Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers (umm, uh), repetition, and incorrect verb forms. Also correct word choice (e.g., “second-hand bike,” “secondary school,” “every day,” and replace “cursed”/“inconvenient” with intended ideas like “comfortable” or “free”).

Exemplo: Yes. I had a second‑hand bike when I was at secondary school. My mother bought it for me, and I rode it to school every day because it was much faster than walking and saved me time. I also enjoyed the freedom it gave me around the neighborhood.

Sugestão: Provide a clear direct answer and support it with specific reasons and examples. Use correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., “bicycles,” “developing country,” “play an important role in transport and infrastructure”). Use linking words like “because,” “for example,” or “therefore.” Avoid repetition and fillers.

Exemplo: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in Vietnam because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many students and workers use bicycles or motorbikes to commute, and in many cities bicycles are important for local transport. Therefore they still play a significant role in daily life.

× Yes umm, my, when I was a secondary school, my mom bought me a second hand bike and I really love it.

✓ Yes. When I was in secondary school, my mom bought me a second-hand bike and I really loved it.

Tense consistency and preposition: The sentence mixes past context with present tense 'love'. Use past tense 'loved' to match 'bought' and 'when I was'. Also use the preposition 'in' with 'secondary school' and hyphenate 'second-hand' as a compound adjective. Remove filler words and extra commas for clarity.

× I, I rode my bike uh, to school every single days and I'll be cursed uh, it's faster than walking umm, and make me feel more inconvenient.

✓ I rode my bike to school every single day and I was convinced it was faster than walking, and it made me feel less inconvenienced.

Plural and verb issues: 'every single days' is incorrect; use singular 'day'. 'I'll be cursed' is incorrect and likely intended 'I was convinced' (past belief). Also verb agreement and tense: 'make me feel more inconvenient' is incorrect because 'inconvenient' is an adjective describing things, not feelings; use 'inconvenienced' (past participle) and adjust polarity to 'less inconvenienced' or rephrase. Ensure past tense consistency with 'rode' and 'bought'.

× I think yes, because umm, I, I'm living in, I'm living in Vietnam and it is uh, uh, developing countries.

✓ I think so, because I live in Vietnam and it is a developing country.

Number agreement and tense: 'I'm living in' is acceptable but simple present 'I live in' is more natural for a permanent fact. 'Developing countries' is plural while referring to Vietnam (singular); use 'a developing country'. Also use 'so' instead of 'yes' after 'I think' for natural phrasing.

× So bias is one of the most vital role in umm, infrastructure.

✓ So bikes play one of the most vital roles in infrastructure.

Word choice and preposition: 'bias' is a misspelling; should be 'bikes'. Use 'play' with 'role' and pluralize 'role' to 'roles' when saying 'one of the most vital roles'. 'In infrastructure' is correct but sentence needed subject-verb agreement and correct noun form.