person' is awkward; use 'an extrovert' or 'an outgoing person'. Subject-verb agreement error 'each person have' should be 'each person has' (each = singular). 'When hanging out' should be 'when I hang out' for clarity. Replace 'want to go with' with 'like to go with' for naturalness.

× After playing football, we just talk about daily life.

✓ After playing football, we just talk about daily life.

Sentence is grammatical and natural; no change needed.

× Yes, of course, When my birthdays come, I will invite a group of friends to my home to enjoy my party.

✓ Yes, of course. When my birthday comes, I will invite a group of friends to my home to enjoy my party.

Capitalize after comma is incorrect; use a period. 'My birthdays' should be singular 'my birthday' unless multiple birthdays are intended. Use 'comes' for singular subject.

× After that, we will wash the dishes together or talk about their life, which can help us bond our friendship and keep, umm, our energy. Good.

✓ After that, we will wash the dishes together or talk about our lives, which can help strengthen our friendship and boost our energy.

'Talk about their life' is inconsistent with speaker perspective; use 'our lives'. 'Bond our friendship' is unnatural; use 'strengthen our friendship'. 'Keep our energy' is awkward; 'boost our energy' or 'refresh us' is better. Remove filler 'umm' and 'Good' as they are disfluent.

× No, it's not. We still meet each other, enjoy our personality and talk about their life when we have a chance to meet each other.

✓ No, it's not. We still meet each other, enjoy each other's company, and talk about our lives when we have the chance to meet.

'Enjoy our personality' is incorrect; use 'enjoy each other's company'. 'Talk about their life' should be 'our lives' to match perspective. Remove redundant 'meet each other' repetition and improve wording.

× I think someplace which are not really private can help us talk without stress and moreover in public place we can talk about their life or just enjoy our personality.

✓ I think places that are not really private can help us talk without stress; moreover, in public places we can talk about our lives or just enjoy each other's company.

'Someplace which are' is ungrammatical; use plural 'places that are'. 'Public place' should be plural 'public places' or 'a public place'. 'Talk about their life' should be 'our lives'. 'Enjoy our personality' should be 'enjoy each other's company'. Use punctuation to separate ideas.