Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct small grammar/word choices. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition ("angles" twice) and filler sounds. Add one specific example of a memorable photo and use a linking word to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes — I love taking photos when I travel because they preserve memories and let me share experiences with friends. For example, last year I photographed a sunrise over a mountain and tried low and high angles to capture different moods, which helped me learn how perspective changes a scene.

Sugestão: Improve grammar, fluency and coherence: give a clear topic sentence, correct phrasing (e.g. "because my grandparents live..."), use linking words, and provide specific supporting details. Avoid awkward phrases like "do my sandwich" and include one or two concrete examples of activities and feelings.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because my grandparents live in the countryside and those places hold many happy memories for me. For instance, I often help with gardening and take long walks through the fields, which relaxes me and makes simple life feel peaceful.

Sugestão: Make the response more structured and correct grammar: start with a direct statement, then use linking words to list reasons. Replace fillers ("uh") and unclear phrases ("the architects") with clearer words like "architecture". Provide one concrete example of a foreign view you enjoyed and how it made you feel.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because they let me experience new cultures and landscapes. For example, I admired the colorful markets and historic architecture in Spain, where tasting local food and meeting friendly people made me feel excited and refreshed.

× I love taking pictures when I travel as it helps me to preserve my memories and also to share it with my friends.

✓ I love taking pictures when I travel as it helps me preserve my memories and also to share them with my friends.

Pronoun reference: 'it' incorrectly refers to 'taking pictures' and causes awkwardness; 'them' should refer to 'memories'. Also remove unnecessary 'to' after 'helps me' when followed by base verb. Suggest replacing 'it helps me to preserve' with 'it helps me preserve' and use 'them' for 'memories' to make the sentence clear and grammatically correct.

× I also experiment with the different angles to see how the same scene looks like from different angles.

✓ I also experiment with different angles to see how the same scene looks from various viewpoints.

'Looks like' is informal and redundant when describing appearance; use 'looks' without 'like'. 'The different angles' and repeating 'different angles' is repetitive; use 'different' once and vary wording. 'Various viewpoints' improves style and clarity.

× I prefer views in rural areas as my because my grandparents live in the countryside and it holds many happy memories in my life.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because my grandparents live in the countryside and it holds many happy memories for me.

Extra word 'my' creates error. Use 'because' not 'as my because'. Also 'in my life' is awkward; 'for me' is more natural. Fix sentence structure by removing the stray word and adjusting the phrase.

× I enjoy doing simple activities there like the gardening, walking in nature which helps me calm, relaxed and do my sandwich is my simple life.

✓ I enjoy simple activities there like gardening and walking in nature, which help me feel calm and relaxed; I also enjoy simple meals such as sandwiches.

Multiple issues: unnecessary 'doing' before 'simple activities' is awkward; 'the gardening' should be 'gardening'. Relative clause needs plural verb 'help' to agree with activities. 'Helps me calm, relaxed' is incorrect; use 'help me feel calm and relaxed'. The fragment 'do my sandwich is my simple life' is ungrammatical; interpret as enjoying simple meals and rewrite as 'I also enjoy simple meals such as sandwiches.' Ensure parallel structure and clear meaning.

× Well, I love views in other countries because I love experiencing new culture, uh, the architects and uh, also landscape trying new travelling is also let me taste new food and meeting new people, which gives me excited and refreshed.

✓ Well, I love views in other countries because I enjoy experiencing new cultures, architecture, and landscapes. Traveling also lets me taste new foods and meet new people, which makes me feel excited and refreshed.

Pronoun and noun errors: use plural 'cultures' and 'foods' for general statements. 'The architects' is incorrect; use 'architecture'. 'Trying new travelling' is ungrammatical; use 'traveling' (or 'travelling') as a gerund subject. Use 'lets me' not 'is also let me'. Parallel verbs: 'taste' and 'meet' should be base forms after 'lets me'. 'Gives me excited and refreshed' is incorrect; use 'makes me feel excited and refreshed'. Rearranged for clarity and correct grammar.