Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cải thiện tính tự nhiên và ngữ pháp: tránh tiếng vọng (uh), dùng thì và dạng từ đúng (photograph → photograph/photographing). Rút gọn câu để trực tiếp hơn, và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể về loại cảnh bạn chụp (ví dụ: hoàng hôn, kiến trúc thành phố). Nối câu bằng từ liên kết đơn giản (for example, such as).

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography helps me capture memorable moments and appreciate beautiful scenery. For example, when I travel I often photograph city skylines at sunset or quiet coastal scenes, which remind me of the trip.

Sugestão: Cải thiện mạch câu và ngắt quãng: loại bỏ tiếng ngập ngừng (uh) và câu rời rạc. Dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng: chủ đề + lý do + ví dụ. Nêu một ví dụ cụ thể về hoạt động bạn làm ở nông thôn để minh họa (hiking, picnics). Sử dụng liên từ (because, whereas, moreover).

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because the open landscape and greenery help me relax and reduce stress. For example, I often go hiking or have picnics in the countryside, where the air is fresher and it feels peaceful, whereas urban areas can be noisy and crowded.

Sugestão: Cải thiện lựa chọn từ và tính rõ ràng: tránh dùng từ sai nghĩa (naughty → novel/unique). Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (childhood trip → childhood trips; or the nearby mountain). Trình bày cân bằng: nêu tại sao thích trong nước rồi đưa ví dụ về một cảnh nước ngoài bạn thấy thú vị. Dùng liên từ (however, for example).

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because they are familiar and often bring back personal memories, such as childhood trips to a nearby mountain or lake. However, I also enjoy scenery abroad for its unique landscapes; for example, I was fascinated by the futuristic skyline of a foreign city.

× Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography helps me capture memorable moments and appreciate, uh, training scenery.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography helps me capture memorable moments and appreciate the changing scenery.

The student used 'training scenery' which is likely incorrect word choice. 'Changing scenery' fits the meaning of appreciating evolving views. Use of 'appreciate the changing scenery' uses correct noun phrase. Suggestion: choose the correct noun that matches meaning (changing/beautiful/scenic) and include the definite article 'the' when referring to a general concept.

× For example, I often photographs and sets and city cover when traveling to.

✓ For example, I often photograph settings and cityscapes when traveling.

The original used 'photographs' with 'I', which requires base verb 'photograph' (third person singular -s is incorrect). Also 'sets and city cover' are incorrect collocations; 'settings' and 'cityscapes' or 'city scenes' are appropriate. Suggestion: use base verb after 'I' and choose correct nouns.

× I prefer those in rural areas because the open uh landscape and greenery help me release and reduce stress.

✓ I prefer those in rural areas because the open landscape and greenery help me relax and reduce stress.

'Release stress' is an incorrect collocation in English; 'relax' or 'relieve stress' are correct. Use present tense 'help me relax' (base verb after 'help'). Also remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: use 'help me relax' or 'help me relieve stress'.

× For exams. I enjoy working in a countryside where the air will feel fresher.

✓ For example, I enjoy being in the countryside where the air feels fresher.

'For exams.' is a fragment and likely meant 'For example'. 'Working in a countryside' is unnatural; use 'being in the countryside'. Use present simple 'feels' for general truth rather than 'will feel'. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and use correct collocations.

× Uh urban view can be exciting and full of activity, but the night?

✓ Urban views can be exciting and full of activity, but the night scenes are different.

Sentence has filler 'Uh' and is incomplete ('but the night?'). Use plural 'views' to match general statement. Provide a complete contrasting clause such as 'but the night scenes are different' or 'but nights can be quieter'. Suggestion: remove filler and complete the thought.

× I prefer views in my own country because they are familiar and often hold personal memories such as childhood trip to nearby mountain or lake.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because they are familiar and often hold personal memories, such as childhood trips to nearby mountains or lakes.

Missing plural forms and articles: 'childhood trip' should be 'childhood trips' and 'nearby mountain or lake' should be plural or include articles: 'to a nearby mountain or lake'. Also missing comma before 'such as'. Suggestion: use plural nouns when speaking generally and include articles when referring to singular nouns.

× However, I also enjoy scenery abroad for its naughty and different landscape for example or unique city like sky.

✓ However, I also enjoy scenery abroad for its natural and different landscapes; for example, unique cities with striking skylines.

'Naughty' is the wrong adjective; 'natural' fits context. 'Different landscape' should be plural 'different landscapes'. The phrase is ungrammatical and unclear; rephrase to 'unique cities with striking skylines'. Suggestion: choose appropriate adjective ('natural') and use correct plurals and clearer noun phrases.