Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid vague phrasing and unfinished thoughts. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep sentences concise (no more than 4–5 sentences). Also correct minor word choice errors (e.g., “butterfly swing” is unclear—say “butterfly wings” or “a butterfly in flight”).

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views. I especially like cityscapes because I find the patterns of buildings and lights visually interesting. For example, I often photograph reflections on glass facades at dusk to capture contrast between natural and artificial light. This variety keeps my photography exciting.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “I prefer urban areas”) and give one or two specific reasons with correct grammar. Remove repetitions like “since because since” and unclear phrases such as “in the religious.” Use linking words (because, so, therefore) to show cause and effect. Keep sentences short and coherent.

Exemplo: I prefer photographing urban areas because I enjoy the energy and architectural variety of cities. For instance, modern buildings, busy streets and neon signs provide interesting contrasts and photo opportunities. Therefore, I often choose city locations when I go out to shoot.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer followed by a clear, specific reason and an example. Avoid filler words like “uh” and phrases like “so yeah, that’s it.” Use linking words such as “because” and “for example” to make your answer coherent. Expand slightly (1–2 more sentences) to show vocabulary and fluency while staying concise.

Exemplo: I prefer taking photos in other countries because I enjoy capturing scenes I haven’t seen before. For example, when I traveled to Spain last year I photographed colorful street markets and historic plazas that were very different from places at home. Experiencing new cultures inspires my composition and subject choices.

× I'm a fan of taking pictures, especially something compelling such as a city's landscape, or maybe something really unique such as a butterfly swing.

✓ I'm a fan of taking pictures, especially of compelling subjects such as a city's landscape, or something really unique like a butterfly or a swaying flower.

Error: incorrect and awkward noun phrases after 'taking pictures' and 'such as'. Use 'of' after 'especially' to link to objects and use clear noun phrases. 'Butterfly swing' is not a common collocation; clarify as 'a butterfly' or 'a swaying flower'. Also replace 'something compelling' with 'compelling subjects' for grammatical noun form and agreement.

× Some details on butterfly swing wing or something like this.

✓ Some details of a butterfly's wings or something like that.

Error: incorrect phrase structure and missing possessive for 'butterfly wings'. Use the possessive 'butterfly's wings' and idiomatic phrase 'something like that'. 'Details on' can be improved to 'details of' to indicate features.

× To be frank, I opted for taking urban areas since because since I know myself I always liked the modern city life and in the religious it is hard to find this type of scenes.

✓ To be frank, I prefer taking photos of urban areas because, as I know myself, I have always liked modern city life, and in rural areas it is hard to find these kinds of scenes.

Errors: tense and word choice. 'Opted' is past tense but speaker is describing a general preference, so use present tense 'prefer'. Remove redundant 'since because since'. 'I always liked' should be present perfect 'I have always liked' to show an ongoing preference. 'Religious' is incorrect word; likely 'rural'. 'This type of scenes' should be 'these kinds of scenes' for plural agreement.

× So that's the core reason why I would face towards to urban area photos.

✓ So that's the main reason why I tend to take photos in urban areas.

Errors: ungrammatical collocation 'face towards to' and mismatch in number and verb usage. Use 'tend to take photos in urban areas' which agrees with subject and is idiomatic. 'Urban area photos' rephrased to 'photos in urban areas'.

× Uh, to be frank, I would prefer other countries because it is more compelling for me to take the places that I have never been in.

✓ Uh, to be frank, I prefer other countries because it's more interesting for me to photograph places I have never been to.

Errors: 'would prefer' suggests hypothetical; use simple present 'prefer' for general preference. 'More compelling for me to take the places' is ungrammatical — use 'more interesting for me to photograph places'. Use 'been to' (preposition 'to') not 'been in' for visiting places.