Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect grammar (e.g., tense and possessive forms). Try to use varied vocabulary (enjoy, shop, buy, save).

예시: Yes, I enjoy shopping. For example, I often buy clothes and accessories because I like trying new styles, but sometimes I spend too much and run out of my pocket money. As a result, I now try to set a monthly budget to avoid overspending.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and then one specific reason with a linking phrase. Fix verb forms and misuse of words (e.g., 'show' -> 'shop', 'affordable' usage). Use a varied vocabulary like 'compare', 'affordable', 'budget', 'prefer'.

예시: Yes, I always compare prices when I shop because I need to stay within my budget. For example, when I buy clothes I check several stores online to find the best price, and if an item is too expensive I wait for a sale or choose a cheaper alternative.

제안: Answer directly and give a clear reason with one or two specific examples. Correct word choice ('chores' -> 'choices', 'show' -> 'shop') and remove hesitation. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to make your answer coherent.

예시: Yes, I often find it hard to choose because there are many attractive colours and styles. For example, when I go to a clothing store I get confused between similar items, so I sometimes ask a friend for advice or pick the one that matches most of my existing clothes.

제안: Start with a clear opinion and then qualify it with specific reasons or exceptions. Avoid absolute statements; use linking words like 'however' or 'often'. Improve grammar (singular/plural, word order) and use precise vocabulary (quality, durability, value for money).

예시: I don't think expensive products are always better, but they are often higher quality. For instance, a more expensive coat may use better materials and last longer; however, sometimes a cheaper item offers good value, so I check reviews and materials before deciding.

× You say I'm concerned in shopping and I really like I like each and everything buying and and sometimes I spend a lot of money on shopping and I haven't like my father give me pocket money and I spend on shopping and then I was whole month I have not money.

✓ I am interested in shopping and I really like buying many things. Sometimes I spend a lot of money on shopping because my father does not give me pocket money, so I have no money for the whole month.

Pronoun and verb reference errors and awkward pronoun usage caused unclear meaning. 'You say' is inappropriate for a personal statement; use 'I'. 'Concerned in' is incorrect; use 'interested in'. Repeated 'I like' and 'each and everything buying' are ungrammatical; use 'buying many things'. 'I haven't like my father give me pocket money' mixes tense and pronoun forms; correct to 'my father does not give me pocket money'. Use consistent subject-verb agreement and clearer pronouns. Suggestion: focus on one subject 'I' and ensure verbs agree and prepositions are correct.

× Yes, definitely I compared prices when I show because when I cannot affordable like when prices are too, I check the prices.

✓ Yes, definitely I compare prices when I shop because if something is not affordable, I check the prices.

The student used past 'compared' and 'show' incorrectly; the question asks about habitual action so use present simple 'compare' and 'shop'. 'Cannot affordable' is ungrammatical; use 'is not affordable'. Use 'if' for conditional meaning. Suggestion: for routine actions use present simple and ensure adjectives like 'affordable' pair with 'is/are'.

× For example, I like uh clothes, so I check price.

✓ For example, I like clothes, so I check the price.

'I like uh clothes' contains a filler and plural noun; remove filler. 'Check price' needs an article: 'the price' (specific price) or 'prices' (general). Suggestion: use 'the price' when referring to a specific item's cost.

× It is affordable and I can afford so I buy, but it cannot be affordable, so I can't buy because I do not have enough money.

✓ If it is affordable and I can afford it, I buy it; but if it is not affordable, I cannot buy it because I do not have enough money.

Pronoun and conditional structure errors: repeat 'it' as object for clarity and use 'if' for conditions. 'Cannot be affordable' is wrong; use 'is not affordable'. Use consistent modal 'cannot' and ensure 'afford' takes an object. Suggestion: use clear conditional clauses and repeat the object 'it' when needed.

× Yes it is very difficult for me to make chores when I show up because it in shop there are vibrant colours and such as light colours so I my so I so I get confused and also sometime the the winner said it buy this and it difficult.

✓ Yes, it is very difficult for me to make choices when I shop because the shop has many vibrant and light colours, so I get confused. Sometimes the salesperson tells me to buy something and that makes it even more difficult.

Multiple sentence structure and word choice errors: 'make chores' should be 'make choices'; 'when I show up' should be 'when I shop'; incorrect word order 'it in shop there are' should be simplified to 'the shop has'. Repetition 'so I my so I so I' is filler; remove it. 'the the winner' likely means 'the salesperson' or 'the seller'. Suggestion: choose correct vocabulary ('choices','shop','salesperson') and construct simple sentences to express reasons clearly.

× Yes, definitely I think that expensive product are best because when you give a lot of money on the thing so it is also quality and quantity both of is good like better and moreover when you buy cheaper 1 so it might be not quantity and quality was not good.

✓ Yes, I definitely think that expensive products are better because when you spend a lot of money on something, the quality and quantity are usually good. Moreover, when you buy a cheaper product, the quality and quantity might not be good.

Errors include singular/plural agreement: 'expensive product are' should be 'expensive products are'. 'Give a lot of money on the thing' is incorrect; use 'spend money on something'. 'Both of is good' is ungrammatical; use 'quality and quantity are usually good'. Past tense 'was not good' should be present conditional 'might not be good' to match general statement. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree in number, use correct verbs for spending, and maintain consistent tense for general truths.