Music— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve clarity, relevance and grammar. Begin with a clear direct answer (topic sentence) stating your preference, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., singular/plural, verb forms) and use appropriate vocabulary (e.g., "rock/metal," not "acting music"). Keep answer to no more than 3–4 sentences to sound natural and coherent.

Exemplo: I prefer upbeat rock and metal rather than sad music. For example, I often listen to bands like AC/DC and Nirvana when I clean my room or do outdoor chores, because their fast tempo keeps me motivated. Also, I used to listen to metal a lot as a teenager, so it feels familiar and energizing.

Sugestão: Start with a concise direct answer, then add two specific examples linked with connectors (e.g., "for example," "also") and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement and pronoun use). Avoid irrelevant remarks like "that's a crazy place." Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "motivating," "energizing"). Keep to 2–4 sentences for natural delivery.

Exemplo: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more excited. For example, I play upbeat songs while cooking or cleaning at home because they motivate me to work faster; I also listen to energetic pop tracks at the gym since they help me keep my pace and energy high.

× Happy music make you feel more relaxed and less graceful.

✓ Happy music makes you feel more relaxed and more cheerful.

Subject-verb agreement and word choice: 'music' is singular so use 'makes' (Third person singular). 'Less graceful' is an odd choice; likely intended 'more cheerful' or 'happier'. Suggest using 'more cheerful' to convey positive emotion.

× And yet for my I listen to rock metal bands such as ACDC, Nirvana, especially when I'm doing work in my house regarding cleaning my room, doing outside activities and also additionally I've listened to metal rock in when I'm in teen or something.

✓ I listen to rock and metal bands such as AC/DC and Nirvana, especially when I'm doing chores at home, doing outdoor activities, or when I was a teenager.

Pronoun and word order issues: 'for my I' is incorrect; use 'I'. Use correct genre terms 'rock and metal' and band name formatting 'AC/DC'. 'Doing work in my house regarding cleaning my room' is awkward; 'doing chores at home' is clearer. 'Doing outside activities' -> 'doing outdoor activities'. Tense and phrase 'I've listened to metal rock in when I'm in teen' is incorrect; correct to past reference 'when I was a teenager'.

× Does happy music make you feel more excited?

✓ Does happy music make you feel more excited?

This question sentence is grammatically correct. 'Does' is the auxiliary and 'make' remains base form. No correction needed.

× Whoa, that's a crazy place.

✓ Whoa, that's surprising.

Word choice: 'crazy place' is odd in this context. 'Surprising' or 'That's unexpected' better fits a reaction to a question. Change improves appropriateness and clarity.

× And to be honest, I strongly believe that happy music make you feel more excited because I'm practically doing that in my life, own lifestyle.

✓ I strongly believe that happy music makes you feel more excited because I do that in my own life and lifestyle.

Subject-verb agreement: 'music' requires 'makes'. Pronoun and word order: 'I'm practically doing that in my life, own lifestyle' is awkward; use 'I do that in my own life' or 'in my lifestyle'. Remove redundant words.

× Whenever I'm doing work in my house regarding cooking, cleaning my room, I listen to happy music and they give me more motivation.

✓ Whenever I'm doing chores at home such as cooking or cleaning my room, I listen to happy music and it gives me more motivation.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference: 'music' is singular so use 'it gives' not 'they give'. 'Doing work in my house regarding' is awkward; 'doing chores at home such as' is clearer.

× And also when I'm in a gym, I listen to the happy music. It's giving more energy.

✓ Also, when I'm at the gym, I listen to happy music. It gives me more energy.

Article and preposition use: 'in a gym' should be 'at the gym' (common collocation). 'The happy music' is unnecessary; use 'happy music'. Verb form: 'It's giving more energy' is awkward; use simple present 'It gives me more energy' to state habitual effect.