Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like taking pictures, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and long, slightly awkward phrases (e.g., "the time where I actually saw").

Exemplo: Yes, I do enjoy taking photos of scenery because they help me remember special moments. For example, when I take a picture of a sunset, I can later recall the colours and who I was with, which makes me feel peaceful.

Sugestão: Open with a clear preference (urban or rural) and then support it with specific reasons and examples, using linking words like "because" or "however." Keep sentences concise and avoid repeating "sometimes" twice.

Exemplo: I prefer photographing rural views because I love capturing natural scenes like sunsets and wide green fields. However, I also enjoy urban architecture, especially old buildings with interesting details, because they tell a story about a place.

Sugestão: Be careful with phrasing that sounds subjective or insulting ("you tend to be a bit messier"). State your preference clearly and give specific, polite reasons and examples. Correct grammar ("my in other countries" → "other countries") and avoid overgeneralisation. Use linking words to structure the answer.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because I find some places abroad are better maintained and more photogenic. For instance, Japan impressed me with its tidy parks and well-preserved traditional buildings, which made photographing landscapes and city scenes very rewarding.

× I don't like taking pictures of different views of the scenery, especially because I love to take pictures and think back about the time where I actually saw the scenery.

✓ I don't like taking pictures of different views of the scenery, especially because I love to take pictures and think back about the time when I actually saw the scenery.

The mistake is using 'where' to refer to a time. Use 'when' for time clauses. Suggestion: replace 'where' with 'when' to correctly link to 'the time'. Grammar problem type ID:9

× Then somehow it makes me feel at peace and it connects me to a beautiful memory that I had in the past.

✓ Then somehow it makes me feel at peace and connects me to a beautiful memory I had in the past.

Redundant use of 'it' and unnecessary definite article structure. Removing 'it' before 'connects' creates a smoother sentence and omitting 'that' is natural in spoken English. Also 'a beautiful memory I had' is clearer. Grammar problem type ID:17

× For urban areas, I'd like to take the pictures of architectural buildings that are beautiful.

✓ For urban areas, I'd like to take pictures of beautiful architectural buildings.

'The pictures' is unnecessary; use 'pictures' generally. Word order: place adjective 'beautiful' before 'architectural buildings'. Also 'architectural buildings' is redundant; 'architecture' or 'buildings' is sufficient. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Sometimes old buildings look better than new buildings.

✓ Sometimes old buildings look better than new ones.

Use pronoun 'ones' to avoid repetition. This is a definite article/word-choice simplification for natural English. Grammar problem type ID:17

× For rural areas, I think I prefer to take pictures of nature and sometimes sunsets, sometimes green fields across the countryside.

✓ For rural areas, I think I prefer to take pictures of nature, sometimes of sunsets and green fields across the countryside.

Parallel structure and preposition use: use 'of' consistently with 'take pictures of'. Ensure plurality matches items listed and maintain parallelism. Grammar problem type ID:1

× I actually prefer views in my in other countries because honestly, I don't think my own country has a lot of beautiful buildings or even beautiful sceneries and countryside because you tend to be a bit messier.

✓ I actually prefer views in other countries because honestly, I don't think my own country has many beautiful buildings or scenic countryside because it tends to be a bit messier.

Remove duplicate 'in my in'. Use 'many' (quantifier) with plural 'buildings'. 'Sceneries' is uncountable here; use 'scenic countryside'. Replace second-person 'you' with impersonal 'it' to refer to the country. Grammar problem type ID:12

× And certain countries like Japan has a very beautiful sceneries because they maintain both nature and buildings very exceptionally well.

✓ And certain countries like Japan have very beautiful scenery because they maintain both nature and buildings exceptionally well.

Subject-verb agreement: 'countries' is plural so use 'have' (Grammar problem type 27), and 'scenery' is uncountable, not 'sceneries'. Also remove 'very' before 'exceptionally' to avoid redundancy and use 'exceptionally well' without 'very'. Replace 'they' is acceptable but ensure verb agreement with the subject. Grammar problem type ID:12}]} PMID: None