Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (e.g., “uh”, “yeah”), correct awkward phrasing (e.g., “stay above, to be stable”), and add one specific detail to enrich the answer. Keep it under five sentences and use linking words for coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle when I was about seven, and I loved riding it around the neighborhood. It helped me develop balance and confidence, so I spent many afternoons practicing with my friends. Overall, having that bike is one of my fondest childhood memories.

Sugestão: Make your opinion direct, fix grammar and word choice, add a specific example or statistic, and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid vague phrases (e.g., “Rd. trips”) and plural errors (e.g., “peoples”). Limit to up to five clear sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, on recent road trips I often saw many people cycling for exercise and commuting to work. Because cycling is affordable and healthy, more cities now have bike lanes and shared bicycles, which encourages even more people to ride.

× It was, uh, wonderful time back then.

✓ It was, uh, a wonderful time back then.

Missing article 'a' before the singular countable noun 'wonderful time'. Add 'a' to make the noun phrase grammatical. Suggestion: include appropriate articles before singular countable nouns (a/an/the).

× it helped me practice to stay above, to be stable, Yeah.

✓ it helped me practice staying balanced.

After 'practice' the gerund (-ing) form is required when expressing an activity (practice doing something). 'stay above' is unnatural; 'stay balanced' or 'be stable' should be in gerund form. Suggestion: use 'practice' + verb-ing and choose appropriate collocation like 'stay balanced'.

× When I was taking Rd. trips I would see peoples biking and it is like an exercise.

✓ When I was taking road trips I would see people biking and it was like exercise.

'Peoples' is incorrect pluralization; the correct plural of 'person' is 'people'. 'Rd.' should be expanded to 'road'. Tense consistency: main clause 'When I was taking...' pairs better with 'it was' not 'it is'. Also 'exercise' as an uncountable noun does not need 'an'. Suggestion: use 'people' for plural, avoid abbreviations, keep tense consistent, and use uncountable nouns correctly.

× It's really fun to see that people are still healthy.

✓ It was really fun to see that people were still healthy.

The student speaks about past experiences (when they were taking road trips). To keep tense consistent, change present 'It's' and 'are' to past 'It was' and 'were'. Suggestion: maintain the same time frame within related sentences.