Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one specific example and a brief reason. Reduce hesitations and grammar errors (e.g., use 'depending on' not 'depends upon my mood and the things when I which I'm doing'). Use linking words such as 'however' or 'for example' to connect ideas. Aim for 2–4 sentences, avoid repetition, and use correct verb forms and articles.

Exemplo: I enjoy both sad and happy songs, depending on my mood. For example, when I feel nostalgic I listen to old Bollywood classics because their melodies comfort me. However, when I want to feel upbeat I choose energetic tracks to lift my spirits.

Sugestão: Be direct and correct grammar: start with a clear affirmation, then give a specific activity and the effect. Fix subject-verb agreement and sentence structure (e.g., 'Music makes me feel' not 'make me feel'). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'so' to show cause and effect. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid repeating the same idea.

Exemplo: Yes, happy music makes me feel excited. For example, I listen to energetic Bollywood and hip-hop tracks when I run on the treadmill, so I feel more motivated and energetic during my workout.

× It depends upon my mood and the things when I which I'm doing.

✓ It depends on my mood and the things I am doing.

This sentence has incorrect relative pronoun placement and awkward preposition use. 'It depends on' is the correct phrase (not 'depends upon' is acceptable but 'depends on' is more natural). The clause 'when I which I'm doing' is ungrammatical; use a relative clause 'the things I am doing' or a temporal clause 'what I am doing'. Use present continuous 'I am doing' to match ongoing actions.

× Like if we uh, I prefer more the old fun songs, the old Bollywood songs, I love them and I feel down and I, I prefer uh, energetic songs when I feel happy.

✓ For example, I prefer old, fun Bollywood songs when I feel down, and I prefer energetic songs when I feel happy.

Multiple issues: word order and unnecessary filler words. 'I prefer more the old fun songs' is incorrect; place adjectives before the noun and remove 'more'. Use 'for example' instead of 'like if we uh'. Combine clauses clearly and use parallel structure: 'prefer X when I feel down' and 'prefer Y when I feel happy'. Also remove repeated hesitations.

× Yes, happy music make me feel very excited and I usually listen to the energetic happy songs of the Bollywood, love to listen them when I do the treadmill and I do exercise and it's make me very feel and I feel very energetic because of the hip hop songs.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me feel very excited, and I usually listen to energetic Bollywood songs; I love to listen to them when I use the treadmill or exercise, and they make me feel very energetic because of the hip hop beats.

Subject-verb agreement: 'music' is singular, so use 'makes' (third person singular). Use 'listen to' with a preposition. 'Love to listen them' needs 'listen to them'. 'When I do the treadmill' is unnatural; use 'when I use the treadmill' or 'when I run on the treadmill'. 'It's make me very feel' is incorrect: use 'they make me feel very energetic' with correct plural pronoun 'they' referring to songs and correct verb form 'make'. Also 'hip hop songs' -> 'hip hop beats' or 'hip hop songs' is acceptable; ensure clarity.