Gifts— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I am good at giving gifts.”), then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid unclear words and filler (e.g., “Ed.”) and correct grammar (e.g., “relatives,” “warm-hearted”).

예시: Yes, I am good at giving gifts. I usually give gifts to close friends and family, because I enjoy making them feel appreciated. For example, I often buy a small book or a handmade card that suits their interests.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence and add specific examples linked with a reason. Use linking words like “for example” or “such as” correctly and maintain natural phrasing (e.g., “give gifts” not “get to them”).

예시: I usually give gifts for important occasions. For example, I give presents at graduations, birthdays, and anniversaries because these events are meaningful and celebrate important milestones.

제안: Make a clear topic sentence and correct grammar and vocabulary. Use linking words to add a brief specific example. Replace casual contractions and incorrect forms (e.g., “gonna”) with standard English and be specific about what “practical” means.

예시: I consider how practical the gift is. For example, if I buy something for my girlfriend, I think about whether she will actually use it, like a quality tote bag for work rather than something decorative she won't use.

제안: Answer directly and clearly, then give one specific, coherent example. Fix grammar and pronoun errors, and avoid repetition. Explain briefly why you made the handmade gift (e.g., sentimental value, uniqueness).

예시: Yes, I have given handmade gifts. For instance, I once knitted a scarf for my friend’s birthday because I knew she liked handmade items and I wanted to give something personal and unique.

제안: Start with a direct opinion and then clearly support it with one or two concise reasons. Use clearer vocabulary and grammar (e.g., “The value of a gift” and “it should be thoughtful, not expensive”). Avoid confusing phrases like “I don't have any of their.”

예시: No, I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better. I believe thoughtful gifts that match the recipient’s tastes or needs show more care, such as a meaningful book or a personalized item rather than an expensive but impersonal present.

× I usually give a gift to my close friends or the relative friends.

✓ I usually give gifts to my close friends or relatives.

The sentence uses singular 'a gift' then plural 'friends' and the phrase 'the relative friends' is incorrect. Use the plural 'gifts' to match 'friends' (quantifier agreement), and use 'relatives' to refer to family members. Also remove unnecessary article 'the'. Suggestion: Match number between noun and quantifier and use the correct noun form (relatives).

× So when I give some gift to someone I feel more warm heart.

✓ So when I give a gift to someone I feel warmer-hearted.

'Some gift' is unnatural here; use 'a gift'. 'More warm heart' is incorrect adjective formation. Use the comparative adjective 'warmer-hearted' or say 'I feel warmer' or 'I feel warm-hearted.' Suggestion: Use standard adjective forms and appropriate determiners (a gift, warmer, warm-hearted).

× I usually get to them when they have a significant event such as graduation, happy birthday or anniversary.

✓ I usually give gifts to them when they have a significant event such as a graduation, a birthday, or an anniversary.

The verb 'get to them' is incorrect in this context; 'give gifts to them' matches meaning. Also articles are needed before singular events: 'a graduation', 'a birthday', 'an anniversary'. Use parallel noun forms and commas for list. Suggestion: Use correct verb 'give' and include articles for singular countable nouns.

× One of the main thing that I consider is the practical like for example if I buying something to my girlfriends, I gonna think about the practice way that she can.

✓ One of the main things I consider is practicality. For example, if I am buying something for my girlfriend, I think about how practical it will be for her.

Multiple issues: 'One of the main thing' should be 'one of the main things' (quantifier/number agreement). 'the practical' should be 'practicality' (correct noun form). 'I buying' needs auxiliary 'am' for present continuous (present tense error). 'to my girlfriends' should be 'for my girlfriend' (preposition and singular/plural choice). 'I gonna' is informal and ungrammatical; use 'I am going to' or 'I will' or simply 'I think'. The clause 'the practice way that she can' is unclear; replace with 'how practical it will be for her.' Suggestion: Ensure number agreement, use correct noun forms, proper auxiliary verbs for continuous tenses, and correct prepositions ('for').

× When I get a twin, I have been giving there's gift to my girlfriends, my ex.

✓ When I get a twin, I have been giving these gifts to my girlfriends, my exes.

'When I get a twin' is unclear but kept literal; 'there's' is incorrect for 'these' (wrong word). 'gift' should be plural 'gifts' to match 'girlfriends'. 'my ex' should be plural 'my exes' if referring to multiple former partners. 'have been giving' suggests repeated past action — acceptable if intended. Suggestion: Use correct demonstrative 'these', match noun number, and use plural forms for multiple people. Consider clarifying 'get a twin' meaning.

× So it's it's kind of patient to doing something to give because.

✓ So it's kind of satisfying to do something to give to them.

The original has repeated 'it's', wrong adjective 'patient', incorrect verb form 'to doing', and ends abruptly. Likely intended meaning is that it feels satisfying or rewarding to make something and give it. Use 'to do' (infinitive) not 'to doing'. Suggestion: Choose accurate adjectives (satisfying/rewarding) and correct infinitive/gerund forms depending on structure.

× No, because I think the thing that I get from someone should be something that I appreciate that I don't have any of their.

✓ No, because I think the thing I get from someone should be something I appreciate and don't already have.

Wordy and ungrammatical phrase 'something that I appreciate that I don't have any of their' is incorrect. Use concise phrasing: 'something I appreciate and don't already have.' Remove unnecessary 'the' before 'thing' and incorrect 'any of their.' Suggestion: Simplify the structure, remove redundant relative clauses, and use correct pronoun forms ('their' not needed).