Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 전반적으로 자연스럽고 답변이 명확하지만 몇 가지 개선점이 있습니다. 첫째, 문장 연결이 다소 단절되어 있어 응답이 부자연스럽게 들립니다. 둘째, 단어 선택에서 'sceneries'는 보통 복수형으로 잘 쓰이지 않고, 'passing by on the bus' 같은 표현은 더 명확하게 다듬을 필요가 있습니다. 셋째, 구체적인 이유나 감정 표현을 한두 문장 더 추가하면 답변이 풍부해집니다. 개선 방법으로는 주제문으로 직접 답하고, 연결 표현(For example, I especially enjoy...)을 사용해 구체적인 예와 이유를 덧붙이세요. 또한 어휘는 'scenery', 'landscapes', 'shot with my film camera' 등 더 자연스러운 표현으로 바꾸세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different kinds of scenery, especially landscapes like wide skies and open fields. For example, when I ride the bus I often take photos of the changing views outside because they feel peaceful. I also love using my film camera because it gives the images a nostalgic, textured look.

Sugestão: 문법과 어법에서 개선이 필요합니다. 'passionate to'는 부적절한 전치사 사용이며, 'makes me relax and help to stay calm'도 시제·구조가 어색합니다. 또한 'low lower buildings and house and fields'처럼 중복이나 단수·복수 오류가 있습니다. 개선을 위해 올바른 전치사('passionate about'), 자연스러운 표현('it helps me relax' 또는 'it makes me feel calm'), 그리고 구체적 묘사('low-rise houses and wide fields')를 사용하세요. 문장 연결을 위해 'because'나 'for example' 같은 연결어를 활용하면 좋습니다.

Exemplo: I prefer rural areas because they help me relax and feel calm. For example, I like the low-rise houses and wide fields, which create a peaceful atmosphere and quieter surroundings compared to the city.

Sugestão: 의미 전달은 되지만 표현이 부정확하고 'weird' 같은 단어는 문맥에 맞지 않습니다. 'I felt weird'는 긍정적 감정을 표현하려는 의도라면 적절치 않습니다. 또한 'for in my case when I was in Australia' 같은 중복 표현을 간결하게 정리해야 합니다. 개선을 위해 느낌을 정확히 표현하는 어휘('amazed', 'refreshed', 'liberated' 등)를 사용하고, 문장 구조를 단순화하여 한두 개의 명확한 이유를 제시하세요.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries. For instance, when I was in Australia I loved the wide skies and open fields because they felt so vast and freeing; that experience made me feel refreshed and inspired.

× Yes I do. I like taking pictures of different sceneries like passing by on the bus and wide sky and fields. Especially I love taking pictures by my film camera.

✓ Yes, I do. I like taking pictures of different scenes when passing by on the bus, such as the wide sky and fields. Especially, I love taking pictures with my film camera.

The word 'sceneries' is nonstandard in English; use 'scenes' for countable views (covers Grammar Problem Type 1). 'Passing by on the bus' should be integrated with 'when' to show timing. 'Wide sky and fields' needed an article/parallel structure as 'the wide sky and fields.' Use 'with my film camera' instead of 'by my film camera' because 'with' denotes the instrument used. Suggestion: replace 'sceneries' with 'scenes,' add 'when' for timing, and use 'with' for instrument.

× Well, I'm passionate to rural areas because it makes me relax and help to stay calm and I especially like their low lower buildings and house and fields.

✓ Well, I'm passionate about rural areas because they help me relax and stay calm, and I especially like their low buildings, houses, and fields.

Use 'passionate about' not 'passionate to' (Grammar Problem Type 11). 'It makes me relax and help to stay calm' has subject-verb and pronoun issues: 'rural areas' is plural, so use 'they help me relax and stay calm' (subject-verb agreement, Types 1 and 27). 'Low lower buildings' is redundant and incorrect; choose 'low buildings.' 'House' should be plural 'houses' to match 'buildings and fields' (singular/plural issue, Type 1). Suggestions: use 'passionate about,' ensure plural agreement 'they help,' remove redundancy, and pluralize nouns consistently.

× Actually I prefer views in other countries, umm for in my case when I was in Australia I loved the wide sky and open fields and I felt weird.

✓ Actually, I prefer views in other countries. For example, when I was in Australia I loved the wide sky and open fields, and I felt amazed.

The phrase 'umm for in my case' is awkward; use 'For example' or 'In my case' (Grammar Problem Type 26 sentence structure). 'I felt weird' is likely unintended; 'weird' describes something odd about the speaker's feeling — a clearer adjective like 'amazed' or 'moved' suits the context (word choice / adjective issue, Type 13). Also split into two sentences for clarity and add commas. Suggestion: replace filler with 'For example,' choose a more precise adjective like 'amazed' to convey positive emotion.