Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar, word choice and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and use specific frequency phrase. Keep to 2–4 concise sentences and avoid redundant phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because they help me express my personal style and make daily activities more comfortable. I usually buy shoes about once every two months, or roughly six pairs a year.

Sugestão: Use consistent tense and clearer reasons with linking words. Correct word order and comparative forms. Give one or two specific examples and use connectors like 'because' or 'so'.

Exemplo: Yes, I usually buy shoes online because the prices are cheaper and the quality is often good. For example, I bought a comfortable pair of sandals last summer because it was much hotter and online stores had more styles and discounts.

Sugestão: Be specific about amounts and simplify ideas. Use clear structure: state an approximate amount, then give concise reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

Exemplo: I usually spend around $50–$100 on a pair of shoes, depending on the type. I am willing to pay more for comfortable shoes because they protect my feet and help me focus during work or exercise, and they also reflect my personal style.

Sugestão: Make a clear, concise preference statement and support it with one or two logical reasons and a linking word. Avoid repeating the same idea and correct grammar.

Exemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because comfort affects my health and daily performance. For instance, I choose supportive sneakers for long walks even if they are less trendy, since I can wear them all day without pain.

× Yes, I enjoying buying shoes because they allow me express my personal style and improve comfortable for my daily activity.

✓ Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because they allow me to express my personal style and improve comfort for my daily activities.

The verb 'enjoy' should be in base form with -ing for the following verb ('enjoy buying') but here 'enjoying' is incorrect without an auxiliary; correct is 'I enjoy'. 'Allow me express' is missing the infinitive marker 'to' (allow someone to do something). 'Improve comfortable' wrongly uses an adjective; use the noun 'comfort'. 'Daily activity' should be plural 'daily activities' to match general meaning. Suggestion: use 'I enjoy', include 'to' after 'allow', use noun 'comfort', and pluralize 'activities'.

× I shoe the shoes about everything 6.

✓ I choose shoes for almost every occasion.

The original sentence has incorrect word choice ('shoe' instead of 'choose'), unclear phrase 'about everything 6' (likely meant 'almost everything' or 'every occasion') and number '6' appears erroneously. This is a sentence structure and word choice issue. Suggestion: replace 'shoe' with 'choose', use 'almost every occasion' to express generality, and remove the stray '6'.

× Usually I bought online shoes because they are very good quality and the and the price also cheaper than offline.

✓ Usually I buy shoes online because they are very good quality and the price is also cheaper than offline.

Tense and subject-verb issues: the question asks about general habit, so present simple 'I buy' is required instead of past 'I bought'. 'Price also cheaper' misses the verb 'is' for third person singular subject 'price' (use 'the price is cheaper'). Also remove duplicate 'the and the'. Suggestion: use present simple for habits and include 'is' with singular nouns.

× At the time of summer I usually buy online because there are very hotter days.

✓ In the summer I usually buy online because the days are hotter.

Use the prepositional phrase 'in the summer' rather than 'at the time of summer'. 'There are very hotter days' is ungrammatical: 'very hotter' is a double modifier; use 'hotter' alone and place the subject 'the days' before the verb: 'the days are hotter'. Suggestion: use 'in the summer' and 'the days are hotter'.

× I usually spend the money in the thousands because I think so that shoes are the thing which we have to take very important because we want a comfortable shoes for our health.

✓ I usually spend thousands of dollars because I think shoes are something we should consider important since we want comfortable shoes for our health.

'Spend the money in the thousands' is awkward; use 'spend thousands of dollars' or 'spend a lot'. 'I think so that' is incorrect; use 'because' or 'since'. 'The thing which we have to take very important' is ungrammatical — use 'something we should consider important'. 'A comfortable shoes' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'comfortable shoes' or 'a comfortable shoe'. Suggestion: simplify and use natural collocations: 'spend thousands', 'because', 'something we should consider important', and match article with noun number.

× It's only depend on the things which we concentrate on our things.

✓ It only depends on what we focus on.

'It's only depend' has wrong verb form; 'depend' should be 'depends' for third person singular 'it'. The phrase 'the things which we concentrate on our things' is redundant and ungrammatical. Replace with concise 'what we focus on'. Suggestion: use correct subject-verb agreement and simpler phrasing.

× If our shoes are not comfortable, we cannot focus on our things and the shoes.

✓ If our shoes are not comfortable, we cannot focus on our tasks or on the shoes.

'Our things' is vague and informal; use 'our tasks' or 'what we are doing'. Add parallel prepositional phrase 'or on the shoes' for clarity. Tense is fine; this is phrasing and word choice improvement. Suggestion: replace 'things' with 'tasks' and make parallel structure 'focus on X or on Y'.

× I I think it is shows our personality.

✓ I think it shows our personality.

There is a duplicated pronoun 'I I'. Also 'it is shows' incorrectly combines auxiliary 'is' with the verb 'shows' — use either 'it shows' or 'it is' plus adjective. Correct form is 'I think it shows our personality.' Suggestion: remove duplicate and use correct verb form 'shows'.

× I usually prefer comfortable shoes because comfortable is more important than fashion because if we are not comfortable, we are not shown as fashionable.

✓ I usually prefer comfortable shoes because comfort is more important than fashion; if we are not comfortable, we do not appear fashionable.

'Comfortable is more important' uses adjective where noun 'comfort' is needed to compare concepts. 'We are not shown as fashionable' is awkward; use 'we do not appear fashionable'. Suggestion: use noun 'comfort' when comparing with 'fashion' and choose natural verb 'appear'.

× Also, we totally depend on the comfortable shoes.

✓ Also, we totally depend on comfortable shoes.

'The comfortable shoes' implies specific shoes; general statement should use no article: 'comfortable shoes'. Suggestion: remove definite article when speaking generally.