Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, correct vocabulary, reduce fillers and maintain sentence limits. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Replace incorrect words (e.g., 'wheels' → 'views') and avoid repeating phrases like 'like' and 'umm'.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph sunsets and street scenes to preserve daily memories, so when I look back at my gallery I can instantly recall those moments.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer followed by one or two clear, specific reasons. Remove fillers, correct grammar (e.g., 'I come from a small town on the east side of Malaysia'), and avoid trailing off. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to connect ideas.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because I grew up in a small town on the east coast of Malaysia, where there are many green fields and forests. For example, I enjoy photographing rice paddies and traditional houses because they feel peaceful and unique compared with cityscapes.

Sugestão: Answer directly, mention a clear reason and give a specific example. Correct grammar ('I prefer views in other countries'), avoid vague phrases and filler sounds, and ensure supporting details are coherent and relevant (e.g., mention specific scenery or architecture).

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because traveling exposes me to different landscapes and architecture. For instance, while studying in the UK I loved photographing historic buildings and coastal cliffs, which felt very different and inspiring compared with sights at home.

× Yes, I do like taking picture of different wheels because I think taking picture is like, umm, one of the ways to record your umm, daily life.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views because I think taking pictures are one of the ways to record your daily life.

Incorrect use of singular 'picture' when referring to multiple photos should be plural 'pictures' (Grammar Problem Type 1: Singular and plural issue). Also 'taking pictures' as a noun phrase is plural and pairs with 'are one of the ways'. Suggestion: use 'pictures' for countable plural and match the verb accordingly.

× And you can keep like all those like beautiful views and memories in your gallery.

✓ And you can keep all those beautiful views and memories in your gallery.

Unnecessary filler 'like' repeated is informal and reduces clarity; this is a stylistic/pronoun clarity issue (mapped to Incorrect use of pronouns 12) because 'those' already refers to plural items. Suggestion: remove redundant 'like' fillers to make the sentence concise and clear.

× So when you want to build it, when you want to umm, recall back the memories and you can just open up your gallery and then like.

✓ So when you want to recall the memories, you can just open your gallery.

Sentence is fragmented and contains unnecessary phrases 'build it' and 'recall back' (double preposition). This is a sentence structure error (26). Use 'recall' without 'back' and combine clauses into a complete sentence. Suggestion: remove fillers and redundant words to form a clear main clause.

× I prefer the view for the uh, rural areas because umm, I came from a very small hotel which is from a east side of Malaysia and I really enjoyed the view of my hometown like those like greenery scenes because my hometown is not alright, really, really fully developed umm, cities.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I come from a very small town on the east side of Malaysia and I really enjoy the greenery in my hometown because it is not a fully developed city.

Multiple issues: 'view for the rural areas' should be 'views in rural areas' (Incorrect use of prepositions 11). 'Came from a very small hotel' is incorrect—use 'come from a very small town'. 'Which is from a east side' should be 'on the east side' (preposition and article). 'Recall tense' adjusted to present 'come' to match ongoing preference (Present tense 6). 'Not alright, really, really fully developed cities' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'not a fully developed city'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('in', 'on'), correct nouns ('town' not 'hotel'), and simplify phrasing.

× Oh MMM, I prefer the view in the other countries because I have a study abroad experience in the United Kingdom and I very appreciate them seeing they and the beautiful breathtaking scenery because umm, I really like the like those buildings.

✓ Oh, I prefer views in other countries because I studied abroad in the United Kingdom and I really appreciated seeing the beautiful, breathtaking scenery and those buildings.

Tense and verb choice errors: 'I have a study abroad experience' should be past simple 'I studied abroad' if the experience is completed (Past tense issue 5). 'I very appreciate' is incorrect; use 'I really appreciated' (adverb placement and verb form; mapped to Present tense issue 6 and adverb placement 20). 'Them seeing they' is ungrammatical; replace with 'seeing' followed by the object 'the scenery' (Incorrect pronoun use 12). Suggestion: use appropriate past tense for completed experiences, place adverbs before main verbs ('really appreciated'), and remove extraneous words.'