Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct minor grammar/repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating words, and add one specific detail using a linking word. Also correct article use and word choice (e.g., “sunrays” → “sunrays” or “sunsets/sunrises”).

Exemplo: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because they help me preserve memories. For example, I often photograph sunrises and sunrays over the sea, which capture the morning light beautifully and remind me of that trip.

Sugestão: Clarify your preference and avoid contradiction. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating rural or urban, then give two specific reasons linked logically. Remove repetitive phrases and correct vocabulary (e.g., “not much crowded” → “less crowded”, “small cities” vs rural).

Exemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because they are much less crowded and offer a peaceful atmosphere. For instance, I enjoy photographing quiet country lanes and green fields, which help me relax and focus on composition.

Sugestão: Avoid hesitation and repetition. Provide a clear balanced answer: state that it depends, then give one reason for preferring home and one for preferring abroad, linked with connectors. Correct tense and grammar (e.g., “I wanted” → “I want”).

Exemplo: It depends. At home I prefer local views because I feel comfortable and know the best spots, for example familiar coastal paths. However, I also enjoy visiting foreign countries when I want adventure, as new landscapes inspire different photographic ideas.

× Of course I love to take pictures because it because it becomes the memory when I go somewhere out.

✓ Of course I love to take pictures because they become memories when I go out somewhere.

The sentence misuses 'it becomes the memory' and repeats 'because it'. The subject should be plural 'they' to match 'pictures' (singular/plural and pronoun use), and 'memories' is more natural. 'Go somewhere out' is incorrect word order; use 'go out somewhere' or 'go somewhere'. Remove the repeated phrase 'because it'. Suggestion: use clear subject-verb agreement and natural adverb order.

× So I mostly take the pictures of sun rays and I'm actually a photogenic person who loves to collect the memories.

✓ So I mostly take pictures of sunrays, and I'm actually a photophile who loves to collect memories.

'Take the pictures of sun rays' is awkward: omit 'the' and combine 'sunrays' or 'sun rays'. 'Photogenic' describes a person who looks good in photos; 'photophile' or 'photographer/photography enthusiast' fits meaning better. 'Collect the memories' should be 'collect memories' without 'the'. Use adjectives correctly and choose the right noun for intended meaning.

× From my perspective, I love the views in rural areas because rural areas are not much crowded and in small cities I can enjoy the atmosphere and even there the place, the places are really relaxing over there.

✓ From my perspective, I prefer views in rural areas because they are not very crowded; in small towns I can enjoy the atmosphere, and the places there are very relaxing.

'Not much crowded' is incorrect; use 'not very crowded'. 'Small cities' is better as 'small towns' in this context. Remove redundant phrases 'the place, the places' and redundant 'over there'. Improve quantifier usage ('not very') and reduce repetition for clarity.

× So most of the time I prefer to go to the urban areas and I love to create.

✓ So most of the time I prefer to go to rural areas, and I love creating photographs.

This sentence contradicts previous sentence (said prefer rural but then 'go to the urban areas'); likely intended 'rural areas'. Also 'I love to create' is incomplete—create what? Specify 'creating photographs' or 'taking photos'. Fix sentence structure and clarity.

× Well it depends, sometimes I love to love my own country views because I am more comfortable in it.

✓ Well, it depends. Sometimes I love the views in my own country because I feel more comfortable there.

'Love to love' is redundant; use 'love'. 'Views in my own country' needs 'the' before 'views' or 'the views in my own country'. 'Comfortable in it' incorrectly uses 'it' for country; use 'there'. Improve pronoun reference and remove redundancy.

× But whenever I I wanted some adventure so I mostly prefer to try the foreign countries.

✓ But whenever I want some adventure, I usually prefer to visit foreign countries.

'Wanted' is past tense but sentence discusses a habitual preference, so present tense 'want' is correct. 'Mostly prefer to try the foreign countries' is unnatural: use 'usually prefer to visit foreign countries'. Remove repeated 'I'. Use consistent tense for habitual actions.

× So most of the time I I go in my own country as I know some of the places I'm familiar with them.

✓ So most of the time I stay in my own country because I know some places and am familiar with them.

Remove duplicated 'I'. 'Go in my own country' is incorrect; say 'stay in my own country' or 'travel within my own country'. 'I know some of the places I'm familiar with them' is redundant; use 'I know some places and am familiar with them' or 'I am familiar with them'. Fix pronoun redundancy and improve sentence structure.