Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and use natural phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid awkward phrases like “memory hope,” reduce repetition, and add one specific example. Use linking words (e.g., because, for example) to make your answer coherent.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me preserve memories. For example, I often photograph sunsets at the beach when I travel, which reminds me of who I was with and how I felt. This makes me feel satisfied and grateful when I look back.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence and avoid repetition. Use linking words like ‘because’ and provide a specific detail or short example to support your preference. Keep it under five sentences and use natural collocations (e.g., “I prefer rural landscapes”).

Exemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because they feel more unique to me. Since I’ve grown up in a city, I find open fields, old farmhouses, and quiet country roads more intriguing. For instance, I like photographing a misty morning over rice terraces because it creates a calm, nostalgic mood.

Sugestão: Clarify why you prefer views abroad with a clear reason and a specific example. Avoid filler words (uh) and repetitive phrases like “store my memories.” Mention one distinct aspect of foreign views (architecture, culture, landscape) to make the answer more concrete.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because they often feature different architecture and landscapes that I don’t see at home. For example, I love photographing narrow European streets and colorful markets when I travel because they remind me of that trip and the people I met, which makes the photos more meaningful.

× It gives me a memory hope.

✓ It gives me hope and memories.

The original sentence uses 'memory hope' which is not a correct noun phrase in English. This is a word choice/word formation issue best addressed by rephrasing. Use a natural noun phrase such as 'hope and memories' to convey intended meaning. Suggestion: Replace incorrect compound with clear nouns and keep present tense to match surrounding sentences.

× It gives me a moment to capture the different memories that I'm living in my life.

✓ It gives me a moment to capture the different memories I am making in my life.

The phrase 'living in my life' is awkward and incorrect here. Use 'making in my life' or 'having in my life' to describe creating or experiencing memories. Keep present continuous 'I am making' to match the ongoing nature of experiences.

× So rural areas are the one that more I find more intriguing.

✓ So rural areas are the ones that I find more intriguing.

Errors: incorrect article/number agreement and word order. 'the one' is singular while 'rural areas' is plural; use 'the ones'. Also 'that more I find more intriguing' has duplicated 'more' and wrong word order — correct to 'that I find more intriguing.' Suggestion: Ensure plural noun uses plural pronoun and place verbs in normal order 'that I find...'.

× I prefer views in rural areas because I already I already live in urban areas and urban areas have been a norm in my life ever since childhood.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I already live in urban areas, and urban views have been the norm in my life since childhood.

Problems: repetition 'I already I already' is accidental duplication; sentence structure is slightly awkward. Use 'the norm' instead of 'a norm' for a recurring situation, and 'urban views' clarifies meaning. Keep present simple 'I live' for habitual situation.

× So I like to capture the areas and views which give me a sense of nostalgia.

✓ So I like to capture areas and views that give me a sense of nostalgia.

'Which' is acceptable but in spoken English 'that' is more natural for restrictive clauses. Also remove 'the' before 'areas' for general reference. This is a minor pronoun/usage adjustment to make the sentence more natural.

× Definitely in other countries because other countries give me a sense of, uh, nostalgia and they help me remind of all the trips that I have taken.

✓ Definitely in other countries because they give me a sense of nostalgia and remind me of all the trips I have taken.

Error: 'help me remind of' is incorrect verb pattern. Use 'remind me of' or 'help me remember'. Also remove filler 'uh' and redundant 'other countries' repetition by using 'they'. Maintain present simple 'they give' and present perfect 'I have taken' for past experiences with present relevance.

× Basically, it helps me create the memories and store my memories in my phone or laptop.

✓ Basically, they help me create and store memories on my phone or laptop.

Pronoun agreement: 'it' refers to 'other countries' (plural) so use 'they'. Also avoid repeating 'memories' twice; use 'create and store memories'. Use preposition 'on' for phones/laptops. This fixes subject-pronoun agreement and wordiness.

× It gives me a sense of control.

✓ They give me a sense of control.

If referring to 'other countries' or 'views', which are plural, the correct pronoun is 'they' not 'it'. Use plural verb agreement 'give'. This ensures subject-pronoun and subject-verb agreement.