Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Content is relevant but delivery has grammar and word-choice issues and is slightly repetitive. Make a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use “photos of” not “photos about”), avoid redundancy, and keep the response within 2–3 concise sentences. Add one brief specific example to make it more vivid. Use linking words only if adding details.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I often photograph everyday moments and travel scenes because pictures help me remember experiences; for example, I took several shots of a sunrise on a recent trip that remind me of that morning.

Sugestão: The response shows good idea contrast but has many vocabulary and grammar errors (e.g. “pitfall atmosphere,” “bus door,” “free living”) and some awkward phrasing. Use correct collocations (e.g. “peaceful atmosphere,” “bustle and noise”), link contrasting ideas with clear connectors (e.g. “on the other hand”), and limit to 3–4 sentences. Provide one concrete example (a park or a favorite restaurant) to support each preference.

Exemplo: It depends on my mood. If I want a peaceful atmosphere to relax, I prefer rural areas because they help me escape the hustle and bustle of daily life. On the other hand, I choose urban areas when I want convenience and entertainment, for example to visit museums or eat at a favorite restaurant.

Sugestão: Meaning is clear, but phrasing and grammar need correction (e.g. “prefer my own country,” “it has many,” “scenic spots” instead of “scenes”). Be slightly more specific about locations or activities and keep sentences concise. Use linking words such as “for example” appropriately and avoid repetition of similar adjectives.

Exemplo: I prefer visiting places in my own country because it has many stunning natural landscapes. For example, our coastal region has dramatic caves and well-known cycling routes that offer breathtaking views and attract many tourists.

× Yes, I'm a big fan of taking some photos about my life, about my experience, because I think that's the way to memorize the experience that I have.

✓ Yes, I'm a big fan of taking photos of my life and my experiences, because I think that's the best way to remember them.

Use 'taking photos of' not 'taking photos about'; 'some' is unnecessary with 'photos' here; 'experience' should be plural 'experiences' to match general meaning; 'memorize' is incorrect collocation for remembering life events — use 'remember'; simplify phrase 'the experience that I have' to 'them' to refer back to experiences.

× That depends on my mood. If I want a pitfall atmosphere to relax, I prefer rural areas because they help me escape from the hustle and bus door of daily life.

✓ That depends on my mood. If I want a peaceful atmosphere to relax, I prefer rural areas because they help me escape from the hustle and bustle of daily life.

The phrase 'pitfall atmosphere' is incorrect; use 'peaceful atmosphere'. 'Hustle and bus door' is a wrong collocation and likely a mispronunciation; correct phrase is 'hustle and bustle'. Ensure word choice matches intended meaning.

× However, when I need convenience and entertainment, I'd like free living in urban areas for the stops, restaurants and public transport.

✓ However, when I need convenience and entertainment, I prefer living in urban areas because of the shops, restaurants and public transport.

'I'd like free living' is ungrammatical; use 'I prefer living'. 'Stops' is vague and likely meant 'shops'; 'because of' expresses reason. Keep verb forms consistent and use correct nouns 'shops' and 'public transport'.

× I prefer using my own country because it's had many stunning natural landscapes.

✓ I prefer my own country because it has many stunning natural landscapes.

Do not use 'using' with 'prefer' here; 'prefer my own country' is correct. 'It's had' implies a perfect tense that is unnecessary and incorrect here — use simple present 'it has' to state a general fact.

× For example, there are scenes, caves and famous cycling routes along the coastline that attract many tourists and offer breathtaking scenery.

✓ For example, there are scenic sites, caves, and famous cycling routes along the coastline that attract many tourists and offer breathtaking views.

'Scenes' is awkward; use 'scenic sites' or 'scenery'. Use parallel list punctuation and choose 'breathtaking views' instead of repetitive 'scenery'. Ensure nouns are natural collocations.