Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Reduce hesitation and repetitions, correct grammar and proper nouns, and make the response more coherent with linking words. Keep answers within 3–4 clear sentences: start with a topic sentence, give one or two specific reasons with a short example, and finish with a brief concluding statement. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and capitalize or omit irrelevant names (e.g., Katherine) unless they are meaningful.

Exemplo: Yes, I love taking photos of beautiful scenery when I travel. Taking pictures helps me preserve special moments and remember the places I visit, such as coastal sunsets or mountain views. I also like sharing selected shots on social media so friends can see the landscapes I enjoy.

Sugestão: Answer directly and reduce hesitations and repetitions. Use a clear topic sentence stating preference (or neutrality), then give two contrasting, specific reasons with linking words (e.g., 'however', 'on the other hand'). Keep the reply concise and grammatical.

Exemplo: It depends on my mood: I enjoy urban views for their energy and striking architecture, however I prefer rural scenery when I want peace and natural beauty, such as quiet lakes or green fields.

Sugestão: Good structure and content but remove hesitations and complete the final thought. Provide one or two specific examples showing contrasts (familiar places vs. new cultures) and use linking words like 'whereas' or 'while'. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I enjoy views both at home and abroad. Views in my own country feel comforting because I have personal memories of those places, whereas views in other countries are exciting since they let me discover new landscapes and different cultures, for example exploring historic towns in Europe or tropical beaches in Southeast Asia.

× I really love Katherine beautiful scenery whenever I travel, uh, because taking photos can help me preserve, uh, my special moments and, uh, Remember Me, the places I've visited, uh, I also enjoy sharing my pictures on social media so my friend can see the landscape I like, especially sunshine and.

✓ I really love Katherine's beautiful scenery whenever I travel because taking photos can help me preserve my special moments and remember the places I've visited. I also enjoy sharing my pictures on social media so my friends can see the landscapes I like, especially sunny scenes.

The sentence has several issues: missing possessive form ('Katherine beautiful scenery' should be 'Katherine's beautiful scenery'), incorrect capitalization and unnecessary commas, incorrect verb form 'Remember Me' which should be 'remember', singular/plural mismatches ('my friend' -> 'my friends', 'landscape' -> 'landscapes'), and awkward phrase 'especially sunshine and' which needs completion as 'especially sunny scenes'. Suggestions: use possessive 's for names, keep verbs lowercase unless proper noun, match singular/plural between nouns and articles, and complete the final phrase with a noun phrase that fits ('sunny scenes' or 'sunshine').

× Uh, honestly it depends on how I feel. Umm, sometimes I, I run to the busy and uh, energetic lifestyle of city views, but at the time, at other times, other times I just want the peace and quiet umm.

✓ Honestly, it depends on how I feel. Sometimes I am attracted to the busy and energetic lifestyle of city views, but at other times I just want peace and quiet.

Problems: redundant fillers and repetition ('I, I'; 'other times, other times'), incorrect verb choice 'run to' (idiomatic error) and article use 'the peace and quiet' where 'peace and quiet' without 'the' is acceptable. Suggest replacing 'run to' with 'am attracted to' or 'prefer', remove repetitions and fillers, and simplify to 'peace and quiet'. Maintain present tense to match habitual preference.

× To be honest, I like views in both my own country and abroad. My own country feels familiar and comforting because of the landscapes and memory I have there, while other countries offer a sense of novelty, uh, and excitement, uh, allowing me to discover different country, different cultures and.

✓ To be honest, I like views in both my own country and abroad. My own country feels familiar and comforting because of the landscapes and memories I have there, while other countries offer a sense of novelty and excitement, allowing me to discover different countries and cultures.

Errors include singular/plural mismatch ('memory' should be 'memories'), repetition and unfinished phrase 'different country, different cultures and' which must be 'different countries and cultures'. Also remove filler 'uh'. Suggestions: use plural nouns when referring to multiple items ('memories', 'countries'), and complete coordinated lists properly ('countries and cultures').