Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct small grammar and word-choice errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and redundant phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by car or bus. I especially enjoy seeing mountains, rivers and landscaped areas because they make me feel calm and relaxed. For example, on my last trip I watched a river valley pass by and felt peaceful for the entire journey.

Sugestão: Give a clear, structured answer: one topic sentence then specific details about frequency, purpose and method. Reduce repetition and fillers. Use linking words like 'so' or 'then' to show sequence.

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos of interesting scenery from the car. When I see a new view, I quickly photograph it so I can share it with friends or save it for memories. Later I usually edit the best shots and post them on social media.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear preference, then give one specific reason and a short example. Correct tense errors and remove hesitation. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

Exemplo: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and the fresh air. For example, I went with my family to the Aretha Sahib Gurdwara on a hillside and the views and peaceful atmosphere made the trip unforgettable.

× I look out of the window when there are different kinds of view like mountain and hills, a Riverside or landscaping view.

✓ I look out of the window when there are different kinds of views, like mountains and hills, a riverside, or a landscaped view.

Errors: incorrect preposition usage (riverside should be lowercase and 'a Riverside' wrong), missing plural for 'views', missing articles before singular nouns, and 'landscaping view' is unnatural; use 'landscaped view'. Suggestion: use plural 'views' for different kinds, use articles ('a') before singular countable nouns, use correct noun forms ('riverside', 'landscaped').

× I feel very calm viewing them and it looks very peaceful and uh, noise free.

✓ I feel very calm looking at them, and it looks very peaceful and quiet.

Error: 'noise free' is an adjective phrase but unnatural; use 'quiet' or 'noise-free' with a hyphen. Also 'viewing them' is better as 'looking at them'. Suggestion: choose natural adjective 'quiet' or hyphenate compound adjectives, and use 'looking at' for scenes.

× Uh, yes, I do take photos when I see a new or different kinds of views from my car.

✓ Yes, I do take photos when I see new or different kinds of views from my car.

Error: mismatch between singular 'a' and plural 'kinds'; 'a new or different kinds' is incorrect. Suggestion: remove 'a' before 'new' or change to 'a new view or a different kind of view' to match number agreement.

× I used to take snaps and send to my friends along with that I, uh, keep them for me, uh, with me and uh, uh, put post and uh, make stories for them.

✓ I used to take snaps and send them to my friends; I also keep them with me and post them or make stories about them.

Errors: missing object pronoun 'them' after 'send'; awkward pronoun phrases 'keep them for me, with me' and 'put post' incorrect. Suggestion: use correct object pronouns and clearer verbs: 'send them', 'keep them with me', 'post them', 'make stories about them'.

× I most probably uh, prefer mountains and hills because I like going on them.

✓ I would most probably prefer the mountains and hills because I like going to them.

Errors: tense/modal usage: 'I most probably prefer' is awkward; use 'I would most probably prefer' or 'I most probably prefer the mountains' depending on context. Also preposition 'going on them' is incorrect for mountains/hills; use 'going to them'. Suggestion: use modal 'would' for preference and correct preposition 'to' for visiting places.

× I remember one of my trip when I go when I went with my family to Aretha Sahib Gurdwara and it was amazing destination on a hillside.

✓ I remember one of my trips when I went with my family to Aretha Sahib Gurdwara; it was an amazing destination on a hillside.

Errors: 'one of my trip' should be 'one of my trips' (plural), redundant 'when I go when I went'—use past 'when I went', missing article 'an' before 'amazing destination'. Suggestion: use plural for 'one of my trips', use past tense consistently, and include the article 'an' before singular countable nouns.