Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Focus on correct grammar, concise structure, and use linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (like "like", "uh"), correct verb tense (use past simple), and keep it within 2–3 sentences. Add one specific detail (e.g. model or where you rode it) using a linking word to support the main idea.

Exemplo: Yes. I had a bike when I was ten because my father gave it to me as a present. It was a black mountain bike, and I rode it every day around my neighbourhood, which made me feel very independent.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence, use coherent linking words, and give specific reasons with fewer repetitions. Correct subject-verb agreement and avoid vague phrases. Limit to 2–3 sentences: state opinion, then support with 1–2 specific reasons or examples (e.g. affordability, health, traffic).

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in India because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many commuters and students use motorcycles or scooters to avoid traffic, and recently more people choose bicycles for exercise and environmental reasons.

× Yes, I do had a bike like when I was a child that time like I was just 10 years old and uh, my father gave me a gift.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; I was about 10 years old when my father gave it to me as a gift.

The student used 'do had' which incorrectly mixes present auxiliary 'do' with past 'had'. The context is past time ('when I was a child'), so simple past should be used. Also sentence is repetitive and disfluent; combine clauses and use pronoun 'it' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: use simple past verbs (had, was, gave) and make sentences concise.

× So that was a bike that he gave me and it was in a black color and it was so beautiful because it was my first bike that I ever ride.

✓ That was the bike he gave me; it was black and very beautiful because it was the first bike I ever rode.

Several issues: 'in a black color' is unnatural — use 'black' as adjective; 'so beautiful' is acceptable but 'very beautiful' is more natural; 'that I ever ride' mixes present tense with past context — use past 'rode'. Also 'the first bike' uses article 'the'. Suggestion: use correct adjective placement ('black'), correct past tense ('rode'), and proper article ('the').

× Yes, bikes are so popular in my country because it's a very uh, main source like main transportation.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are a common means of transportation.

'It's a very main source like main transportation' is ungrammatical and uses 'it' incorrectly for plural 'bikes'. Use plural pronoun 'they' and the noun phrase 'a common means of transportation' instead of 'main source'. Also replace 'are so popular' with 'are very popular' for formality. Suggestion: match pronouns to nouns and use natural collocations.

× Like in India mostly older people like elders always use bikes and also children also nowadays used bikes.

✓ In India, mostly older people and elders always use bikes, and children nowadays also use bikes.

Redundant words 'older people like elders' should be streamlined; repetition 'also children also' is redundant. Verb 'used' is past but context implies habitual action, so use present 'use'. Ensure pronoun and noun consistency. Suggestion: remove duplication and use present simple for habitual actions.

× So it's important for everyone. I think right now because of the health so they're preferring bikes right now but.

✓ So it's important for everyone. I think that, because of health reasons, people are preferring bikes now.

'Because of the health' is incorrect article and noun usage — use 'because of health reasons'. 'They're preferring' uses progressive with a stative verb; although 'prefer' is usually simple present for habits ('people prefer'), current trend can be expressed with 'are preferring' but 'people are preferring bikes now' is less natural than 'people prefer' or 'people are choosing bikes more now'. Also trailing 'but' leaves sentence incomplete. Suggestion: use 'people prefer' or 'people are choosing bikes more now' and complete the thought; remove redundant 'right now'.