Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Clarify your position and avoid contradictions. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, use 1–2 supporting reasons, and correct basic grammar (watch verbs and articles). Use linking words like 'because' or 'however' to make ideas coherent and avoid filler sounds (uh). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I do enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me remember places and change my mood. For example, a seaside sunset can make me feel calm after a busy day. However, sometimes I prefer to just enjoy the scene without taking pictures.

Sugestão: Answer directly and use precise vocabulary. State your preference clearly, give 1–2 specific reasons with examples, and use linking words (because, especially). Correct word choice (views, urban areas) and plural agreement. Limit to up to 4 sentences and avoid hesitation.

Exemplo: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy modern architecture and city lights at night. For example, in winter the illuminated buildings and festive decorations look especially beautiful and create a lively atmosphere.

Sugestão: Give a clear, grammatical topic sentence and support it with specific details. Use correct nouns (views, landscapes) and consistent tense. Provide concrete examples (names of places or features) and one linking word (because, for example). Keep answers concise and avoid repeating words incorrectly.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because Afghanistan has many beautiful natural landscapes. For example, the valleys and waterfalls near my town are covered with green grass and trees, which I find more peaceful and familiar than foreign scenery.

× Yeah, of course I don't like taking picture of different views.

✓ Yeah, of course I like taking pictures of different views.

The student used a negation 'don't' that contradicts the intended meaning and used incorrect noun form 'picture' without plural. Change to positive 'like' and plural 'pictures' to match 'different views'. Also 'taking pictures' is the correct collocation.

× You know, sometime it's better to look the picture that from where you took a picture and you can definitely, uh, change your mood.

✓ You know, sometimes it's better to look at the pictures you took from where you were, and you can definitely change your mood.

Use 'sometimes' (adverb) not 'sometime'. Use 'look at' for viewing something. 'the picture that from where you took a picture' is ungrammatical; use 'the pictures you took from where you were' or 'the pictures you took there'. Also avoid repeating 'picture'. Ensure tense consistency: 'took' is fine for past action of taking the photos.

× I prefer weaves and urban areas because it's very modern areas and especially in winter, it looks very well, beautiful and gorgeous.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because they are very modern, and especially in winter they look very beautiful and gorgeous.

Several issues: 'weaves' and 'we use' are incorrect words; correct word is 'views'. Use plural 'areas' with plural pronoun 'they' rather than 'it'. 'Very well' is incorrect modifier for appearance; use 'very' plus adjective (beautiful). Keep consistent subject-verb agreement and remove redundant adjectives or reorder for clarity.

× So that's why I like, uh, we use an urban areas.

✓ So that's why I like urban areas.

The original contains nonsensical insertion 'we use' and wrong article 'an' before plural 'areas'. Remove the extraneous words and use the plural noun without an article: 'urban areas'.

× I prefer weaves in my own country because, uh, I am living in Afghanistan and Afghanistan has the most beautiful waves in here, like, uh, the areas which is very naturally covered with grass, trees, uh, natural waterfall and everything.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because I live in Afghanistan, and Afghanistan has the most beautiful places, like areas that are naturally covered with grass, trees, waterfalls, and so on.

Replace 'weaves/waves' with 'views' or 'places'. Use simple present 'I live' instead of 'I am living' for a permanent state. 'Most beautiful waves in here' is incorrect; likely 'places' or 'views'. Use plural agreement 'areas that are' and plural nouns 'waterfalls'. 'In here' is unnecessary; use 'in Afghanistan' or omit.

× So that's why I like leaves in my own country.

✓ So that's why I like views in my own country.

The word 'leaves' is incorrect in this context; the intended word is 'views'. Use consistent vocabulary to refer to landscapes or scenery.