Gifts— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Fix grammar (use present simple consistently) and remove duplicate words.

예시: Yes, I think I'm good at giving gifts. I usually give presents to family and close friends on birthdays and anniversaries, and I try to choose something thoughtful. However, I find it especially hard to pick gifts for men, so I often ask their friends or choose neutral items like books or practical gadgets.

제안: Use the correct tense (present simple) and organize your answer with a topic sentence followed by specific examples. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Use linking words such as 'also' or 'besides' for coherence.

예시: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays and anniversaries. I also give presents to classmates who win competitions at school, and sometimes we exchange small gifts after completing a group project.

제안: Clarify your main idea and remove confusing phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence about your priorities, then list two specific criteria with brief reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: When choosing a gift, I prefer something practical and personal. For example, I pick items that can be used daily because they last longer, or handmade gifts because they have sentimental value and remind the recipient of our relationship.

제안: Avoid repetition and complete your sentences. Give one clear example with details (what you made and why). Use past tense correctly and finish the description logically.

예시: Yes, I often include handmade items with birthday presents, such as cards. For my friend's last birthday, I made a decorated box filled with our photos and small notes, which she really appreciated because it was personal and meaningful.

제안: Resolve the contradiction in your answer and choose a clear stance. Use one topic sentence stating your opinion, then support it with a reason and an example. Correct grammatical errors and avoid repeated words.

예시: I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better; the thought behind a gift matters most. For instance, a small handmade card or a carefully chosen book can show affection more effectively than an expensive item if it reflects the recipient's interests.

× I give gifts to my friends and families on every occasion like birthday or anniversaries.

✓ I give gifts to my friends and family on every occasion like birthdays or anniversaries.

'Family' as a collective noun is usually singular here, and 'families' is incorrect when referring to the group of friends' family unit. Also 'birthday' should be plural to match 'anniversaries' and the general meaning of recurring occasions. Use consistent plural forms for general occasions. Suggestion: Use 'friends and family' and pluralize recurring events as 'birthdays'.

× However, deciding it is a very difficult task, especially if the the gift is for a man or a boy.

✓ However, deciding is a very difficult task, especially if the gift is for a man or a boy.

The phrase 'deciding it' is awkward; omit 'it' so 'deciding' functions as a gerund subject. Also there is a duplicated 'the the'. Suggestion: Remove the extra 'the' and drop the unnecessary 'it' to make the sentence grammatically correct and natural.

× I generally gave gifts on special occasions like birthdays and anniversaries.

✓ I generally give gifts on special occasions like birthdays and anniversaries.

The student uses past tense 'gave' but context (habit) requires present simple 'give' for habitual actions. Use present simple for regular habits. Suggestion: Replace past tense with present simple for routines: 'I generally give'.

× It depends if somebody won any race in my school, uh, some students, then I give gifts to them as well.

✓ If somebody wins a race at my school, I give them a gift as well.

The original sentence mixes tenses and uses awkward structure. For conditional habitual situations, use present simple in the conditional clause ('if somebody wins') and present simple in the main clause. Also 'won any race' is unnatural; use 'wins a race'. Suggestion: Use 'If somebody wins a race at my school, I give them a gift as well.' to express the habit clearly.

× And whenever we do some Lesson plan somebody.

✓ And whenever we make a lesson plan together, I give a gift to someone.

The original fragment lacks a clear verb-object structure and capitalizes 'Lesson' incorrectly. It is incomplete and unclear. I inferred intent: during collaborative lesson planning they give gifts; adjusted for clarity. Suggestion: Use a complete clause with a verb and object and correct capitalization: 'make a lesson plan' or 'plan a lesson'.

× High mountains preferred by something which is usable, something personal or handmade, which they keep them for a longer period of time as a memory.

✓ I prefer gifts that are useful, personal, or handmade and that people keep for a long time as a memento.

'High mountains preferred by' is irrelevant and likely a transcription error. 'which they keep them' is redundant (both 'which' and 'them'). Use 'that' for defining clauses and avoid redundancy. 'Longer period of time' is wordy; use 'a long time'. 'Memory' as a noun is better as 'memento' here. Suggestion: Use concise relative clauses without redundant pronouns: 'gifts that are useful, personal, or handmade and that people keep for a long time as a memento.'

× And that also helped them in their life.

✓ And that also helps them in their life.

The sentence shifts to past tense 'helped' though the context discusses general qualities of gifts, so present simple 'helps' is appropriate. 'In their life' is acceptable but could be 'in their lives' to match plural subject. Suggestion: Use present simple for general truths and pluralize 'life' to 'lives' if referring to multiple people.

× I always try to give something handmade with a birthday gift, for example, cards.

✓ I always try to give something handmade with a birthday gift, for example, a card.

'Cards' plural conflicts with 'a birthday gift' (singular); better to use singular 'a card' or pluralize the gift. Also 'something handmade' is fine but 'a card' is clearer. Suggestion: Match singular/plural: 'a birthday gift, for example, a card' or 'birthday gifts, for example, cards.'

× Moreover, for my friend's last birthday, I gave her a handmade box, uh, filled with our photographs and to make it more memorable, I add.

✓ Moreover, for my friend's last birthday, I gave her a handmade box filled with our photographs, and to make it more memorable, I added small notes.

The sentence begins in past tense ('gave') so subsequent verbs should also be past tense ('added'). 'I add' is present and incomplete; clarify what was added. Also remove filler 'uh' and comma misuse. Suggestion: Keep consistent past tense: 'I gave... and I added...' and specify what was added to complete the thought.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

This sentence is grammatically acceptable as a question. No correction needed. It correctly uses 'better' to compare degree. Suggestion: None.

× I do agree with this statement.

✓ I agree with this statement.

'I do agree' is not incorrect but 'I agree' is more natural and concise in spoken and written English. 'Do' is used for emphasis; remove it unless emphasis is intended. Suggestion: Use the simpler 'I agree with this statement'.

× From my perspective the the amount of the gift doesn't matter.

✓ From my perspective, the amount of the gift doesn't matter.

There is a duplicated 'the the'. A comma after the introductory phrase improves readability. Otherwise sentence is fine. Suggestion: Remove duplicate 'the' and add a comma after 'perspective'.

× The way you give the gift what it matters the most the personal touch with the gay with even a small card of of no money.

✓ What matters most is the way you give the gift and the personal touch, even a small card with no expense.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and contains many errors: redundant words ('of of'), mis-ordered clauses, and 'gay' likely a transcription error for 'gift'. Reorder to 'What matters most is...' and condense the idea. Use 'no expense' or 'costs nothing' instead of 'no money.' Suggestion: Use a clearest subject 'What matters most is...' and remove redundancies: 'What matters most is the way you give the gift and the personal touch, even a small card that costs nothing.'