School— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar and sentence structure: start with a clear topic sentence naming the school and its location, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct verbs and articles (e.g., “My school is located in Seoul. It’s called Kunming University.”). Avoid redundant phrases and incomplete clauses. Also be more precise about “professionals are really” — say what you mean (e.g., experienced teachers).

Exemplo: My school is called Kunming University and it is located in Seoul. It has many amenities, such as a well-stocked library and modern classrooms. The university also employs experienced professors who are helpful to students.

Sugestão: Fix grammatical errors and clarify meaning. Begin with a direct topic sentence (Yes, I do). Then give a clear reason using linking words (because, so). Explain what you mean by “clearer” and “air condition” — perhaps you mean fresh air or a calm environment. Keep it concise (max 3–4 sentences).

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I like my school because it is near the mountains, so the air is fresher and the campus feels peaceful. For example, I enjoy walking to class in the morning because the surroundings are quiet and green.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and give specific supporting details about why it is good to study there. Use linking words (because, for example) and correct phrasing (e.g., “a large, quiet library” and “comfortable seating helps me concentrate”). Avoid vague phrases like “focus on my stuff.”

Exemplo: Yes, I think it is a very good place to study because it has a large, quiet library. For example, there are comfortable chairs and study cushions which make it easy to concentrate for long periods.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a topic sentence describing the environment, then add 1–2 specific details. Correct vocabulary and phrasing (e.g., “cafés,” “concert hall”), and finish sentences fully. Explain what you mean by “almost free” — free services or affordable? Use linking words to connect ideas.

Exemplo: The campus environment is very convenient and lively. It has cafés, a library, modern classrooms and even a concert hall, and many services such as campus events and affordable cafés make student life easy.

Sugestão: This answer is fairly clear. Improve cohesion by starting with a direct statement and then giving a specific reason and an example. Use linking words (for example, therefore) and more precise phrasing (e.g., “engagement” or “motivation” instead of “focus”).

Exemplo: Interest is very important, in my opinion. If I am genuinely interested in my major, I am more motivated to study deeply; for example, when I enjoy a subject I spend extra time reading and doing projects, which improves my understanding.

× 'My school located in Seoul called Kunming University.'

✓ 'My school is located in Seoul and is called Kunming University.'

'Subject-verb agreement / sentence structure: The original sentence lacks the linking verb is after the subject My school. Add is twice to connect both predicates (located in Seoul; called Kunming University) or use and to join clauses. Suggestion: include the verb is after the subject for correct English.'

× 'My school has a lot of amenities like library and luxury classroom and professionals are really.'

✓ 'My school has a lot of amenities like a library and luxury classrooms, and the teachers are excellent.'

'Sentence structure and article use: Missing articles (a library), plural form for classroom (classrooms), and an incomplete clause professionals are really does not finish the idea. Replace professionals with teachers and complete the adjective excellent. Suggestion: use correct articles, pluralize where needed, and finish clauses with a descriptive adjective.'

× 'I really like my school because my school located in nearby mountains so my university is clearer and air condition in Seoul.'

✓ 'I really like my school because it is located near the mountains, so the air is clearer and the climate is better than in Seoul.'

'Present tense and sentence structure: Missing linking verb is after my school; nearby should be near when used with located; unclear phrase air condition is unclear and missing article. Rephrase to air is clearer and the climate is better to convey meaning. Suggestion: include is after the subject, use near the mountains, and express air/climate clearly.'

× 'Absolutely yes because my school has a huge quiet time library and there are a lot of comfortable cushions and chairs so it tells me focus on my stuff.'

✓ 'Absolutely. My school has a very large, quiet library, and there are a lot of comfortable cushions and chairs, so it helps me focus on my work.'

'Sentence structure and word choice: huge quiet time library is awkward — use large, quiet library. so it tells me focus on my stuff is ungrammatical; use helps me focus on my work. Suggestion: break into two sentences or use commas, choose natural collocations (quiet library, focus on my work).'

× 'My school has a lot of amenities like cafe, library, classroom and concert to hall.'

✓ 'My school has a lot of amenities like a cafe, a library, classrooms, and a concert hall.'

'Incorrect use of prepositions and articles: concert to hall is incorrect — should be concert hall. Missing articles before singular nouns (a cafe, a library, a concert hall) and classroom should be plural if referring generally. Suggestion: use correct noun forms and place articles before singular countable nouns.'

× 'It is really convenient because almost free and.'

✓ 'It is really convenient because most services are free.'

'Sentence structure error: fragment and is incomplete. almost free and is not a complete idea. Rephrase to a full clause such as most services are free to complete the sentence. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments; ensure subject and verb are present.'

× 'It depends on the person, but I think it is really essential for me because if I don't like my major, I don't focus on my studies more deeply.'

✓ 'It depends on the person, but I think it is really essential for me because if I don't like my major, I won't focus on my studies deeply.'

'Present tense consistency and modal usage: The conditional about future consequence needs will (or won’t) in the main clause: if I don't like my major, I won't focus on my studies deeply. Using don't focus mixes present tense and intended future result. Suggestion: use will/won't for likely future consequences and place adverb deeply after the verb.'