Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct past tense and concise structure. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy (don’t repeat tense explanations) and keep to under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was in seventh grade, and I rode it everywhere — to school and around the neighborhood. I was a confident rider and even learned a few tricks, but I sold it two years ago when I moved to the city.

Sugestão: Make your opinion clearer and provide specific reasons with linking words. Use natural phrasing and correct collocations (e.g., “daily use”, “stay fit”, “in the afternoons”). Provide one or two concrete examples to support your view and keep sentences well connected.

Exemplo: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people use bikes for daily commuting because they are cheap and convenient, and others ride them in the afternoons to stay fit. For example, you can often see parents cycling with their children near local parks and students riding to school.

× Yes, in my childhood I have owned a bike.

✓ Yes, in my childhood I owned a bike.

The speaker refers to a finished situation in the past (childhood), so the simple past 'owned' is correct. Using present perfect 'have owned' is inappropriate with a finished time expression ('in my childhood'). Use simple past for completed past events.

× I said I have owned because I already sold it two years ago.

✓ I said I owned it because I sold it two years ago.

The clause refers to a specific finished time ('two years ago'), so simple past 'sold' is required. Also 'I have owned' is inconsistent; use 'I owned' to match past reference. Keep verb tenses consistent within the sentence.

× I was a very good rider at that time.

✓ I was a very good rider then.

'At that time' is not wrong but 'then' is more natural and concise here. The original is acceptable grammatically, but shortening improves fluency. Keep simple past 'was' for past state.

× When I was on Class 7, my parents bought.

✓ When I was in Class 7, my parents bought me a bike.

The original sentence is incomplete: 'bought' needs an object (what was bought and for whom). Also preposition 'in' is used with class/grade, not 'on'. Provide the object 'me a bike' to complete the idea and use 'in Class 7' for correct preposition.

× Yes, I think because in my country people use bikes for daily uses.

✓ Yes, I think so because in my country people use bikes for daily use.

Use the phrase 'daily use' (uncountable) rather than 'daily uses'. Also 'I think so' is a natural response. Present simple 'use' is correct for habitual actions.

× They also want to keep fit their fitness.

✓ They also want to keep fit.

'Keep fit' is the correct idiom. 'Their fitness' is redundant and incorrectly placed. Remove the extra noun to make a natural expression.

× That's why people use bikes in afternoon.

✓ That's why people use bikes in the afternoon.

When referring to parts of the day in general, use the definite article 'the afternoon'. Also present simple 'use' is correct for habitual actions.

× Many young children ride their bikes near their neighborhood.

✓ Many young children ride their bikes near their neighborhood.

The original sentence is grammatically acceptable but may be improved to 'in their neighborhood' depending on variety: 'near their neighborhood' suggests close by outside it, while 'in their neighborhood' means inside it. If the intended meaning is inside, change 'near' to 'in'. No change required if near is intended.