Gifts— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify your main point with a clear topic sentence, avoid unclear phrases (e.g. “packing deep tools”), and use coherent supporting detail with linking words. Keep answers within 3–4 concise sentences. Focus on who you are good at giving gifts to and why, then give a short example.

예시: Yes, I think I am good at choosing gifts. I usually plan carefully and consider the recipient’s hobbies and needs before buying anything. For example, I once chose a travel kit for a friend who likes hiking, which she appreciated because it matched her hobby.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence naming the main occasions, then use a linking word to add one specific reason or example. Avoid repeating words like “usually” and keep sentences concise and natural.

예시: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays, Christmas, and New Year. For instance, I always exchange presents with my family at Christmas because we celebrate together and it feels meaningful.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence (what you consider), then list 2–3 specific factors with linking words (for example, age, interests, budget). Avoid repetition and correct grammar (e.g. "who the person is", "adult or senior").

예시: I consider who the gift is for, especially their age and interests. For example, for a senior I might choose something practical like a warm scarf, whereas for a teenager I would pick something trendy related to their hobbies.

제안: Answer directly (yes/no) then explain briefly with reasons and one specific example. Fix grammatical errors ("I am not a patient person") and avoid contradictory or unclear sentences about value. Use linking words like "because" and "however."

예시: No, I rarely give handmade gifts because I am not a patient person and I worry I would not make something nice. However, I appreciate handmade gifts and one day I would like to try making a simple photo album for a close friend.

제안: Begin with a clear opinion (yes/no or partial), then support it with a reason and a short example. Avoid unclear words or interruptions (e.g. “But Honda”). Use vocabulary like "meaningful" and contrast with "expensive" using linking words such as "however" or "rather."

예시: I don’t think expensive gifts necessarily express feelings better. Instead, a thoughtful or meaningful present—such as a photo book that recalls shared memories—can show affection more clearly than an expensive item.

× I believe that I am good in packing deep tools. Anyone.

✓ I believe that I am good at packing small tools.

The correct preposition with 'good' is 'good at', not 'good in'. 'Deep tools' seems incorrect in context; likely intended 'small tools' or 'handy tools'. Also 'Anyone.' is extraneous and unrelated; remove it. Suggestion: use 'good at' + gerund (good at packing).

× Because mostly I will think about it first before I decide to buy that thing.

✓ Because I usually think about it first before I decide to buy something.

Use consistent present simple for habitual actions: 'usually think' rather than 'will think'. 'That thing' is informal; 'something' is more natural. Keep tense consistent with habitual context.

× I usually give any gift to people, usually on some occasion, for example Christmas birthday or maybe New Year celebration.

✓ I usually give gifts to people on occasions, for example Christmas, birthdays, or New Year celebrations.

'Any gift' is inappropriate; use plural 'gifts'. Remove redundant 'usually'. List items need commas and plural forms: 'birthdays' and 'New Year celebrations'. Use 'on occasions' for occasions generally.

× But mostly I think Christmas is most important to give.

✓ But mostly I think Christmas is the most important time to give gifts.

Add definite article 'the' with 'most important' and specify 'time' or 'occasion'. Also include 'gifts' for clarity.

× Before I decide to buy the gift, I usually think about who is the person is for example whether it's a kiss a an adult or a senior.

✓ Before I decide to buy a gift, I usually think about who the person is, for example whether they are a child, an adult, or a senior.

Remove redundant 'is'. Use 'who the person is'. Use gender-neutral 'they' for unknown person. Correct 'kiss' to 'child' and fix article errors ('a an' wrong). Use plural alternatives in list consistent form.

× So before I choosing a gift I will definitely think about it before I decided.

✓ So before choosing a gift I definitely think about it and then decide.

Use gerund 'choosing' after 'before' and keep tense consistent: present simple 'I definitely think' for habitual action. 'Decided' (past) is incorrect; use 'decide'. Remove redundant 'before'.

× To be honest, I'm not good at doing handmade gift because I am not patient people.

✓ To be honest, I'm not good at making handmade gifts because I am not a patient person.

Use 'good at making' rather than 'good at doing'. 'Handmade gift' should be plural 'handmade gifts' or 'a handmade gift'. 'Not patient people' should be singular 'not a patient person' to match subject.

× That's the reason I usually just buy it at the shop rather than doing handmade gift.

✓ That's why I usually just buy gifts at the shop rather than making them by hand.

Use 'That's why' for reason. 'Buy gifts' plural is more natural. 'Rather than making them by hand' is the correct contrast and uses gerund 'making'. 'Doing handmade gift' is ungrammatical.

× I know handmade gift is more valuable and like people like more cherished because money can buy that.

✓ I know handmade gifts are more valuable and more cherished by people because money cannot buy that feeling.

Use plural 'handmade gifts' and plural verb 'are'. Reorder to 'more cherished by people'. 'Money can buy that' contradicts meaning; likely intended 'money cannot buy that feeling' — clarify. Ensure parallel comparative structure.

× I believe that some people will think about that because they will think about materialistic is more important.

✓ I believe that some people think that material things are more important.

Avoid double 'will think' for general belief; use present simple 'think'. 'Materialistic' is an adjective; use noun phrase 'material things' and verb 'are' to form clause.

× But Honda.

✓ (Remove this fragment as it is unrelated and meaningless.)

'But Honda.' is a sentence fragment with no clear meaning or connection. It should be removed or clarified.

× But I'm not that person who only look for expensive to someone I prefer to buy something is more meaningful meaningful instead of expensive.

✓ But I'm not the kind of person who only looks for expensive gifts; I prefer to buy something more meaningful rather than expensive.

Use 'the kind of person who' and correct subject-verb agreement 'looks'. Clarify 'expensive gifts'. Avoid repeating 'meaningful'. Use comparative structure 'more meaningful rather than expensive'.