Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more direct and organized: start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and unclear phrases ("it failed me", "fast relationships"). Use precise vocabulary (e.g. relaxing, uplifting, sad songs). Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer happy music because it usually makes me feel relaxed and uplifted. For example, upbeat songs with lively rhythms help me concentrate while I work, and their positive lyrics lift my mood after a stressful day.

Sugestão: Answer directly and explain clearly with one or two specific reasons. Use linking words such as "because" or "so" correctly and avoid repetition. Replace vague phrases ("they melody and anything is very talented") with concrete descriptions (e.g. catchy melody, lively beat). Keep it concise and natural.

Exemplo: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more energetic because the catchy melodies and fast tempo lift my spirits. For instance, when I listen to upbeat pop songs with a strong beat, I feel more motivated to exercise or work.

× Uh, yes, I prefer to, uh, have music because it may feel relaxed mind and uh, calm environment because, uh, I didn't like to uh, listen uh, sad song, but it failed me.

✓ Yes, I prefer to listen to happy music because it helps me feel relaxed and creates a calm environment; I do not like listening to sad songs because they make me feel worse.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure problems: unclear clause connections, incorrect verb forms, and awkward word order. 'Prefer to have music' should be 'prefer to listen to music'. 'May feel relaxed mind' is ungrammatical; correct: 'helps me feel relaxed' or 'relaxes me'. 'I didn't like to listen sad song' should be 'I do not like listening to sad songs' (present preference) and 'but it failed me' is vague; replace with 'because they make me feel worse'. Suggestion: break into shorter clauses, use correct verb phrases ('prefer to listen to', 'helps me feel', 'do not like listening to'), and ensure consistent tense and subject-verb structure.

× Uh, sometimes my fast relationships and anything I think happy music is.

✓ Sometimes when my relationships are intense or moving quickly, I think happy music suits me.

The original is unclear and uses incorrect tense and noun forms. 'My fast relationships' is awkward; express as 'when my relationships are intense or moving quickly'. 'I think happy music is' lacks an object or complement; use 'happy music suits me' or 'I prefer happy music'. Suggestion: clarify meaning, use present simple for general statements, and provide a clear predicate ('suits me').

× Yes, why not happy music make me happy, feel more excited because uh happy music uh like to I'm feel me, uh relaxed mind and calm environment because umm, they melody and anything is very talented.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me happy and feel more excited because it relaxes my mind and creates a calm environment; the melodies are very pleasant.

This sentence has subject-verb agreement, incorrect pronoun and verb usage, and awkward phrasing. 'Happy music make me' should be 'happy music makes me' (third person singular). 'Feel more excited' needs parallel structure: 'makes me happy and excited' or 'makes me happy and feel more excited'. 'Happy music like to I'm feel me' is ungrammatical; use 'it relaxes my mind'. 'They melody' should be 'the melodies' or 'the melody', but 'the melodies are very pleasant' is natural. Suggestion: use correct third-person singular verbs, restructure for clarity, and replace vague adjectives like 'talented' with appropriate descriptors such as 'pleasant' or 'beautiful'.