Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fragments and irrelevant references (e.g., "compound lift") unless they relate directly. Speak in complete sentences and limit to 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I do walk regularly, especially around my neighborhood. For example, I put on my sneakers and walk around the block three or four times a week to stay fit. Besides walking, I sometimes do short strength sessions, but walking is my preferred easy cardio.

Sugestão: Answer directly and avoid run-on sentences. Use a clear past-tense topic sentence, then give one or two specific memories or reasons with linking words (for example, "because" or "so"). Finish the thought—don't leave sentences trailing off.

Exemplo: Yes, I often went outside to walk when I was a child because I lived near a park. For instance, I used to explore the woods behind my house and meet neighborhood kids, which helped me make friends and stay active.

Sugestão: Provide a clear full-sentence topic and explain with specific reasons and examples linked logically. Use linking words like "because," "for example," or "also." Avoid incomplete phrases and unclear endings.

Exemplo: People like walking in parks because it combines exercise with pleasant surroundings. For example, parks offer fresh air and scenery, and many people enjoy meeting others or joining group activities like tai chi or calisthenics.

Sugestão: Be specific and fluent. Start with a clear conditional sentence (If I had the chance, I would...), name one or two places and give precise reasons. Reduce hesitations and filler words; keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in the mountains of Sabah because the air is fresh and the trails are peaceful. Alternatively, I would walk along the coast at Danang to relax and escape the stress of city life.

Sugestão: Use past tense correctly and give a concise, completed answer. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then add specific details (when, how long, who you met, what you did). Avoid unfinished sentences and repetition.

Exemplo: Recently I went to the local park and walked for about an hour to clear my head. While there, I enjoyed the fresh air and chatted briefly with a friend, which helped me relax after a busy week.

× I would jump straight into my pair of shoes, whether my sneakers or trainers, and walk around the block.

✓ I would jump straight into a pair of shoes, whether sneakers or trainers, and walk around the block.

Use of 'my pair of shoes' is awkward; 'a pair of shoes' or simply 'a pair' is correct. Also 'my sneakers or trainers' repeated possessive is unnecessary. Keep nouns consistent and concise. Suggestion: say 'a pair of shoes' or 'my sneakers' but not both together.

× It's a fun corridor activity since you don't necessarily have to hit the gym and try to do a lot of work with a lot of exercise machines.

✓ It's a fun indoor activity since you don't necessarily have to go to the gym or use many exercise machines.

'Corridor activity' is unclear; 'indoor activity' fits context. 'Hit the gym' is colloquial but 'go to the gym' is more neutral. Use parallel structure 'go to the gym or use many exercise machines' rather than 'and try to do a lot of work with a lot of exercise machines.' Suggestion: simplify and use parallel verbs.

× Or I do compound lift.

✓ Or I do compound lifts.

Singular/plural mismatch and missing plural marker for the noun 'lifts'. 'Compound lifts' (plural) correctly names the exercise type. Suggestion: use plural for general activities.

× All you need to do is just.

✓ All you need to do is just put on your shoes and go for a walk.

Sentence fragment missing the main verb/complement. Complete the idea by adding the action. Suggestion: always provide a verb phrase after 'All you need to do is'.

× Back then, when I was a kid, I would more often than not get out and about in nature, and I'm sweating myself by jumping on my shoes and walking around the block is a great way to get to know people in the neighborhood, to shake hands and rub shoulders with those that I haven't really met with and talked to.

✓ Back then, when I was a kid, I would more often than not get out and about in nature; I used to put on my shoes and walk around the block. It was a great way to meet people in the neighborhood, shake hands, and rub shoulders with those I hadn't met or talked to.

Mixed tenses: present progressive 'I'm sweating myself' is wrong in past narration. 'Jumping on my shoes' is incorrect collocation; use 'put on my shoes'. Use past perfect or simple past for completed past actions and correct relative clause 'those I hadn't met or talked to'. Suggestion: Keep past narration consistent and use correct collocations.

× Is a great form of cardio activity in the park.

✓ It is a great form of cardio activity in the park.

Sentence lacks subject 'It'. English requires explicit subject in this clause. Suggestion: start sentence with 'It is'.

× You have the landscape, you are out in the open and there are quite a lot of people sharing the same passion.

✓ You have the scenery, you are out in the open, and there are many people who share the same interest.

'Landscape' is acceptable but 'scenery' fits better; 'sharing the same passion' is awkward for casual walking—use 'share the same interest'. Also 'quite a lot of people' is informal; 'many people' is clearer. Suggestion: choose vocabulary appropriate to context.

× Well, walking around and actually going for a leisurely stroll around the lake, shaking hands and rubbed shoulders and doing Tai chi, calisthenics and so on you feel.

✓ Well, walking around and actually going for a leisurely stroll around the lake, shaking hands and rubbing shoulders, and doing Tai chi or calisthenics, you feel relaxed and connected.

Mix of verb forms: 'rubbed shoulders' should be 'rubbing shoulders' to match parallel '-ing' forms. Sentence lacks final clause; add 'you feel' complement such as 'relaxed and connected'. Suggestion: keep parallel '-ing' forms and complete the sentence.

× In some treacherous place of the beaten track, such as in mountainous regions like Sabah, or along the coastline like in Danang Mahi Beach, umm, when the air is fresh and umm I have some breather, umm get away from the hustling, umm city life and umm the intricate uh, workload that I have every day.

✓ In some off-the-beaten-track place, such as mountainous regions like Sabah or along coastlines like Da Nang Mahi Beach, when the air is fresh and I can get some rest and get away from the bustling city life and the heavy workload I have every day.

Incorrect idiom 'treacherous place of the beaten track' should be 'off-the-beaten-track'. 'Breather' needs article 'a breather' and 'hustling city life' should be 'bustling city life'. Sentence is run-on and needs restructuring; 'intricate workload' is odd—use 'heavy workload'. Suggestion: use correct idioms and articles, and break long sentences into clearer structure.

× Perhaps when I'm all along.

✓ Perhaps when I'm alone.

'All along' means 'all the time' and doesn't fit; intended word is 'alone'. Use 'alone' for being by oneself. Suggestion: choose the correct adverb/adjective for the intended meaning.

× Well, recently I I'm hit the park and walk around the park from around an hour or so to clear my head and really to give myself some form of exercise and to put my feet up in my way.

✓ Well, recently I hit the park and walked around for about an hour to clear my head, get some exercise, and put my feet up for a while.

Contains extraneous 'I' and wrong tense mix 'I I'm hit'. Use simple past 'hit' or 'went to' and past 'walked'. Phrases 'from around an hour or so' and 'put my feet up in my way' are awkward; simplify to 'for about an hour' and 'put my feet up for a while'. Suggestion: correct tense consistency and simplify idiomatic expressions.

× To take a breather from the pressure of my daily life, to enjoy the fresh air and to socialize with.

✓ To take a breather from the pressures of daily life, enjoy the fresh air, and socialize with others.

Sentence fragment ends with 'socialize with' missing object; add 'others'. Also use plural 'pressures' and remove extra 'my' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: ensure verbs have objects when required and complete parallel structure.