Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cải thiện: Giảm các tiếng ấp úng (ví dụ: “uh”), tránh lặp từ (“love taking” nhiều lần) và sắp xếp ý rõ ràng hơn theo cấu trúc chủ đề + chi tiết. Thêm một câu miêu tả cụ thể để làm câu trả lời sống động hơn. Ví dụ cụ thể: nêu loại cảnh bạn thích chụp và một kỷ niệm ngắn liên quan.

Exemplo: Yes, I really enjoy photographing different views, especially when I travel. I mostly take landscape shots—mountains and coastlines—because they capture the atmosphere of a place. For example, last year I photographed a sunrise over a mountain lake, and that picture always reminds me of the calm morning.

Sugestão: Cải thiện: Sử dụng cấu trúc so sánh rõ ràng (e.g., “I prefer X to Y”), loại bỏ lỗi ngữ pháp (thiếu từ, sắp xếp sai) và tránh lặp từ chung chung (“the views”). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể và một liên từ để nối ý (e.g., “because”, “while”).

Exemplo: I prefer the countryside to the city because urban areas are mostly buildings and busy streets, while rural areas offer open skies, rivers and scenic fields. For instance, I enjoy photographing winding rivers and wide horizons in the countryside because they feel peaceful.

Sugestão: Cải thiện: Tránh ấp úng, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (động từ số nhiều: “have” not “has”), và tổ chức ý rõ ràng với một câu chủ đề + câu mở rộng + câu so sánh. Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về cảnh ở Việt Nam để chứng minh quan điểm.

Exemplo: I prefer the views in my own country because Vietnam has diverse landscapes—mountains, lakes and rice fields—that I find familiar and beautiful. For example, the terraced rice paddies in the north are a unique sight I always enjoy photographing, although I also appreciate scenic spots I’ve seen abroad.

× I love taking photos of many different views, especially when I am travelling.

✓ I love taking photos of many different views, especially when I am travelling.

No correction needed; present continuous 'am travelling' is correct for ongoing action while traveling and 'taking' correctly uses the -ing form after 'love' to express a habitual activity.

× I love taking lots of photos, uh, about the landscape because I think this is a good way to keep a good memory.

✓ I love taking lots of photos of the landscape because I think it is a good way to preserve memories.

The preposition 'about' is incorrect with 'photos'; use 'of'. 'Keep a good memory' is unnatural; use 'preserve memories' or 'keep memories'. Also replace the vague 'this is' with 'it is' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'photos of' + plural 'memories'.

× For me the countryside is better the city is because the city uh just has buildings and roads.

✓ For me the countryside is better than the city because the city just has buildings and roads.

Missing comparative connector 'than' after 'better'. Remove redundant 'is' and filler 'uh'. Keep sentence concise: 'better than the city'.

× Meanwhile rural areas are have a lot of good views like the sky, the views and the rivers.

✓ Meanwhile rural areas have a lot of beautiful views, like the sky and the rivers.

The phrase 'are have' is ungrammatical; use either 'are' with adjective or 'have' with noun. Here 'have a lot of beautiful views' is correct. 'The views' is vague and redundant; remove it. Use 'beautiful' rather than 'good' for natural description.

× But I think other countries has good views as well.

✓ But I think other countries have good views as well.

Subject 'countries' is plural, so verb must be 'have' not 'has'. Replace 'has' with 'have' for correct subject-verb agreement.