Watch— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は直接的だが、文法ミスと表現の自然さに改善の余地があります。①「I have broken my watches」は現在完了形の誤用で、過去の出来事なら過去形にする。②“watch time”は不自然で、“check the time”が自然。③理由を1つに絞り、補足説明をつけると明瞭になる。例：過去に壊した経験とスマホの利便性を短くまとめ、接続詞（because / so）を適切に使う。

예시: No, I don't wear a watch. I used to, but I broke my last one, so now I just check the time on my smartphone because it's more convenient.

제안: 文法と語順、表現の自然さを改善する必要があります。①「have got」は現在完了の形式だが、過去の特定の出来事には過去形（got）を使う方が自然。② “got a watch for my parents on my birthday”は意味が曖昧（自分が親に贈ったのか、親からもらったのか）。主語・目的語をはっきりさせる。③「It was really happy」は不自然で、“I was really happy”など感情主語を適切にする。④「I had broken it in accident」は「I accidentally broke it」などで簡潔に。

예시: Yes. On my last birthday I bought a watch for my parents, and I was really happy to give it to them. Unfortunately, I accidentally broke it a few days later.

제안: 理由の提示はできているが、語彙の自然さと詳細の具体性を高めると良い。①「it is a special gift from parents and friends」は“they see it as a meaningful gift”のように主語と指示対象を一致させる。②“it is a status”は不自然なので“a status symbol”を使う。③対比の接続表現（for example, additionally）や具体例（businesspeople, collectors）を加えると説得力が増す。

예시: Some people wear expensive watches because they consider them meaningful gifts from family or close friends. Others wear them as a status symbol to show success, for example in business or social events.

제안: 意見は明確だが、表現の自然さと語法の改善が必要。①“on on smartphone”の重複を直す。②“instead of watches”より“instead of a watch”や“these days”などを使って自然に。③「so it is not useful」は単純すぎるため、理由を補強（例：スマホの多機能性や時間以外の利便性）すると説得力が増す。

예시: No, I don't think wearing a watch is very important nowadays because most people check the time on their smartphones, which also have alarms and calendars, so a separate watch isn't essential for me.

× No, I don't wear a watch because I have broken my watches.

✓ No, I don't wear a watch because I have broken my watch.

The student used the present perfect 'have broken' correctly to indicate a past action with relevance to the present, but used the plural 'watches' which conflicts with 'a watch' earlier in the sentence. Use singular 'watch' to be consistent. Suggestion: use 'my watch' or 'my watches' consistently depending on meaning.

× It is convenient for me to check time, but I can watch time in smartphone.

✓ It is convenient for me to check the time, but I can check the time on my smartphone.

English requires the definite article 'the' with 'time' in this context. The verb 'watch time' is unnatural; use 'check the time.' Also use the preposition 'on' with 'smartphone' and include a possessive 'my' for clarity. Suggestion: 'check the time on my smartphone.'

× Yes, I have got a watch for my parents on my birthday.

✓ Yes, I got a watch for my parents on my birthday.

In many varieties of English 'have got' can mean possession; to indicate a past action of giving, simple past 'got' is more natural. Use 'got' to describe the completed action that happened at a specific past time ('on my birthday'). Suggestion: use simple past for completed past events with time expressions.

× It was really happy but I had broken it in accident.

✓ I was really happy, but I accidentally broke it in an accident.

'It was really happy' incorrectly attributes the emotion to 'it' (the watch); the speaker should say 'I was really happy.' Also 'I had broken it in accident' mixes past perfect and lacks article and adverb form. Use simple past 'broke' for a single past event and 'accidentally' as the adverb; include 'an accident.' Suggestion: 'I was really happy, but I accidentally broke it in an accident.'

× Because some people think it is a special gift from parents and friends.

✓ Because some people think it is a special gift from parents and friends.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; no article error needing change. (No correction made.)

× On the other hand, some people think it is a status.

✓ On the other hand, some people think it is a status symbol.

The noun 'status' alone is awkward here; the common collocation is 'status symbol.' Use the compound noun to express the intended meaning. Suggestion: 'status symbol.'

× No, I don't think it is important to wear a watch because we can check time on on smartphone instead of watches, so it is not useful.

✓ No, I don't think it is important to wear a watch because we can check the time on our smartphones instead of using watches, so it is not useful.

Include 'the' with 'time' and correct the repeated 'on on' to a single 'on.' Use the possessive 'our' with 'smartphones' (plural matches general reference) and add 'using' before 'watches' for clarity. Also pluralize 'smartphone' to 'smartphones' to match general subject. Suggestion: 'check the time on our smartphones instead of using watches.'