Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce hesitation and correct small grammar (e.g., "I usually stand" not "I usually stand up" is fine but remove repeated "yes").

Exemplo: Yes, I walk a lot. I aim for 10,000 steps daily because walking helps me relax and feel refreshed. Also, at work I often stand and move around while supervising children, which adds to my daily activity.

Sugestão: Provide a clear past-tense topic sentence and avoid filler phrases. Use linking words to connect past habit to present routine and correct tense consistency (e.g., "I used to" not "I walk").

Exemplo: Yes, I used to go for walks often as a child. My parents had a habit of walking for at least 20 minutes after dinner, so it became part of my routine; now I still walk after dinner for the same reason.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Use linking words (for example, "First", "Also") and correct grammar ("it maintains good health"). Give one or two specific reasons with brief examples.

Exemplo: People like walking in parks because it is good for their health. Also, parks provide a pleasant setting to socialize with friends or family, for example, walking a dog or having a chat on a bench.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear, direct sentence stating the destination, then give two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid vague phrases and improve grammatical accuracy ("hostels", "you stay there"). Clarify the idea about reflection with a concise phrase.

Exemplo: I'd like to walk the Camino de Santiago in Spain because it is a long pilgrimage route with many small hostels where walkers stay overnight, which makes it easy to meet people from around the world. Additionally, a long walk like that gives you time to reflect on your life and priorities.

Sugestão: Use past tense consistently and avoid fillers. Start with a topic sentence (When and where), then add one or two specific details and explain what "UMM" refers to (uncertain phrase). Replace vague words like "like" and "um" with precise language.

Exemplo: Yesterday I went for a walk at North Beach because it has a beautiful coastal path. I parked nearby and walked along the shore for about an hour, watching a stunning sunset, which made me feel relaxed and refreshed.

× Yes, I walk outside.

✓ Yes, I used to walk outside.

The student is talking about past habitual action (when they were a child), so the past habitual form 'used to' is appropriate. Using simple present 'I walk' incorrectly mixes time reference. Suggestion: use 'used to' or simple past 'I walked' when describing past habits.

× When I was a child because my parents, they have a habit.

✓ When I was a child my parents had a habit.

Redundant pronoun 'they' and incorrect tense 'have' for past context. Use past tense 'had' and remove the unnecessary 'they'. Suggestion: keep subject once and match tense to the time frame.

× After dinner, we always go for a walk, at least 20 minutes.

✓ After dinner, we always went for a walk, for at least 20 minutes.

Describing a habitual past action, so past tense 'went' fits. Also include 'for' before duration. Suggestion: use past simple for past habits and 'for' with durations.

× So yeah, I was always with them, so it became my habit too.

✓ So yeah, I was always with them, so it became a habit of mine too.

Sentence mostly correct but phrasing improved: 'my habit' is awkward; 'a habit of mine' is more natural. Tense is past and consistent.

× These days, like I have a dinner and I go for a walk.

✓ These days, I have dinner and then I go for a walk.

When describing current routine use simple present 'have' and 'go'. Remove filler 'like' and add 'then' for sequence. Suggestion: use present simple for routines and clearer sequencing words.

× Because I think it's good for health, it maintain umm good health also like you can enjoy time with your friends or family when you walk, you can have a chat or you can go for a walk with dogs.

✓ Because I think it's good for health; it maintains good health. Also, you can enjoy time with friends or family when you walk, have a chat, or walk with your dog.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it maintain' should be 'it maintains'. Redundant phrases and pluralization: 'with dogs' changed to 'with your dog' or 'dogs' depending on meaning; context suggests 'your dog'. Use semicolons/commas to separate ideas and parallel verb forms. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with subject and maintain parallel structure in lists.

× I want to go to Spain because I heard they have a really long walking path, like it takes maybe for some people seven days, for some people like 20 days.

✓ I want to go to Spain because I heard they have a really long walking route; for some people it takes seven days, for others about twenty days.

Use 'route' or 'path' consistently and correct word order: 'it takes ...' The original had awkward placement of 'for some people' and unnecessary 'like'. Suggestion: use clear subject-verb order and avoid filler 'like'.

× And on the way they have a little hostels.

✓ And along the way they have small hostels.

Article error: 'a little hostels' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'hostels' and incorrect adjective use. Use 'small hostels' or 'a little hostel' singular. Suggestion: match article/number and use appropriate adjective forms.

× So you have to sleep there.

✓ So you have to sleep there during the trip.

Tense is acceptable but add context 'during the trip' for clarity. No major grammar error; suggestion improves clarity.

× So you meet new people around the world.

✓ So you meet new people from around the world.

Add preposition 'from' to indicate origin. Tense is present generic. Suggestion: include 'from' to clarify meaning.

× And then I heard when you walk that long you can think your whole life.

✓ And then I heard that when you walk that long you can reflect on your whole life.

Verb choice: 'think your whole life' is awkward. Use 'reflect on your whole life' or 'think about your whole life.' Add 'that' after 'heard' for clarity. Suggestion: choose appropriate verb and include conjunctions for clarity.

× Yes I I usually stand up at work as well because I have to supervise children at the yard.

✓ Yes, I usually stand up at work as well because I have to supervise the children in the yard.

Tense 'usually' with present is fine, but 'at the yard' is unnatural; use 'in the yard' and include definite article for specific children. Also fix repeated 'I'. Suggestion: remove repetition and use correct preposition and articles.

× Yes I do, I try to walk 10,000 steps every day because if I'm walking I feel really relaxed and then fresh.

✓ Yes, I do. I try to walk 10,000 steps every day because when I'm walking I feel really relaxed and refreshed.

Combine sentences properly with punctuation. Use 'when' rather than 'if' for habitual condition. 'Then fresh' is incorrect; use 'refreshed' (adjective). Suggestion: use 'refreshed' and 'when' for habitual situations.

× I want to go to Spain because I heard when you walk that long you can think your whole life.

✓ I want to go to Spain because I heard that when you walk that long you can reflect on your whole life.

Duplicate of earlier; ensures 'heard that' and better verb 'reflect on.'

× Actually yesterday I went to North Beach because they have a beautiful walking path.

✓ Actually, yesterday I went to North Beach because it has a beautiful walking path.

Pronoun agreement: 'they have' incorrectly refers to 'North Beach' (singular); use 'it has'. Tense past 'went' is correct. Suggestion: match pronoun number to noun.

× So I drove there, I parked and then I walk along the beach for like 1 hour or so.

✓ So I drove there, parked, and then walked along the beach for about an hour or so.

Sequence of past actions requires past tense 'walked' not present 'walk'. Use 'about an hour' for natural duration expression. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for past events.

× I could see a sunset.

✓ I saw a sunset.

Both 'I could see a sunset' and 'I saw a sunset' are acceptable; however, simple past 'I saw' is more direct. 'Could see' indicates ability; if describing an event, prefer simple past. Suggestion: use simple past for recounting events.

× Also it was good for my UMM.

✓ Also, it was good for me mentally.

'UMM' appears to be a filler; unclear pronoun/object. Replace with clear expression 'me mentally' or 'my mental health.' Suggestion: avoid unclear fillers and use standard terms like 'mental health.'