Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and clear: answer directly with a topic sentence, correct inappropriate words, avoid confusion and redundancy, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography is my favorite hobby. I especially like photographing landscapes and natural scenes, as they give me a peaceful feeling and inspiration. For example, I often take photos at nearby hills and lakes to capture calm mornings.

Sugestão: Clarify the main idea and avoid incorrect words (e.g. 'Google leaders'). Start with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words (however, because, for example) to add concise, specific reasons and one example. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because they are closer to nature and much quieter. However, urban areas tend to be noisy and crowded, which I find distracting. For example, I enjoy photographing farmland and small villages because the open fields and farms create peaceful, photogenic scenes.

Sugestão: Make the answer direct and accurate: begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid irrelevant or incorrect words (e.g. 'telescopes'), and give specific examples of places or features. Use a linking word to explain why and keep it concise.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because India has a rich variety of historical sites and cultural landscapes. For example, I like photographing ancient monuments and colorful markets, since they reflect local history and traditions. Therefore I often focus on capturing well-known heritage sites and local festivals.

× Yes, I would like to take pictures of SNG views because it is my favorite hobby to capture different type of things and mostly prefer to the pictures of landfills because she provides me a temporary drive and also a peaceful mindset.

✓ Yes, I would like to take pictures of scenic views because photography is my favorite hobby; I like to capture different types of things and I mostly prefer taking pictures of landscapes because they give me temporary drive and a peaceful state of mind.

The sentence has several pronoun and word choice errors. 'SNG' is likely a typo for 'scenic'. 'It is my favorite hobby' incorrectly uses 'it' to refer to 'take pictures'—reword to 'photography is my favorite hobby.' 'Different type of things' should be 'different types of things' (plural quantifier). 'Prefer to the pictures' is incorrect; correct is 'prefer taking pictures of'. 'Landfills' is likely wrong for 'landscapes'. 'She provides me' incorrectly uses a feminine pronoun for landscapes; use 'they' or rephrase to 'they give me'. Also 'peaceful mindset' is awkward; 'peaceful state of mind' is idiomatic. Suggestions: check pronoun antecedents, correct typos, use plural forms for count nouns, and use verbs with gerunds after 'prefer'.

× I generally prefer Google leaders because they are more connected towards nature.

✓ I generally prefer rural areas because they are more connected to nature.

'Google leaders' is likely a misphrase; context suggests 'rural areas'. The preposition 'connected towards' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'connected to'. Suggestion: choose the correct noun phrase that fits context and use 'connected to' for relation to nature.

× But on the other hand urban areas are slightly connected toward noisy atmosphere and I don't like that much atmosphere at all.

✓ But on the other hand, urban areas tend to have more noise and I don't like that kind of atmosphere at all.

'Slightly connected toward noisy atmosphere' is unidiomatic. Use 'tend to have more noise' or 'are noisier'. 'That much atmosphere' is incorrect; use 'that kind of atmosphere.' Suggestions: use natural collocations (noisy, noisier, atmosphere/kind of atmosphere) and include commas after discourse markers like 'on the other hand'.

× So that's why I prefer rural areas because there are many natural activities such as farming crops also.

✓ So that's why I prefer rural areas, because there are many natural activities such as farming crops.

The sentence is mostly fine but needs punctuation. 'Also' at the end is redundant. 'Farming crops' is acceptable but more natural is 'growing crops' or simply 'farming'. Suggestion: remove redundant 'also', add comma after introductory clause, and prefer 'growing crops' for natural collocation.

× I generally prefer views in my own country because there are many historical places as well as different type of telescopes present in my own country.

✓ I generally prefer views in my own country because there are many historical places as well as different types of landscapes present in my country.

Repeated 'my own country' is redundant. 'Different type of telescopes' is unlikely in context; probably 'different types of landscapes' or 'scenery'. 'Different type' should be plural 'different types'. Suggestion: avoid repetition and ensure nouns match context; use plurals after 'different'.

× My country is India and it is very diverse that is why there are many historical events which have taken place.

✓ My country is India and it is very diverse; that is why there are many historical sites and events that have taken place here.

The original sentence is run-on and vague. 'Historical events which have taken place' is grammatically ok but unclear; 'historical sites and events that have taken place here' is clearer. Use a semicolon or separate sentences to fix run-on. Suggestion: break into clear clauses and use specific nouns ('sites', 'events').

× So that's why I want the pictures of that historical places.

✓ So that's why I want pictures of those historical places.

'That historical places' is incorrect because 'that' is singular demonstrative while 'places' is plural; use 'those'. Also 'the pictures of' is awkward—use 'pictures of' without the article. Suggestion: match demonstratives to number and omit unnecessary articles.