Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid filler words (umm) and unclear terms ("animal shoes"), correct grammar ("once a half a year" → "once every six months"), and limit to ≤5 sentences. Add a brief reason with a linking word to support your answer (e.g., "because").

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, especially casual sneakers. I usually buy new shoes about once every six months because I wear them daily and need replacements. For example, I prefer durable sneakers that are comfortable for walking.

Sugestão: Answer directly and correct vocabulary and grammar: use "bought" or "purchased" and say "fit well" not "perfectly fit and my food side." Avoid awkward metaphors or explain them clearly (e.g., "my feet are wide"). Use one linking phrase to explain the reason and keep it short.

Exemplo: No, I have never bought shoes online because I'm worried they won't fit properly. My feet are quite wide, so I prefer trying shoes on in a shop to ensure they are comfortable.

Sugestão: Give a clear, direct amount and use correct tense and phrasing. Remove fillers ("umm") and avoid repetition. Add a brief comparison with a linking word (e.g., "but" or "however") to explain change over time. Keep within five sentences.

Exemplo: I usually spend around ¥20,000 on a pair of sneakers. When I was a university student, however, I bought much cheaper shoes because I had less money.

Sugestão: Give a single clear topic sentence stating your preference, then add one or two supporting reasons with linking words. Fix grammatical errors ("fit my size" → "fit me well"; "quality of my life" → "quality of life"). Avoid repetition and keep language natural.

Exemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because they fit me well and prevent foot pain. As a result, wearing comfortable shoes improves my daily life and allows me to walk longer without discomfort.

× I often purchase new shoes maybe once a half a year because I use everyday.

✓ I often purchase new shoes maybe once every half year because I use them every day.

The phrase 'once a half a year' is an incorrect quantifier; 'once every half year' or 'once every six months' is correct. Also 'I use everyday' is missing the object and uses 'everyday' (adjective) instead of the adverbial phrase 'every day'; include the object 'them' and use 'every day'. Use consistent quantifiers and correct adjective/adverb forms.

× I use animal shoes every day, therefore I have to.

✓ I wear animal shoes every day, so I have to.

'Use' is acceptable but 'wear' is more natural for shoes. 'Therefore' is a formal connective; 'so' fits conversational tone. The original sentence lacks a clear object of 'have to' (have to what?)—context implies 'have to buy them' or 'have to wear them'. Clarify by keeping 'have to' with implied meaning or specify the action.

× I have never purchased new shoes via online shopping because I don't know whether it is perfectly fit and my food side because my foot is like a plate and very difficult to find their shoes suitable.

✓ I have never purchased new shoes online because I don't know whether they will fit perfectly; my foot is very flat and it's difficult to find shoes that suit me.

'Via online shopping' is wordy; 'online' is sufficient. 'Whether it is perfectly fit' is incorrect verb and pronoun use—use 'whether they will fit perfectly'. 'My food side' is incorrect; likely 'my foot is very flat'. 'Their shoes suitable' misuses pronoun; use 'shoes that suit me'. Ensure correct pronouns and adjective order.

× I usually spend ¥20,000 for buying sneakers.

✓ I usually spend ¥20,000 on buying sneakers.

The correct preposition with 'spend' is 'on' not 'for'. This is categorized under article/preposition issues; change 'for' to 'on' to form the correct collocation 'spend X on Y'.

× Of course, when I was in university student university, I purchased umm, more cheaper ones, but I now have money therefore.

✓ Of course, when I was a university student, I bought cheaper ones, but now I can afford better ones because I have money.

'When I was in university student university' is ungrammatical; correct is 'when I was a university student' or 'when I was at university'. 'Purchased umm, more cheaper ones' is wrong: 'more cheaper' is redundant; use 'cheaper ones' and 'bought' (simple past) fits the past timeframe. 'but I now have money therefore' has awkward word order; 'but now I can afford better ones because I have money' is clearer. Fix word order and comparative redundancy.

× I prefer comfortable shoes because. It is very it is essential to use their shoes which fit my size of the fit foot and since this leads to an quality of my life, I I believe it's.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because it is essential to wear shoes that fit the size of my feet, and this improves my quality of life.

The original has sentence fragments ('because.'), repetitions ('it is very it is'), incorrect pronoun 'their shoes' (should refer to 'shoes that' or 'the shoes that'), awkward phrase 'size of the fit foot' and 'an quality' (article error). Combine clauses into a complete sentence, use 'wear' for shoes, 'feet' plural, 'shoes that fit' and 'improves my quality of life' for clarity.