Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, correct grammar, and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words and correct verb forms. Avoid repetition (e.g. repeating 'especially').

Exemplo: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood. For example, I usually listen to upbeat pop songs on the train to work, which helps me feel relaxed and ready for the day.

Sugestão: Start with a clear direct response, then give a specific reason and one brief example. Improve grammar (articles, verb forms) and avoid vague phrases like 'make my day positive'. Use linking words such as 'because' or 'for example'.

Exemplo: Yes, it does because upbeat songs increase my energy and focus. For example, I often listen to K-pop on the commute before exams, which makes me feel more energetic and less nervous.

× I prefer happy music because happy music can make my whole day especially I will usually watch and listen music when I going to work especially on the train.

✓ I prefer happy music because it can make my whole day; I usually watch and listen to music when I go to work, especially on the train.

Present tense consistency and verb form errors: 'I will usually' is incorrect because the general habit should use simple present 'I usually'. 'when I going to work' lacks the correct verb form; it should be 'when I go to work'. Also 'listen music' requires the preposition 'to'. Use 'it' to avoid repeating 'happy music' and a semicolon or conjunction to join the clauses more naturally.

× It make me feel relaxed and enjoy.

✓ It makes me feel relaxed and happy.

Subject-verb agreement and word choice: 'It make' should be 'It makes' (third person singular). 'enjoy' is a verb and incomplete here; an adjective like 'happy' or the phrase 'I enjoy it' is needed. Using 'happy' keeps the sentence parallel: 'feel relaxed and happy.'

× Definitely yes, happy music can make my day positive and then I will usually listen the pop music on the train to work, especially K pop.

✓ Definitely; happy music can make my day positive, and I usually listen to pop music on the train to work, especially K-pop.

Tense and article/preposition usage: 'I will usually' is inappropriate for habitual actions; use simple present 'I usually'. 'listen the pop music' requires the preposition 'to' and usually no definite article: 'listen to pop music'. 'K pop' should be hyphenated as 'K-pop'.

× It can make me relax and energetic for tests ahead.

✓ It can make me relaxed and energetic for upcoming tests.

Verb form and adjective use: After 'make me' the correct structure is either 'make me feel relaxed' or use the adjective 'relaxed' rather than the base verb 'relax'. Also 'tests ahead' is awkward; 'upcoming tests' is more natural. Alternatively: 'It can make me feel relaxed and energetic before tests.'