Gifts— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答要更简洁自然，避免重复和不必要的语气词（如 umm, uh）。先给出主题句，然后用一两句具体例子支持，并注意语法（e.g. sister, loves）。建议控制在3-4句内，用连接词保持流畅。

예시: Yes, I think I'm good at choosing gifts. I usually remember each person's likes and dislikes, so I pick things they actually enjoy. For example, my younger sister loves pink, so I often buy her pink clothes or accessories.

제안: 回答要直接并用准确表达，不要出现不恰当的短语（如 'great blast'）。说明主要场合并简单解释原因，用连词使句子更连贯。

예시: I usually give gifts on special occasions like birthdays and traditional Chinese festivals. These occasions are important for celebrating and showing appreciation to family and friends.

제안: 内容要具体并用正确词汇，例如 'price' 而不是 'press'，并按优先顺序表达考虑因素。避免冗长重复，使用连接词（firstly, secondly, finally）使结构清晰。

예시: When I choose a gift, I first consider the price to make sure it fits my budget. Secondly, I think about the quality so it will last, and finally I pay attention to the appearance to ensure it matches the recipient's taste.

제안: 回答总体不错，但要注意时态和用词（e.g. 'wrote' 而不是 'read down'，'appreciation' 而不是 'appreciate'）。可补充一两个细节说明所做的手工礼物的样子或反应。

예시: Yes, I used to write handwritten letters for my best friends when I was a child. I felt it was a sincere way to express my feelings, and my friends always appreciated the personal touch.

제안: 观点明确，但表达需更简洁并修正语法（e.g. 'sincerity isn't equal to price'）。可给出理由和例子支持观点，避免语气词和不完整句子。

예시: No, I don't believe expensive gifts show stronger feelings. Sincerity matters more than price, and a handmade present can be more meaningful because it shows time and effort.

× Well honestly I think I'm good at giving gifts because I can umm clearly remember my different friends and my family members favorite things.

✓ Well, honestly, I think I'm good at giving gifts because I can clearly remember my different friends' and my family members' favorite things.

句中所有格缺失，应使用所有格（friends' 和 family members'）来表示“朋友和家人的喜好”。另外加入逗号使语气更自然。建议：学会使用名词所有格或使用“the favorite things of my friends and family”。

× Such as my sis little sister, she love the pink so I would uh give her some.

✓ For example, my little sister loves pink, so I would give her something pink.

原句中重复词“sis little sister”不自然，应使用“little sister”；主谓不一致（she love → she loves）。“give her some”不明确，改为“give her something pink”。建议：注意人称单数第三人称动词加-s，并使用清晰的代词或名词短语。

× Well, I usually give gifts to others in some important occasions such as their birthdays or some traditional festivals in China and giving them gifts also symbol of great blast to her, to them.

✓ Well, I usually give gifts to others on important occasions such as their birthdays or traditional Chinese festivals, and giving them gifts is also a symbol of great blessing to them.

介词用错：应使用“on occasions”而不是“in occasions”。“some traditional festivals in China”改为“traditional Chinese festivals”更自然。句子缺少系动词“is”，并且“blast”应为“blessing”，代词应用“them”。建议：注意固定搭配（on occasions/on birthdays）及系动词的使用，并检查词汇拼写和代词一致性。

× Well, for me, when I choose gifts, the first thing for me to consider is the press.

✓ Well, for me, when I choose gifts, the first thing I consider is the price.

原句“the press”用词错误，应为“price（价格）”。结构上“the first thing for me to consider”冗长，简化为“the first thing I consider”。建议：注意近音词辨别，并简化冗余结构以提高流畅度。

× And besides, I would think of the quality of this gift and what's more, I would think more about the outlook of this gift I should promise the all of.

✓ Besides, I would consider the quality of the gift, and what's more, I would think about the appearance of the gift and make sure of all of that.

原句“think of the quality”可更自然为“consider the quality”。“outlook”用词生硬，改为“appearance”。末尾“I should promise the all of”语法混乱，需改为“make sure of all of that”或更具体表达。建议：使用更恰当的名词（appearance）和固定搭配（consider the quality, make sure of）。

× Oh yes, when I was a little girl I always read down the letters for my best friends because I think it's a good way for me to show my sincere and show my appreciate to them.

✓ Oh yes, when I was a little girl I always wrote letters to my best friends because I thought it was a good way for me to show my sincerity and show my appreciation to them.

时态混用：描述过去习惯应使用过去时（always wrote, thought）。“read down the letters”用词错误，正确为“wrote letters”。“show my sincere”应为名词“sincerity”；“show my appreciate”应为名词“appreciation”。建议：描述过去经历时统一使用过去时，并注意名词/动词形式区别。

× Also shows my love for them.

✓ It also showed my love for them.

句子缺主语，应为“It also showed...”。时态与上句保持一致（过去时）。建议：确保句子完整有主语和谓语，并与上下文时态一致。

× Well, I don't think expensive gifts will show more about my feeling because I I think sincerity isn't equal with the price and the money umm behind uh.

✓ Well, I don't think expensive gifts show my feelings better because I think sincerity is not equal to price or the money behind it.

“show more about my feeling”表达笨拙，改为“show my feelings better”。“isn't equal with”应为“is not equal to”。冗余“I I”去除，末尾加代词“it”。建议：使用固定搭配（equal to）和更自然的表达方式。

× Besides, I think some handmade UMM is a good.

✓ Besides, I think some handmade gifts are good.

原句缺名词和数的一致性问题：“handmade UMM is a good”不完整，应为“handmade gifts are good”。注意可数名词复数与系动词的一致。建议：使用完整名词短语并保持主谓一致。