Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and stay on topic. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I enjoy shopping”), then briefly give one or two reasons with specific details. Avoid repetition and irrelevant plans about moving countries unless asked. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., enjoy, prefer, browse) and limit to max 4–5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy shopping, especially for clothes and accessories. I like browsing different stores to find unique pieces, and I usually compare styles and prices before I buy. However, I try to stick to a budget, so I shop more during sales or at affordable shops.

제안: Good direct answer and clear reasons, but refine language to be more natural and polite. Use one clear topic sentence, then provide a specific example of how you compare prices and a linking word (for example, “because”, “so”). Avoid informal exclamations and rhetorical questions that sound abrupt.

예시: Yes, I always compare prices because I want to get the best value. For example, I check unit prices and look at different brands online before I buy, so I can decide whether a cheaper option offers similar quality.

제안: Answer directly and avoid unrelated details. Start with a clear topic sentence (“No, I usually find it easy”), then give a brief reason and a specific example (e.g., using a shopping list). Do not introduce off-topic plans—keep to relevant shopping habits and link sentences logically.

예시: No, I usually find it easy because I make a shopping list beforehand. For instance, I plan meals for the week and only buy the items on my list, which helps me choose quickly and avoid impulse purchases.

제안: Be consistent and avoid contradicting yourself. Start with a clear opinion, then give one or two specific reasons or an example comparing quality, durability or brand reputation. Use linking words like “however” or “for example” to show contrast and keep it to a few sentences.

예시: No, I don't think expensive products are always better. For example, some mid-priced brands offer comparable quality and better value, while some expensive items are bought mainly for their brand name rather than superior performance.

× Yes, I so love shopping like I did all the time but the problem is I don't have money but so that's why I want to pass this IELTS and go to Australia because that will give me money to do my shopping more and with that I will really love shopping and you know I just love to shop, shop, shop, shop and that's all.

✓ Yes, I really love shopping; I do it all the time, but the problem is I don't have money, so I want to pass the IELTS and go to Australia because that will give me money to shop more. I really love to shop.

Multiple present tense issues and informal fillers: 'I so love' is informal and ungrammatical; use 'I really love'. 'like I did all the time' mixes past with present; use simple present 'I do it all the time'. Remove redundant 'but so' and streamline clauses: use 'but' or 'so' appropriately. Also break long run-on sentence into shorter sentences for clarity and grammatical correctness. Suggest practicing replacing informal fillers with standard adverbs and keeping tense consistent.

× Of course, you need to compare prices before you shop.

✓ Of course, I need to compare prices before I shop.

Pronoun mismatch with speaker: the student uses 'you' generically but the context is personal preference about their own behaviour. Use 'I' to answer the question directly. If intending general advice, keep 'you' but maintain consistency. Suggest choosing first person for personal answers.

× How would you know if this thing is so expensive and then you buy it, but then the other thing on the other aisle is cheaper or the other brand?

✓ How would I know if this item is expensive and then buy it, only to find that the item on the other aisle or another brand is cheaper?

Pronoun inconsistency and awkward clause structure: switch from 'you' to 'I' to match speaker perspective. 'This thing' is informal; use 'this item'. Use parallel structure 'only to find that' to show consequence. Suggest using clearer nouns and consistent pronouns.

× Of course, if you don't have much money, you're going to compare prices.

✓ Of course, if I don't have much money, I'm going to compare prices.

Same pronoun issue: the student should use 'I' for a personal statement. Also match tense/modal consistency: 'I'm going to compare' or 'I will compare' are both acceptable; use one consistently. Suggest practicing switching from generic 'you' to 'I' when speaking about personal habits.

× What am I just so rich and I, I just buy whatever is there, duh.

✓ What, am I really so rich that I can just buy whatever is there?

Awkward word order and filler words: 'What am I just so rich' is ungrammatical. Reorder to a rhetorical question 'What, am I really so rich that...?' Remove informal interjection 'duh' for formal test context. Suggest rehearsing common rhetorical question forms.

× No, not really. Like why would it be difficult? Of course, before you shop you need a shopping list, so that will prove how professional I am and how ready I am to go to Australia.

✓ No, not really. Why would it be difficult? Of course, before I shop I need a shopping list, which shows how prepared and professional I am to go to Australia.

Pronoun and tense consistency: replace 'you' with 'I' for a personal answer. 'So that will prove' is wordy; use 'which shows' for clarity. Use present simple 'I need' and present simple 'shows'. Also replace 'ready I am' with 'prepared' for natural phrasing. Suggest using concise relative clauses.

× Because you don't just go to the shopping store without a plan.

✓ Because you don't just go to a shop without a plan.

Generic 'you' is acceptable here as general advice, but original 'shopping store' is redundant and awkward. Use 'a shop' or 'a store'. If referring to personal behaviour use 'I don't'. Suggest choosing between general statements ('you') and personal ones ('I') and using natural collocations like 'go to a shop'.

× That's why I don't just go to Australia without a plan.

✓ That's why I wouldn't go to Australia without a plan.

Tense/modal mismatch: 'don't just go' is awkward when discussing a hypothetical future choice. Use conditional/modal 'wouldn't go' to express that one would not take that action. Suggest using modals ('would') for hypothetical decisions.

× I already have a plan, which is to pass the IELTS and live there for free.

✓ I already have a plan: to pass the IELTS and to live there.

'Live there for free' is unclear and potentially ungrammatical as an intention; remove 'for free' unless intended and explain. The structure 'a plan, which is to...' is acceptable but more natural as 'a plan: to...'; keep infinitives parallel. Suggest keeping parallel infinitive forms and avoiding unclear phrases.

× No, I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones.

✓ No, I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No correction necessary.

× That's because, you know, actually cross that I do think they're better.

✓ Actually, I don't think that they are always better; in some cases I think they are better.

Confused self-correction and disfluent speech: 'cross that' is unclear and ungrammatical. The speaker seems to be changing their mind; make the correction explicit: 'Actually, I don't think they're always better; sometimes they are.' Suggest planning brief coherent corrections when changing an opinion during a short answer.