Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Reduce hesitation and fillers (e.g. "uh") and make one clear topic sentence. Keep answer to 2–3 concise sentences: state that you enjoy photographing views and give a specific reason or brief example. Use linking words such as "because" or "so" to connect ideas and a more precise noun (e.g. "scenery" or "landscapes").

Exemplo: I love taking pictures of beautiful views because photographing landscapes helps me relax and remember special moments. For example, I often take photos of mountain sunsets when I travel, which motivates me to explore new places.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific reasons or examples, using linking words like "because" or "so". Use precise vocabulary (e.g. "cityscapes," "architecture," "street scenes") rather than vague words like "scenery will be scenery."

Exemplo: I prefer photographing urban areas because cityscapes and architecture offer more variety and interesting details. For example, I enjoy capturing contrast between old buildings and modern skyscrapers, especially at dusk when the lights create dramatic effects.

Sugestão: Reduce hesitations and use one clear topic sentence stating your preference, followed by specific supporting details about why you prefer your country’s views. Mention concrete examples (names or types of places) and use linking words like "because" and "for example."

Exemplo: I prefer the views in my own country because Uzbekistan has many beautiful mountain ranges and rivers that I enjoy photographing. For example, I often take photos of the Zarafshan valley and mountain streams because their colours and textures are unique and inspiring.

× Yes, of course I love uh, taking uh, pictures of the different uh, beautiful places because uh, when I take the uh, beautiful, uh, sceneries, I enjoy my life.

✓ Yes, of course I love taking pictures of different beautiful places because when I take beautiful scenery photos, I enjoy life.

Repeated filler words 'uh' removed for clarity; 'pictures of the different beautiful places' is streamlined to 'pictures of different beautiful places' for natural English; 'sceneries' is uncountable and awkward here, so use 'scenery' or 'scenery photos'; 'I enjoy my life' is more natural as 'I enjoy life'. Use of gerund 'taking' is correct but sentence needed rephrasing for natural collocation and word choice.

× It helps me to uh, to give me motivated to take the new pictures.

✓ It helps to motivate me to take new pictures.

The original mixes infinitive and passive-like forms incorrectly ('to give me motivated'). The correct structure is 'help to motivate someone' or 'help someone (to) do something'. Use the base verb 'motivate' rather than past participle 'motivated'. Also remove extra 'to' and filler words. 'New pictures' does not need 'the'.

× Tell the truth, I prefer, uh, taking the photos in the urban area because, uh, it, it, the scenery will be scenery.

✓ To tell the truth, I prefer taking photos in urban areas because the scenery is nice.

'Tell the truth' should be 'To tell the truth' or 'Honestly'. 'Taking the photos in the urban area' is better as 'taking photos in urban areas' (general preference). The phrase 'the scenery will be scenery' is ungrammatical and unclear; replace with 'the scenery is nice' or a specific adjective. Remove repeated words and fillers. This addresses sentence structure and word choice.

× Uh, is the beautiful.

✓ It is beautiful.

The fragment 'Uh, is the beautiful.' lacks a subject and uses an incorrect article. Use the subject 'It' and adjective 'beautiful' without 'the'. Removing filler 'Uh' improves clarity.

× So, uh, when I, uh, have a time, I always go to the urban place, urban area and take the, uh, different photos.

✓ So, when I have time, I always go to urban areas and take different photos.

'Have a time' is incorrect; use 'have time' for free time. 'Urban place, urban area' is repetitive—use 'urban areas'. 'Take the different photos' should be 'take different photos' without 'the'. Remove filler words. Gerund usage 'taking' not needed here; 'go ... and take' is fine.

× I prefer my, I prefer the views of in my country because I love the beautiful country in Uzbekistan, there are lots of mountainous rivers and beautiful sightseeing places.

✓ I prefer the views in my country because Uzbekistan is beautiful; there are many mountains, rivers, and sightseeing places.

'Views of in my country' mixes prepositions; correct is 'views in my country' or 'views of my country'. 'I love the beautiful country in Uzbekistan' is incorrect—Uzbekistan is the country, so say 'Uzbekistan is beautiful'. 'Lots of mountainous rivers' is awkward; separate nouns: 'many mountains, rivers'. Use plural 'many' for countable nouns. Use a semicolon or separate sentences to avoid comma splice.

× So I love the, this kind of places.

✓ So I love these kinds of places.

'The, this kind of places' mixes articles and demonstratives and has incorrect agreement. Use 'these kinds of places' or 'this kind of place'. 'Kind' requires singular with 'this' ('this kind of place') or plural with 'these kinds of places'.

× Uh, I, I, I took the lots of, uh, beautiful pictures also.

✓ I have also taken many beautiful pictures.

'I took the lots of' is incorrect collocation; use 'I took lots of' or better 'I have taken many'. For experience up to now, present perfect 'have taken' is appropriate. 'Lots of' or 'many' should follow correct word order: 'many beautiful pictures'. Remove filler words and extra article 'the'.