Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Ваш ответ в целом хороший: прямое вступление, причина и личное впечатление. Чтобы набрать больше баллов, сократите повторы, используйте связующие слова и добавьте одну-две конкретные детали (например, что именно привлекает вас в пейзаже или когда вы особенно любите смотреть в окно). Также избегайте нечетких фраз вроде «at some point» — замените их более точным описанием.

Exemplo: Yes, I often look out of the window because I enjoy watching the landscape change during my journey. For example, I like noticing shifting light on the fields and the different colours of the sky as we move from city to countryside. This calm observation helps me relax and think clearly during the trip.

Sugestão: Ответ понятен, но звучит немного категорично и повторяет идею дважды. Улучшите связность, добавьте связующее слово и один конкретный пример ситуации, когда вы бы всё-таки сделали фотографию. Избегайте эмоциональных слов «impossible» и «very much» — точнее объясните проблему.

Exemplo: Generally, I don’t take photos from a moving car because the images often turn out blurred. However, if I see something unusual, such as a striking sunset or a rare animal, I might quickly snap a picture through the window to capture the moment.

Sugestão: Вы даёте интересное, развернутое мнение, но ответ немного запутанный — сначала говорите о предпочтении моря, затем выбираете горы. Уточните позицию в начале и используйте логические связки для объяснения смены мнения. Добавьте одну конкретную причину или пример, объясняющий выбор.

Exemplo: I usually prefer spending holidays by the sea because I enjoy swimming and relaxing on the beach. That said, I also admire mountains for their dramatic scenery and photographic appeal; for instance, I once hiked to a ridge at sunrise and the view was unforgettable, which makes me appreciate both settings.

× It's because I am fascinated by those views and I really enjoy seeing them change fast during the time of my travel.

✓ It's because I am fascinated by those views and I really enjoy seeing them change quickly during my travel.

The adverb 'fast' is colloquial and less appropriate for describing the speed of visual change; 'quickly' is the correct adverb form modifying the verb 'change'. Also 'during the time of my travel' is wordy; 'during my travel' or 'while I travel' is more natural. ID:6

× It's an experience close to meditation for me at some point.

✓ It's an experience close to meditation for me at times.

The phrase 'at some point' implies a single moment; 'at times' or 'sometimes' better matches the intended meaning of occasional experience. No -ing form needed, but the temporal expression was awkward. ID:8

× No, I believe it's impossible to take a good picture outside the car window because the quality of the photo decreases very much.

✓ No, I believe it's impossible to take a good picture through a car window because the photo quality decreases a lot.

Use 'through a car window' rather than 'outside the car window' to describe photographing from inside a vehicle. 'Decreases very much' is unnatural; 'decreases a lot' or 'is greatly reduced' are better. This sentence involves modal judgment ('believe it's impossible') but the main issue is phrasing around the camera action and degree adverb. ID:4

× But I can if I don't have an opportunity to stop and take a photo properly.

✓ But I can if I don't have an opportunity to stop and take a photo properly.

The original sentence is grammatically acceptable for modal use; no correction needed. It correctly uses 'can' to express ability in a conditional context. (No change) ID:4

× Personally, I would rather spend my holiday at the sea.

✓ Personally, I would rather spend my holiday by the sea.

English commonly uses 'by the sea' or 'at the seaside' rather than 'at the sea' to indicate location near the sea. This is a preposition collocation issue. ID:11

× However, in a cinematic point of view, mountains have a strong presence at every photo and I believe that every viewer is mesmerized by their striking beauty and so am I.

✓ However, from a cinematic point of view, mountains have a strong presence in every photo, and I believe that every viewer, including me, is mesmerized by their striking beauty.

Use 'from a cinematic point of view' rather than 'in a cinematic point of view'. 'Presence in every photo' is the correct preposition. The original sentence is long and needs commas and clearer phrasing; 'and so am I' is colloquial and unclear—'including me' clarifies the meaning. This addresses sentence structure and preposition choice. ID:26

× So I would choose mountains.

✓ So I would choose the mountains.

Adding the definite article 'the' before plural geographical features like 'mountains' is natural when contrasting options (the mountains vs the sea). This improves sentence flow and clarity. ID:26