Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 질문에 직접 답한 뒤 이유와 구체적 상황을 간결하게 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다. 현재 답변은 문법 오류(예: 'car sick' → 'carsick', 'that looks me so happy' → 'that makes me so happy', 'car stick' → 아마도 'carsick'나 'seat' 혼동)가 있고 반복과 불필요한 감탄사('uh', 'umm')가 많습니다. 개선 포인트: 1) 직접적인 주제 문장으로 시작할 것(Yes, I usually look out the window.) 2) 이유를 하나 또는 두 개의 구체적인 세부사항으로 연결할 것(using linking words: because, so). 3) 문장 수는 3~4문장으로 유지하며 불필요한 반복을 줄일 것.

Exemplo: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by car because I get carsick, so sitting next to the window helps me feel better. Also, I enjoy watching the passing scenery, especially trees and small towns, which relaxes me during the trip.

Sugestão: 의도를 명확히 하고 논리를 정리하는 연습이 필요합니다. 현재 답변은 말의 반복과 비문(예: 'see the nature on my natural eyes', 'I don't like take a photo with net nature')이 있어 의사 전달이 불분명합니다. 개선 포인트: 1) 간단한 주제 문장( No, I usually don't take photos.) 2) 이유를 명확하게 제시(because I prefer to enjoy the view with my own eyes.) 3) 예외를 하나 들어 구체화(sometimes I take photos when...). Linking words(usually, because, however, sometimes)를 사용해 논리 흐름을 매끄럽게 할 것.

Exemplo: No, I don't usually take photos of the scenery because I prefer to enjoy it with my own eyes. However, sometimes I take pictures when the view is extraordinary or when I'm traveling with friends and want to remember the moment.

Sugestão: 선호 이유를 더 명확하고 구체적인 근거로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다. 현재 답변은 의미 전달은 되지만 문법(예: 'mountain is really common region', 'I can't see usually', 'I'm more like sea')과 표현의 자연스러움이 떨어집니다. 개선 포인트: 1) 명확한 주제 문장(I prefer the sea.) 2) 구체적 이유 두 가지(드문 경험, 분위기, 활동) 3) 대비 표현 사용(although, because)으로 문장 흐름 개선. 문장 수는 3문장 안팎으로 유지할 것.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea because I don't have many chances to visit it where I live, so each trip feels special. Also, I enjoy the relaxed atmosphere and beach activities like swimming and walking along the shore, which I can't do near the mountains.

× Of course, I have a really serious car sick, so I usually sit down nearby the window and then I really see scenery because that looks me so happy and that's so beautiful.

✓ Of course, I get really serious car sickness, so I usually sit near the window and look at the scenery because it makes me so happy and it's so beautiful.

The sentence uses incorrect pronouns and noun forms: 'car sick' should be 'car sickness' or 'car sick' as an adjective; 'sit down nearby the window' is unnatural—use 'sit near the window'; 'see scenery' should be 'look at the scenery'; 'that looks me so happy' is incorrect pronoun and verb usage—use 'it makes me so happy'. Improve by using correct noun forms and object pronouns and common collocations (e.g., 'sit near', 'look at').

× And also I think my car stick is more better to, uh, nearby the window.

✓ Also, I think my car sickness is better when I sit near the window.

'More better' is a double comparative; use 'better' only. 'Car stick' is incorrect noun; use 'car sickness'. 'Nearby the window' should be 'near the window'. Use correct adjective form and natural prepositional phrase. Suggestion: avoid double comparatives and choose the correct noun ('car sickness').

× No, I don't. I usually just uh, look, uh, out of the window, uh, because I just want to see the nature on my uh, natural eyes.

✓ No, I don't. I usually just look out of the window because I want to see nature with my own eyes.

'See the nature' should be 'see nature' (no article). 'On my natural eyes' is incorrect; use 'with my own eyes'. Remove filler words and use correct preposition for seeing ('with').

× Umm, sometimes I take a photo, but I think I more like to take a photo with some people I don't like take a photo with net nature.

✓ Sometimes I take photos, but I prefer to take photos with people; I don't like to take photos of just nature.

Pronoun and structure issues: 'I think I more like to' should be 'I prefer to'. 'With net nature' is unclear and incorrect; use 'of just nature'. Use plural 'photos' for general activity. Rephrase to a natural comparison using 'prefer' and correct preposition 'of'.

× I definitely prefer the sea because in Korea mountain is really common region, so in my university we have a big mountain so I can enjoy usual time.

✓ I definitely prefer the sea because mountains are very common in Korea; at my university we have a big mountain so I can often enjoy it.

Tense and agreement errors: 'in Korea mountain is really common region' should be 'mountains are very common in Korea' (plural and noun order). 'Enjoy usual time' is unnatural; use 'often enjoy it' or 'enjoy my time there often'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and natural adverb usage. Use plural for general statements about mountains.

× However, the sea is really far from our city so I can't see usually.

✓ However, the sea is really far from our city so I usually can't visit it.

Placement of 'usually' is incorrect; 'I can't see usually' is unnatural because 'see' is not the right verb for visiting the sea. Use 'usually can't visit it' to express frequency and appropriate verb choice.

× So I'm more like sea and I want to go there.

✓ So I prefer the sea and I want to go there.

'I'm more like sea' is incorrect pronoun and verb combination; use 'I prefer the sea' to express preference. Use 'prefer' for comparisons and 'go there' is fine. Improve by using correct verb for preference.