Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “I prefer sad music.”), then give one or two specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g. “this has no steak”) and watch verb forms and articles. Aim for 2–4 short sentences, include a specific example or effect of sad music on you.

Exemplo: I prefer sad music because it makes me feel more emotionally connected to the song. For example, slow melodies and melancholic lyrics help me reflect and relax after a stressful day. Because of that, I often choose sad songs when I want to calm down.

Sugestão: Make your answer more natural and specific. Begin with a direct response (Yes or No) and then provide one clear reason with a concrete example. Use correct grammar (e.g. “those kinds of music” → “that kind of music” or “those kinds of songs”) and link ideas with words like “because” or “for example.” Keep it concise and avoid repeating phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, happy music does make me feel excited because upbeat rhythms and joyful lyrics lift my mood. For example, when I hear a cheerful love song, I imagine romantic scenes and feel hopeful, even though I haven’t experienced a serious relationship yet.

× I prefer this has No steak because I think sadness make more feeling like make me more into the song and like quite slow down.

✓ I prefer sad songs because I think sadness creates stronger feelings and draws me into the song; they are also quite slow.

The sentence has multiple pronoun and noun phrase issues. 'this has No steak' is ungrammatical and likely meant 'sad songs' (incorrect pronoun/phrase). 'sadness make' is subject-verb agreement (use 'makes' but also better to use 'creates' here) and 'make me more into the song' uses incorrect pronoun/particle; 'draws me into the song' is correct. The sentence was long and fragmented; rewrite into a clear sentence. Suggestion: use clear subject noun ('sad songs' or 'sadness'), ensure verb agrees with singular/plural, and use appropriate verbs like 'draw' or 'create'.

× Yes, it is because those kind of music make me really excited about love, mostly so.

✓ Yes, it is, because that kind of music makes me really excited about love.

'Those kind of music' is incorrect: 'music' is an uncountable noun and should be paired with 'that kind of' (singular) or 'those kinds of music' (plural). Also 'make' should agree with the singular subject 'that kind of music' so use 'makes'. Remove unnecessary filler ('mostly so'). Suggestion: use 'that kind of music makes' for correct agreement and clarity.

× And I still don't have like real love, so I really excited when I heard.

✓ I still haven't experienced real love, so I get really excited when I hear those songs.

'I still don't have like real love' is informal and uses 'have' awkwardly; use 'haven't experienced real love'. 'I really excited' lacks the verb 'am' or better use 'get really excited'. 'when I heard' mixes tenses; use present simple 'when I hear' to match habitual reaction. Also specify 'those songs' for clarity. Suggestion: use correct auxiliary verbs and consistent tense for habitual actions.