Money— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural, concise and well-structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details (reason, amount or timeframe), use linking words for coherence, avoid repetition and filler words, and keep within 3–4 sentences. Correct grammar errors (e.g., "I couldn't have found" → "I couldn't afford", "when over the following year" → "over the following year").

예시: Yes. I once borrowed money from my family because I couldn’t afford an expensive car I wanted to buy. They helped me cover the cost, and I repaid them over the following year. They were pleased that I paid them back on time.

제안: Provide a clearer, more fluent response with a concise topic sentence and one specific supporting detail. Remove hesitations and pronoun errors ("your friend" → "a friend"), and use a linking word to explain reason. Keep sentences grammatical and within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes. I have lent money to friends on several occasions. For example, I recently lent a friend a substantial amount to help pay for his wedding because the event was expensive and he needed short-term support. I expected to be repaid within a few months.

× Yes, I have once borrowed money from my relatives and friends because I couldn't have found an expensive car I wanted to buy.

✓ Yes, I once borrowed money from my relatives and friends because I couldn't afford the expensive car I wanted to buy.

The original mixes present perfect 'have borrowed' with 'once' awkwardly and uses 'couldn't have found' incorrectly. Use simple past 'once borrowed' for a completed past action. Also 'couldn't have found' is incorrect context; the intended meaning is inability to afford, so use 'couldn't afford'. Suggestion: use simple past for specific past events and 'afford' for ability to pay.'

× They helped me cover the cost and I repaid them when over the following year and uh, they were happy that I returned their money.

✓ They helped me cover the cost and I repaid them over the following year; they were happy that I returned their money.

The phrase 'when over the following year' is ungrammatical. For actions completed across a period in the past, use 'over the following year' with past tense verbs. Also replace the comma splice with a semicolon or separate sentences. Suggestion: remove filler words and use clear time expressions like 'over the following year.'

× Yes, I have lent money to my, uh, to my friends on many occasions.

✓ Yes, I have lent money to my friends on many occasions.

The sentence is fine in present perfect for repeated past actions, but remove disfluent filler 'uh' and duplicate phrase 'to my, uh, to my' which is an error in fluency rather than grammar. Suggestion: keep 'I have lent... on many occasions.'

× Last time I I lent money to your friend was for his marriage party.

✓ The last time I lent money to my friend was for his wedding.

Problems: double 'I I' is a typo; 'your friend' wrongly addresses the examiner and likely should be 'my friend' as the speaker referring to their friend. 'Marriage party' is nonstandard; use 'wedding.' Also use simple past 'lent' for specific past event. Suggestion: correct pronoun to reflect ownership and use standard noun 'wedding.'

× It was a very expensive marriage and he didn't have enough money to run it, so he borrowed money from me.

✓ It was a very expensive wedding and he didn't have enough money to pay for it, so he borrowed money from me.

Use 'wedding' instead of 'marriage' for the event. 'Run it' is informal and awkward here; use 'pay for it' to indicate covering costs. The past tense 'didn't have' and 'borrowed' are correct. Suggestion: prefer 'wedding' and 'pay for' for clarity and naturalness.'