Gifts— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Speak more directly and clearly. Start with a short topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Reduce repetition and avoid filler phrases. Use linking words like “for example” to list gift types.

예시: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts. For example, I often browse stores for collectible action figures or handmade cards that match my friends’ hobbies. I prefer thoughtful presents that show I know the person well.

제안: Provide a clear time-related topic sentence and one or two concrete examples. Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect grammar. Use linking words like “usually” and “for instance” to structure your answer.

예시: I usually give gifts on special occasions like birthdays and holidays, but sometimes I buy presents spontaneously. For instance, if a friend mentions a hobby, I might get them a small related gift to show I was listening.

제안: Answer with a clear topic sentence naming the main considerations (e.g., suitability and sentiment). Then give specific reasons and an example. Avoid vague metaphors and improve grammar and coherence with linking words such as “because” and “for example.”

예시: I consider suitability and sentiment when choosing a gift because it should match the recipient’s tastes. For example, I avoid bright colors if the person prefers neutral tones and choose something related to their hobbies so it feels personal.

제안: Keep the answer concise and give one clear example of a handmade gift with a brief explanation of why it was meaningful. Avoid repetition and unclear phrasing.

예시: Yes, I have. For example, I once hand-painted and customized a collectible action figure for a friend who loves models. They appreciated the personal touch because it was unique and made specifically for them.

제안: State your opinion clearly at the start (e.g., “Not necessarily”) and give two reasons with linking words like “because” and “for example.” Avoid hesitations and finish the thought coherently.

예시: Not necessarily. Expensive gifts do not always show feelings because sentimental or personalized items can be more meaningful. For example, a handmade photo album often matters more than an expensive gadget because it shows thought and effort.

× Just giving you just kind of my thing.

✓ I'm just giving you my thoughts.

The original is ungrammatical and redundant ('just' repeated, 'my thing' is informal and vague). Use a clear subject and verb to form a complete sentence. Suggestion: use 'I'm just giving you my thoughts' to convey intent clearly.

× I'm not gonna lie.

✓ I'm not going to lie.

'Gonna' is informal spoken contraction. For grammatical correctness, use the full present participle form 'going to'. This keeps formality and clarity.

× And if I'm gonna be honest with you, I would browse through a lot of items on the shelf and to give to my beloved friends, my besties and my families and whatnot.

✓ And if I'm going to be honest with you, I would browse through a lot of items on the shelf to give to my beloved friends, my besties, and my family.

Replace informal 'gonna' with 'going to' and remove unnecessary 'to' before 'give'. Use 'family' as an uncountable noun rather than plural 'families' when referring to one's relatives. Also add commas for list clarity and remove 'whatnot' for conciseness.

× I'm all the sort of items such as collectible action figures, envelopes, cars, post cars, handmade items and the list goes on.

✓ I like all sorts of items such as collectible action figures, envelopes, cars, postcards, and handmade items; the list goes on.

Use 'I like' to form a complete clause and 'all sorts of' (plural) to match the list. 'Post cars' is incorrect; use 'postcards'. Add commas and a conjunction for proper list structure.

× That's.

✓ That's it.

Fragment 'That's.' is incomplete. Completing it as 'That's it.' provides a full utterance meaning 'that is all'.

× Oh boy, every time of the year, when it feel like it, when it do feel that is I'm gift giving Tam and that I would go out of my ways to actually buy things that are best suited and to the interests of each members in my family and my friends as well.

✓ Oh boy, anytime of the year, when it feels right and I feel like giving gifts, I go out of my way to actually buy things that are best suited to the interests of each member of my family and my friends as well.

Fix subject-verb agreement: 'it feel' and 'it do feel' should be 'it feels' and 'I feel'. 'Go out of my ways' should be 'go out of my way' (idiom). Use 'each member' (singular) and 'of my family' rather than 'members in my family'. Remove extraneous words and reorder for clarity.

× On top of that, I I'm not a people pleasure and spare me with that, but I'm I would always like go extra miles.

✓ On top of that, I'm not a people-pleaser, so spare me; but I would always go the extra mile.

'People-pleaser' is the correct noun. Remove duplicate 'I'. Use 'spare me' properly and correct idiom 'go the extra mile' (singular). Reorganize punctuation for clarity.

× I will say suitability and relatability because as far as I'm concerned, gift giving is not really an act but is an art in itself.

✓ I would say suitability and relatability, because as far as I'm concerned, gift giving is not really an act but an art in itself.

Use conditional 'would say' for politeness. 'an art in itself' is correct usage; remove extra 'is'. Add comma before 'because' for readability.

× It could elevate your personality by choosing the right colors you can like make the people love you all the more better.

✓ It can elevate your image: by choosing the right colors, you can make people like you even more.

Replace 'personality' with 'image' for clarity. 'All the more better' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'even more'. Rearrange clauses and add comma after 'colors'.

× But bear with me, you could actually displease them if you choose the wrong 1 so.

✓ But bear with me: you could actually displease them if you choose the wrong one.

Use 'one' instead of '1' and remove trailing 'so'. Replace comma with colon for emphasis and clarity.

× Yes, absolutely. If you consider my handmade items such as my Hot Toys collectible action figure that were handmade by me when kind of a hand produced gift, not the mass produced 1:00 then that's it.

✓ Yes, absolutely. For example, my Hot Toys collectible action figures that were handmade by me are hand-produced gifts, not mass-produced ones; then that's it.

Ensure plural agreement: 'figures' with 'were'. Use 'hand-produced' vs 'mass-produced' and plural 'ones'. Remove unclear time '1:00' and rephrase for clarity.

× I would love giving them things.

✓ I would love giving them gifts.

'Things' is vague; use 'gifts' to match context. The structure 'love giving them gifts' is natural.

× There are unexpected items that have a feeling of it might have come out of nowhere to catch them off.

✓ There are unexpected items that feel like they came out of nowhere to catch them off guard.

Change phrasing to a natural idiom 'came out of nowhere' and 'catch them off guard'. Remove awkward 'have a feeling of it might'.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

This is a question prompt; it is grammatical as written. No correction necessary.

× Not necessarily items rub a little over the top and on pricey I'm I'm working on that, but they are not they may not really appeal to them recipient because sometimes relatability the right colour and items of sentimental value and to speak with them more than things that are financially pricey, but I'm gonna speak with them I.

✓ Not necessarily. Some items are a little over the top and pricey; I'm working on that, but they may not appeal to the recipient because sometimes relatability, the right color, and sentimental value speak to them more than financially expensive things.

Break run-on sentence into clear clauses. Fix pronouns ('them recipient' -> 'the recipient'), remove duplicate 'I'm', replace 'gonna' with 'going to', correct word order 'speak to them' and use 'color' (or 'colour') consistently. Remove trailing fragment and ensure parallel structure in list.