Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clear and natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid unclear phrases (e.g. “in praying ways”), and give one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Use correct grammar and reduce repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I enjoy watching Premier League football because I’m a big fan of the sport and follow my favourite team each week. Also, I sometimes watch matches with friends, which makes the experience more exciting.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and add specific details with linking words. Correct tense and articles (e.g. “when I was in elementary school”) and avoid short, disjointed sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. When I was in elementary school, I enjoyed playing games on my Nintendo 3DS, especially adventure and puzzle games. I often played with a close friend after school, which helped us bond and practise teamwork.

Sugestão: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Give a clear timeline and use linking words to explain frequency or routine. Correct awkward phrases (e.g. “spring soccer”) and reduce repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I have played soccer since middle school and still play every Sunday with my friends. Because I enjoy the teamwork and exercise, it has become a regular part of my week.

Sugestão: Give a clear direct answer and then explain with specific details and linking words. Avoid repetition and awkward wording (e.g. “she's she's good”). Describe feelings briefly and exactly.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I sometimes play the piano with my younger sister, who is more skilled than I am. Because she plays more confidently, I occasionally feel a little self-conscious, but practising together helps me improve.

× Yes I have, I enjoy watching football game in Premier League in UK because I like soccer in praying ways. Also watching.

✓ Yes, I do. I enjoy watching football games in the Premier League in the UK because I like soccer in a passionate way. I also enjoy watching other competitions.

Original sentence misused 'I have' instead of 'I do' after 'Do you have any hobbies?' and used singular 'football game' instead of plural 'football games' when speaking generally (Grammar Problem Type 1: singular and plural issue). 'Watching' at the end was a fragment. The phrase 'in praying ways' is incorrect word choice; 'in a passionate way' or 'passionately' conveys the intended meaning (incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs, Type 13). Suggestions: use 'I do' to answer yes/no question, use plural for habitual activities, avoid sentence fragments, and choose appropriate adverb/phrase for manner.

× Yes, I did. When I was elementary school, I enjoyed playing games in Nintendo 3DS especially I played with my friend. Yes.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was in elementary school, I enjoyed playing games on my Nintendo 3DS, especially with my friend.

Missing preposition 'in' before 'elementary school' is an incorrect use of prepositions (Type 11). 'In Nintendo 3DS' should be 'on my Nintendo 3DS' (Type 11). Repetition 'I played with my friend' is redundant; make it concise. Past tense 'enjoyed' is correct. Suggestions: include 'in' for school levels, use 'on' for gaming platforms, and avoid redundant clauses.

× Yes I do. I I've enjoyed playing soccer since when I was middle school and when I was in middle school I always spring soccer with my friend and every Sunday.

✓ Yes, I do. I've enjoyed playing soccer since I was in middle school, and when I was in middle school I always played soccer with my friends every Sunday.

The phrase 'since when I was middle school' is incorrect; use 'since I was in middle school' (preposition error, Type 11). 'I've enjoyed' (present perfect) is appropriate for an action continuing from the past to present (Type 6 present tense issue if misused). 'Spring soccer' is incorrect word choice; seems intended 'played soccer' (verb form, Type 8/9). 'Friend' should be plural 'friends' if more than one or 'friend' singular consistent; context implies multiple Sundays with friends so plural (singular/plural issue, Type 1). Suggestions: use 'since' with a clause, maintain consistent tense (present perfect for continuing action), and use correct verb 'played' for past habitual actions.

× Yes I have. I enjoy playing piano with my little sister. She's she's good, but she's good at playing piano more than me. So sometimes I'm confused and I'm a bit embarrassed.

✓ Yes, I do. I enjoy playing the piano with my little sister. She's very good; she's better at playing the piano than I am. Sometimes I feel a bit embarrassed.

'Yes I have' should be 'Yes, I do' for 'Do you have...' (auxiliary choice, Type 12 pronoun/auxiliary confusion). 'Playing piano' needs the definite article 'the' for the instrument (article error, Type 22). Repetition 'She's she's' is a speech disfluency; remove duplicate. Comparative 'more than me' is informal; use 'better than I am' for correct grammar (comparative structure, Type 25). 'I'm confused' is acceptable but 'I feel embarrassed' is more natural. Suggestions: use 'the' with instruments, correct comparative form, and avoid duplicated words.