Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Remove filler sounds (uh) and fix tense/word choice (e.g. "very fast" not "very faster"). Mention a brief example of when you prefer talking to someone to make it specific.

Exemplo: I usually avoid looking out of the window when I travel by car or bus because the rapidly changing view makes me feel carsick. Instead, I prefer talking to the person next to me, since it helps pass the time and I can get to know them better; for example, on long trips I often chat with classmates about our plans, which makes the journey more enjoyable.

Sugestão: Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence, then give specific details and one short example. Avoid small grammar mistakes (e.g. "prefer photography" or "interested in videography") and unnecessary repetition. Limit to 3–4 sentences and use linking words like "because" and "for example."

Exemplo: I don't usually take photos from car windows; I prefer videography because video can capture the atmosphere and emotions of a place better. For example, I like to film from different angles and add suitable background music during editing to show how a scene made me feel.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then explain with specific reasons and a brief example. Avoid apologetic language like "you might not agree" and complete your final sentence. Use linking words ("because", "for example") and correct phrasing ("I prefer urban areas" not "the modern vibe of the city attracts me").

Exemplo: I prefer the city to natural landscapes because I enjoy contemporary architecture and the lively atmosphere. For example, I like visiting urban districts with interesting buildings and cafes, where I can walk around, take photos, and experience cultural events.

× I know I don't prefer, uh, looking outside the windows because, uh, the scenes change at a very faster rate and due to which it just make me feel like carsick and I prefer talking to someone who is sitting beside me.

✓ I know I don't prefer looking out of the windows because the scenery changes very quickly and that makes me feel carsick, so I prefer talking to the person sitting beside me.

Errors: incorrect adverb phrase 'at a very faster rate' (use 'very quickly' or 'at a faster rate'), unnecessary comma after 'prefer', wrong verb form 'make' (should agree with singular subject 'that' -> 'makes'), and awkward phrasing 'due to which'. Also 'looking outside the windows' -> 'looking out of the windows' and 'someone who is sitting beside me' -> 'the person sitting beside me'. Suggestion: use simple present with correct adverbs and subject-verb agreement, and prefer concise connectors like 'so' or 'which'.

× No, I don't actually prefer a photography, but I'm very interested into videography as I believe it's a better way to convey the message and the emotion and the feel of that place.

✓ No, I don't actually prefer photography, but I'm very interested in videography because I believe it's a better way to convey the message, emotion, and atmosphere of a place.

Errors: 'a photography' is incorrect; 'photography' is an uncountable noun here so no article is needed. Wrong preposition 'interested into' should be 'interested in'. Repetition 'the emotion and the feel' is awkward; use 'emotion and atmosphere'. Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles, use correct prepositions, and choose concise collocations.

× And I also like to be creative by using different angles and by using, uh, the different background music.

✓ I also like being creative by using different angles and different background music.

Errors: awkward repetition 'by using ... by using' and redundant article 'the different background music'. Also 'like to be creative by using' is acceptable but more natural is 'like being creative by using'. Suggestion: streamline the sentence, avoid repeated phrases, and drop unnecessary articles.

× I enjoy it while I'm editing the video.

✓ I enjoy it while I edit the video.

Both forms are understandable, but in spoken general preference use simple present 'I edit' rather than present continuous 'I'm editing' when describing habitual actions. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual activities.

× OK, so you might not agree with me, but I have a different point of view because I don't like the natural scenes, I don't like either the mountains or the sea.

✓ OK, you might not agree with me, but I have a different point of view: I don't like natural scenery; I don't like either the mountains or the sea.

Errors: 'the natural scenes' is unnatural—use 'natural scenery' (uncountable). Sentence run-on with commas; replace with clearer punctuation. Suggestion: use uncountable nouns for general concepts and break long sentences for clarity.

× I prefer urban areas because I like the contemporary architecture, the modern vibe of the city attracts me.

✓ I prefer urban areas because I like contemporary architecture; the modern vibe of the city attracts me.

Error: unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'contemporary architecture' when speaking generally. Also sentence was a comma splice; use a semicolon or separate sentences. Suggestion: avoid 'the' before general nouns and fix run-on sentences.

× So I don't actually go on these mountainous and.

✓ So I don't actually go to mountainous areas or the seaside.

Errors: sentence is incomplete and contains incorrect preposition 'on' with 'go on these mountainous' and trailing 'and.' Suggestion: complete the thought by specifying destinations and use correct preposition 'go to' and plural noun 'areas' or specific 'mountains/sea'.