Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, and give one specific supporting detail. Fix verb forms and unclear phrase (“reduce dreams”). Use linking words like “also” or “because” correctly.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos with my family when we travel because it helps us capture special moments and remember places. For example, last summer we photographed a coastal village and those pictures help me recall the trip vividly.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and correct pronunciation/word choice (‘rural’ once, ‘calm’ instead of ‘beret’). Use linking words to add one specific reason or example. Keep to at most 3–4 short sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because I like photographing natural landscapes like lakes, mountains and the sea. For instance, I recently spent a morning capturing reflections on a mountain lake, which made me feel calm and refreshed.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear statement of preference and avoid hesitations. Use correct grammar: say ‘I prefer views in other countries’ and explain why with specific details (culture, architecture, traditions). Use linking words like ‘because’ and give an example.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because the architecture and local traditions are often very different from my own. For example, visiting Japan let me photograph traditional shrines and festivals, which taught me a lot about their history and culture.

× I love taking photo with my family, particularly whenever we travel because it can be an effective way to umm, capture special moments and places.

✓ I love taking photos with my family, particularly whenever we travel, because it can be an effective way to capture special moments and places.

Use the gerund 'taking' correctly but 'photo' should be plural 'photos' to match taking multiple pictures; also add 'with' is fine. Also add a comma before 'because' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'photos' when referring to multiple pictures and keep the gerund 'taking'. Grammar problem type ID:8

× Moreover, I think it helped me to reduce dreams after a long day, therefore, I consider.

✓ Moreover, I think it helps me to relax after a long day; therefore, I appreciate it.

The original mixes past 'helped' with present context 'I think'. Use present tense 'helps' to match 'I think'. 'Reduce dreams' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'relax'. 'Consider' is incomplete; replace with 'appreciate it' or 'value it' to complete the idea. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and choose correct verbs conveying intended meaning. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Personally, I prefer UH rural rural area views because I love capturing landscape photos such as lake, sea and mountain.

✓ Personally, I prefer rural area views because I love capturing landscape photos such as lakes, the sea, and mountains.

Remove filler 'UH' and duplicate 'rural'. Use plural nouns 'lakes' and 'mountains' when speaking generally about such features. 'The sea' is standard when referring to the sea in general. This fixes pluralization and article use. Suggestion: use plural forms for general categories and include articles where needed. Grammar problem type ID:1

× Therefore, I always feel beret and relax when I take photos of umm rural area.

✓ Therefore, I always feel better and relaxed when I take photos of rural areas.

'Beret' is a misspelling of 'better'. Use adjective forms 'better' and 'relaxed' to describe feelings. Also use plural 'rural areas' for general reference. Suggestion: check spelling and use correct adjective forms and plural nouns for general statements. Grammar problem type ID:13

× In my opinion a people reveals in other countries because I think umm. I can learn umm, their cultural, holistic and history through, uh, viewing their.

✓ In my opinion, people in other countries are more revealing, because I think I can learn about their culture, traditions, and history by viewing them.

The original has several issues: 'a people reveals' is ungrammatical—use 'people in other countries' or 'people from other countries'. 'Reveals' is misused; 'are more revealing' is awkward but acceptable; better: 'I prefer visiting other countries because I can learn about their culture, traditions, and history by observing them.' Also 'their cultural, holistic and history' mixes forms; use nouns 'culture' and 'history'. 'Viewing their' is incomplete; change to 'by viewing them' or 'by observing them'. Suggestion: restructure the sentence for clarity, use correct noun forms and complete object phrases. Grammar problem type ID:26