Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitions and fillers, and add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Also correct small grammatical errors (e.g., "when I'm traveling by car") and avoid invented phrases like "deep dafts."

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I enjoy looking out of the car window when I travel because the changing landscape relaxes me. For example, I like watching fields and small villages pass by while listening to music, which helps me unwind during long journeys.

Sugestão: Reduce hesitations and organize reasons clearly. Use linking words like "first" and "second" but follow them with concise, specific explanations. Finish your sentence with a clear result or feeling rather than trailing off.

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos from the car window. Firstly, I'm passionate about photography, so I like capturing unusual light and scenery. Secondly, taking these shots helps me remember places and moods, so I can look back at them later.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give a clear, specific reason. Avoid grammar mistakes such as "visited to" and unnecessary repetition. If you haven't visited the sea, say so clearly and explain why you want to. Keep to one or two supporting sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea. Although I haven't had many chances to visit beaches, I would love to because I enjoy the sound of waves and relaxing on the shore. If I had the opportunity, I would spend time swimming and walking along the coast.

× Yes I do. I really like to look out the window at the scenery when I TR traveling by a car while I'm listening to music because it it feels like I'm in it feels like I'm in deep dafts and.

✓ Yes, I do. I really like to look out the window at the scenery when I'm traveling by car while I'm listening to music because it feels like I'm in deep thought.

Error type 10: The sentence had incorrect verb form 'TR traveling' and redundant phrasing 'it it feels like I'm in it feels like I'm in'. Use the present participle 'traveling' with 'I am' (I'm traveling). Remove the article 'a' before 'car' when speaking generally. Eliminate repeated fragments and replace unclear 'deep dafts' with 'deep thought' (or another intended noun). Also add commas and contractions for natural spoken English.

× Yes, I do. I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because, umm, first of all, I'm really keen on taking photos and it's uh, related to my interest and second of all, uh, it's like, uh, taking those moments feels makes me more.

✓ Yes, I do. I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because, first of all, I'm really keen on photography and it relates to my interests; second, capturing those moments makes me happier.

Error type 10: The original mixes verb forms and awkward phrases: 'it's uh, related to my interest' should be 'it relates to my interests' (simple present). 'Taking those moments feels makes me more' contains two verbs 'feels' and 'makes' causing confusion. Choose one verb: 'makes me happier' is clear. Also replace 'keen on taking photos' with 'keen on photography' for conciseness.

× I would prefer the sea because I have never visited to DC or any beach areas.

✓ I'd prefer the sea because I have never visited DC or any beach areas.

Error type 6: 'Prefer' as a present preference should be contracted as 'I'd prefer' (optional) but main error is the preposition 'visited to' which is incorrect. Use 'visited DC' without 'to'. Keep present perfect 'have never visited' to indicate life experience.

× So if I had chance to visit the sea, I definitely go to the sea.

✓ So if I had the chance to visit the sea, I would definitely go.

Error type 7: Conditional structure incorrect. For a hypothetical present situation use the second conditional: 'If I had the chance..., I would...' Also include the article 'the' before 'chance' and avoid repeating 'to the sea' when context is clear.

× And yeah I have because I have already visited to the.

✓ And yes, I have, because I have already visited.

Error type 5: 'Visited to the' is incorrect; 'visit' does not take 'to' after it. The sentence is also incomplete ('visited' what?). If the student meant they have visited the sea before, write 'I have already visited the sea.' Maintain present perfect 'have already visited' to indicate past experience relevant to now.