Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (umm, uh), and limit length to 3–4 sentences. Use correct collocations (e.g., “fond of photography”, “take pictures of scenery”), and give one specific example of what you photograph and why. Link ideas with simple connectors like “so” or “because.”

Exemplo: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because I am fond of photography. I usually photograph landscapes, especially sunrise scenes at the lake, because the light creates dramatic colors. I then share my best shots on Instagram and enjoy getting feedback from friends.

Sugestão: Give a clear direct answer and support it with specific reasons and one or two details. Remove hesitations and incorrect words (“serious” is wrong here). Use linking words like “because” or “for example.” Keep it to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because they are more peaceful and green. For example, I enjoy the sight of fields, small streams and farmers working, which creates a calm and refreshing atmosphere.

Sugestão: Answer directly and avoid unclear or incorrect phrases (e.g., “worse the to see the series”). State your preference and give a specific reason or example. Use clear vocabulary (e.g., “attracted to seeing landscapes abroad”) and one linking word like “because” or “for instance.” Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy discovering different landscapes and cultures. For instance, I would love to photograph the fjords in Norway or the terraced fields in Vietnam because they offer unique scenery I don’t see at home.

× I'm a fond of photography.

✓ I'm fond of photography.

The indefinite article 'a' should not be used before the adjective 'fond'. Use 'fond of' without an article. Suggestion: say 'I'm fond of photography' or 'I have a fondness for photography.'

× I used to click different uh, pictures of sceneries like beautiful landscapes, mesmerizing and stunning, umm, backgrounds, umm, and I used to post them on my postie snaps on my Facebook, Instagram and when, uh, and I, I was I, I'm very much delighted when I see.

✓ I used to take pictures of scenery such as beautiful, mesmerizing landscapes and backgrounds, and I used to post them on my Facebook and Instagram. I was very delighted when I saw them.

'Click' is informal and 'take pictures' is more natural. 'Sceneries' is incorrect; 'scenery' is an uncountable noun. 'Mesmerizing and stunning' should be adjectives placed before the noun; commas improve clarity. 'When I see' mixes tenses; past habitual 'used to' requires past 'saw' or 'was delighted when I saw them.' Suggestion: use 'take pictures,' 'scenery,' and keep consistent past tense with 'used to.'

× rural areas have much more beautiful sceneries as compared to urban areas.

✓ rural areas have much more beautiful scenery compared to urban areas.

'Sceneries' is not commonly used; 'scenery' is uncountable. Use 'much more beautiful scenery' or 'more beautiful views.' 'As compared to' is wordy; 'compared to' or 'than' is better. Suggestion: say 'rural areas have much more beautiful scenery than urban areas.'

× It's so much serious.

✓ It is much more peaceful/serene.

'Serious' is not appropriate to describe scenery; likely the student meant a different adjective (calm, peaceful, serene). 'So much serious' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: choose an appropriate adjective and use correct comparative form if needed: 'It is much more peaceful.'

× It has such a, uh, great ambience like, umm, greenery everywhere and the water running from the tube wells and beautiful, umm, crops.

✓ It has such a great ambience, with greenery everywhere, water running from the tube wells, and beautiful crops.

Remove unnecessary commas and filler words. 'Such a great ambience like' is awkward; use 'such a great ambience, with...' Parallel structure improves clarity. Suggestion: use 'with' to introduce the list and maintain parallel nouns.

× Well, to be honest, I'm so much attracted to worse the to see the series of other countries because they are very much umm, beautiful in real.

✓ Well, to be honest, I am very attracted to seeing the scenery of other countries because they are truly beautiful.

The original contains many errors: 'so much attracted to worse the to see the series' is ungrammatical. Use 'attracted to seeing' or 'interested in seeing.' 'Series' should be 'scenery' or 'scenes.' 'Beautiful in real' should be 'truly beautiful' or 'beautiful in reality.' Suggestion: simplify phrase to 'attracted to seeing the scenery of other countries because they are truly beautiful.'

× Like their landscapes are much more attractive and mesmerizing beauties.

✓ Their landscapes are much more attractive and mesmerizing.

'Mesmerizing beauties' is redundant and ungrammatical; 'mesmerizing' already describes landscapes. 'Much more' should compare to something explicit; keep context by saying 'more attractive and mesmerizing.' Suggestion: use 'Their landscapes are more attractive and mesmerizing.'