School— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct minor grammar (use present simple) and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one supporting detail (travel time). Use linking words to connect ideas.

Exemplo: I go to a high school in the London district. It’s close to my house, so it only takes me about eight to ten minutes to get there.

Sugestão: Avoid hesitation markers (um, like) and vague words (kind of). Give a clear reason and one specific example of facilities or friends. Use a linking word to join reasons.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. After studying here for a year, I find the facilities excellent compared to other local schools, especially the well-equipped science labs. Also, my classmates are very friendly, which makes the school atmosphere welcoming.

Sugestão: Correct grammar and remove repetition. Give a clear topic sentence and a specific supporting detail (what resources make it good). Use linking words (for example, because) to explain why.

Exemplo: Yes, I think it’s a very good place to study because it offers many resources. For example, the school has a modern library and well-equipped classrooms that support learning.

Sugestão: Make sentences grammatically correct and avoid repetition. Start with a concise description, then add one or two specific examples of support from teachers or classmates, using linking words like and or for example.

Exemplo: The environment at my school is friendly and very supportive. For example, teachers are always willing to explain difficult topics, and classmates often form study groups to help each other.

Sugestão: This is a strong, concise answer. To improve further, add a brief personal example or consequence to make it more specific and natural, and ensure subject-verb agreement.

Exemplo: Interest in study is extremely important because it motivates students to engage deeply with learning and makes studying more enjoyable. For instance, when I’m interested in a subject, I spend more time reading and remember things better.

× So I'm studying in high school which is located in London district, so it's not that far from my house so it takes me about 8 to 10 minutes to go there.

✓ So I'm studying at a high school located in the London district, and it's not that far from my house; it takes me about 8 to 10 minutes to get there.

Use 'at' with institutions like 'high school' (preposition use). Add the definite article 'the' before 'London district' to specify the area (article/preposition). Replace repeated 'so' with a conjunction and a semicolon for clarity. Use 'get there' for natural movement phrasing instead of 'go there'. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Yes, definitely. I mean, after like one year studying in this school, I think that the quality of facilities in my school is kind of good, like better than other schools in my district. And my friends are also really friendly.

✓ Yes, definitely. After studying at this school for about one year, I think the quality of the facilities is quite good, better than those at other schools in my district. My friends are also very friendly.

'After like one year studying' is informal; use 'After studying... for about one year' (sentence structure). 'Quality of facilities in my school' is better expressed as 'the quality of the facilities' and compare using 'those at other schools' to avoid repeating 'schools' (pronoun/reference). Replace vague 'kind of' and 'like' with 'quite' for clearer adverb use (incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs and quantifier reduction). Grammar problem type ID:14

× Yeah, In my opinion, after studying in this school for one year, I think when the high school has so many, like so many good things for people to choose it. So it has a modern flexibilities like a library.

✓ Yeah. In my opinion, after studying at this school for one year, I think the high school has many good features that make people choose it; for example, it has modern facilities such as a library.

Original sentence is fragmented and ungrammatical ('I think when the high school has...'). Fix sentence structure: state the opinion then give reasons. Use 'many good features' instead of 'so many, like so many good things' (quantifier and redundancies). Use 'facilities' not 'flexibilities' (word choice). Use 'such as' to introduce examples. Ensure consistent preposition 'at' for institutions. Grammar problem type ID:26

× The environment at my school is friendly and supportive that my teachers always, always help me in my studies and help me deal with my problems and my friends, my classmates also yeah, support me in my studies and.

✓ The environment at my school is friendly and supportive; my teachers always help me with my studies and help me deal with my problems, and my classmates also support me in my studies.

Sentence was run-on and used 'that' incorrectly after 'supportive'. Split into two clauses and ensure subjects and verbs agree and parallel structure is used ('teachers always help', 'classmates also support'). Use 'help me with my studies' (preposition choice). Remove filler words for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:27

× Interest and study is extremely important because it motivates students to engage deeply with learning, making the process more enjoyable and sustainable.

✓ Interest and study are extremely important because they motivate students to engage deeply with learning, making the process more enjoyable and sustainable.

Compound subject 'Interest and study' is plural, so use plural verb 'are' (subject-verb agreement). Pronoun referring back must be plural ('they motivate'). Ensure agreement between subject, verb, and pronoun. Grammar problem type ID:27